Feb. 18, 2025
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I am great exited to give my great greetings to you, as I get your company information from 2024 canton fair in Guangzhou China.
My name is Haley Dong from YNT company, which focus on home bedding products, like bedspread / sheet set / comforter set of 100% polyester woven material. Attached pls find our company introduction and you will know who we are and what can we do.
Hope one day, if you need one more home bedding vendor from China, you can remember me and contact haley anytime. Thank you.
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I am great exitpleased to give my greatyou my greetings to you, as. I geot your company information from the 2024 canton fair in Guangzhou, China.
My name is Haley Dong from the YNT company, which focuses on home bedding products, like bedspread /s, sheet set /and comforter sets made of a 100% polyester woven material.
Attached plsease find our company introducformation and youit will knowgive you comprehensive information on who we are and what can we do.
HI hope one day, if you need one moreanother home bedding vendosupplier from China, you canwill remember me and. Please contact haleyme anytime.
Thank you.
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I am greatpleased to exitend to give my greatmy greetings to you, as I geot your company information from 2024 canton fair in Guangzhou China.
My name is Haley Dong from YNT company, which focuses on home bedding products, like bedspread / sheet set / comforter set of 100% polyester woven material.
Attached plsease find our company introduction andso you willcan know who we are and what we can we do.
HopeI hope that one day, if you need one more home bedding vendor from China, you can remember me and contact haleyme at any time.
Thank you.
I am great exited to give my great greetings to you, as I gegot your company information from the 2024 cCanton fFair in Guangzhou China.
The author appears to be mistaking "very" with "great" here. Guangzhou is a known city, no need to add "China."
My name is Haley Dong from YNT company, which focuspecializes oin home bedding products, like bedspread / sheet set / comforter set of 100% polyester woven material.
Copy pasting the item description gives the impression this was written by chatGPT. Also there is little appeal to highlight 100% polyester products. This would only be exciting if it was 100% cotton or silk.
Attached plsease find our company introduction and you will know who we are and what can we doformation sheet.
The moment you use internet slang or short hand your business email will not be taken seriously.
HopPlease done day, if you need one more home bedding vendor from China, you can remember me and contact haley anytime.'t hesitate to reach out if you are considering a new home bedding vendor!
Give them a specific timeline, because in a cold email a "one day" will be never.
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Cold emails are hard to hook someone's attention! Next time, think what makes your company's offering distinct?
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I am great exited to give my great greetings to you, as I get your company information from 2024 canton fair in Guangzhou China. I The author appears to be mistaking "very" with "great" here. Guangzhou is a known city, no need to add "China." I am I am |
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My name is Haley Dong from YNT company, which focus on home bedding products, like bedspread / sheet set / comforter set of 100% polyester woven material. My name is Haley Dong from YNT company, which Copy pasting the item description gives the impression this was written by chatGPT. Also there is little appeal to highlight 100% polyester products. This would only be exciting if it was 100% cotton or silk. My name is Haley Dong from YNT company, which focuses on home bedding products, like bedspread / sheet set / comforter set of 100% polyester woven material. My name is Haley Dong from the YNT company, which focuses on home bedding products, like bedspread |
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Attached pls find our company introduction and you will know who we are and what can we do. Attached pl The moment you use internet slang or short hand your business email will not be taken seriously. Attached pl Attached pl |
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Hope one day, if you need one more home bedding vendor from China, you can remember me and contact haley anytime.
Give them a specific timeline, because in a cold email a "one day" will be never.
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