Aug. 7, 2021
Brother Daxiong (part three)
I remember deeply that there was one time he praised me with big improvement, and told me what my speed was. Furthermore, he encouraged me to swim in the deep pool. I told him that I was so afraid. He said that he sould accompany me by my side. I looked at the pool and there were so many people, then I took a deep breath and swam. He swam slowly to adapt my speed and led the way. I wasn't afraid any more and felt so content that I got such a nice person to teach me how to swim.
I wanted to learn swimming when I was a child. My father hold my hands to let me float. I was so scared that I always sank. He soon became very impatient and asked me to play in the shallow water so he could go on swimming.
So Daxiong behavioured more like a father to me, which kind I desired. In a sense, we were strangers to each other. But he gave me so many attention and kindness that my father never did. And I am unable to do the same things to a stanger like him. So I really felt lucky to meet him.
As I left the city, I have never seen him again. Wish him all the best.
Brother Daxiong (part three)
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So I really feltI felt very lucky to meet him.
AsSince I left the city, I have never seen him again.
Wish him all the bestI hope he is doing well.
"Wish you all the best" is more common when you are saying goodbye to someone, if you are talking about someone you used to know, you could say "I hope he is doing well"
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I remember deeply that there was one time he praised me with big improvement, and told me what my speed was. I remember "Vividly" is often used for memories that are very clear in your mind |
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Furthermore, he encouraged me to swim in the deep pool. Furthermore, he encouraged me to swim in the deep end of pool. |
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I told him that I was so afraid. I told him that I was |
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He said that he sould accompany me by my side. He said that he |
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I looked at the pool and there were so many people, then I took a deep breath and swam. I looked at the pool and saw that there were so many people |
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He swam slowly to adapt my speed and led the way. He swam slowly to |
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I wasn't afraid any more and felt so content that I got such a nice person to teach me how to swim. I wasn't afraid any more and felt |
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I wanted to learn swimming when I was a child. I wanted to learn to swim |
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My father hold my hands to let me float. My father would hold my hands |
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I was so scared that I always sank. I was so scared that I would always s |
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He soon became very impatient and asked me to play in the shallow water so he could go on swimming. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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So Daxiong behavioured more like a father to me, which kind I desired. So Daxiong behav |
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In a sense, we were strangers to each other. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But he gave me so many attention and kindness that my father never did. But he gave me so m |
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And I am unable to do the same things to a stanger like him. And I am unable to do the same things to a stranger like him. Not sure what you were trying to say with this sentence, its a little confusing. |
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So I really felt lucky to meet him.
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As I left the city, I have never seen him again.
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Wish him all the best.
"Wish you all the best" is more common when you are saying goodbye to someone, if you are talking about someone you used to know, you could say "I hope he is doing well" |
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