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Brief retelling of Alice in wonderland chapter 1

It was a hot summer day. Alice was sat next to her sister on the bank, and she is too tired with her sister's no picture and conversation book, nearly got to sleep. Suddenly she saw a white rabbit with whitecoat looking at he's watch. "hurry up, hurry up, I will be late" the rabbit said and hastily ran away.
Alice was so curious about the rabbit that she hurry off following the rabbit and down to a deep rabbit hole. After a long time fall, Alice drew into a room with a lot of locked door.
Looked for a few minutes, Alice found a small door which lead into a lovely garden. But for Alice the door is too small to across it. A few tries after, the little poor Alice still haven't open the door, she sat down and cried so hard, all of her tear have becoming a tear pool.


This is the brief retelling of Alice in wonderland chapter 1. Could you please help me correct the mistakes and replace it with daily usage.

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Brief retelling of Alice in wWonderland cChapter 1

Use of capital letters in the title

It was a hot summer day.

Alice was sat next to her sister on the bank, and she is toowas tired withof her her sister's no picture and conversation book, with no pictures and she nearly got to fell asleep.

Suddenly she saw a wrhite rabbit with writeaistcoat looking at he'is watch.

"hHurry up, hurry up, I will be late" the rabbit said and hastiquickly ran away.

Alice was so curious about the rabbit that she hurryied off following the rabbit and went down to a deep rabbit hole.

LookeShe looked around for a few minoments, Alice and found a small door which lead into a lovely garden.

But for Alice the door iwas too small to across itgo through.

After a few tries after, the, poor little poor Alice still haven'couldn’t open the door, and she sat down and cried so hard, that all of her tear have becoming a tear pools became a pool of water.

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zoe0017

March 14, 2022

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Thank you so much!

It was a hot summer day.

Alice was satitting next to her sister on the bank, and s. She iwas too tibored with her sister's no picture and conversation book,book which had no pictures in it and nearly got tofell sleep.

Suddenly she saw a wrhite rabbit within a wrhite coat looking at he'its/his watch.

"hHurry up, hurry up, I willam going to be late!" the rabbit said andbefore hastily ranunning away.

Alice was so curious about the rabbit that she hurry off followinged the rabbit and down into a deep rabbit hole.

After a long time fall, Alice drew intocame across a room with a lots of locked doors.

Looked foAfter a few minentutes, Alice found a small door which lead into a lovely garden.

But unfortunetly, for Alice the door iwas too small to across itgo through.

A few tries lafter, the poor little poor Alice still haven't open the door,couldn't get the door to open. So she sat down and cried sovery hard, until all of her tear have becos ended up forming a tear pool.

zoe0017's avatar
zoe0017

March 14, 2022

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Thank you so much!

Brief retelling of Alice in wonderland chapter 1

It was a hot summer day.

Alice was seated next to her sister on the bank, and she is too tiso bored with her sister's no n-picture and conversation book,book that she nearly got to fell asleep.

Suddenly she saw a wrhite rabbit within a wrhite coat looking at he'is watch.

Maybe you meant a waistcoat? I went with "white coat" since the typo matched "write/white" before it.

"hHurry up, hurry up, I will'm going to be late", the rabbit said andbefore hastily ranunning away.

Alice was so curious about the rabbit that she hurryied off following ithe rabbit and down to a deep rabbit hole.

After a long time fall, Alice drewcame into a room with a lot of locked doors.

LookedAfter looking for a few minentutes, Alice found a small door which lead ing to a lovely garden.

But for Alice the door iwas too small to across itenter.

A few tries after, thefter many tries, poor little poor Alice still haven't opencouldn't enter the door, s. She sat down and cried so hard, all of her tear have becoming a tears formed a pool.

zoe0017's avatar
zoe0017

March 14, 2022

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Thank you so much!

Brief retelling of Alice in wonderland chapter 1


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Brief retelling of Alice in wWonderland cChapter 1

Use of capital letters in the title

It was a hot summer day.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Alice was sat next to her sister on the bank, and she is too tired with her sister's no picture and conversation book, nearly got to sleep.


Alice was seated next to her sister on the bank, and she is too tiso bored with her sister's no n-picture and conversation book,book that she nearly got to fell asleep.

Alice was satitting next to her sister on the bank, and s. She iwas too tibored with her sister's no picture and conversation book,book which had no pictures in it and nearly got tofell sleep.

Alice was sat next to her sister on the bank, and she is toowas tired withof her her sister's no picture and conversation book, with no pictures and she nearly got to fell asleep.

Suddenly she saw a write rabbit with writecoat looking at he's watch.


Suddenly she saw a wrhite rabbit within a wrhite coat looking at he'is watch.

Maybe you meant a waistcoat? I went with "white coat" since the typo matched "write/white" before it.

Suddenly she saw a wrhite rabbit within a wrhite coat looking at he'its/his watch.

Suddenly she saw a wrhite rabbit with writeaistcoat looking at he'is watch.

"hurry up, hurry up, I will be late" the rabbit said and hastily ran away.


"hHurry up, hurry up, I will'm going to be late", the rabbit said andbefore hastily ranunning away.

"hHurry up, hurry up, I willam going to be late!" the rabbit said andbefore hastily ranunning away.

"hHurry up, hurry up, I will be late" the rabbit said and hastiquickly ran away.

Alice was so curious about the rabbit that she hurry off following the rabbit and down to a deep rabbit hole.


Alice was so curious about the rabbit that she hurryied off following ithe rabbit and down to a deep rabbit hole.

Alice was so curious about the rabbit that she hurry off followinged the rabbit and down into a deep rabbit hole.

Alice was so curious about the rabbit that she hurryied off following the rabbit and went down to a deep rabbit hole.

After a long time fall, Alice drew into a room with a lot of locked door.


After a long time fall, Alice drewcame into a room with a lot of locked doors.

After a long time fall, Alice drew intocame across a room with a lots of locked doors.

Looked for a few minents, Alice found a small door which lead into a lovely garden.


LookedAfter looking for a few minentutes, Alice found a small door which lead ing to a lovely garden.

Looked foAfter a few minentutes, Alice found a small door which lead into a lovely garden.

LookeShe looked around for a few minoments, Alice and found a small door which lead into a lovely garden.

But for Alice the door is too small to across it.


But for Alice the door iwas too small to across itenter.

But unfortunetly, for Alice the door iwas too small to across itgo through.

But for Alice the door iwas too small to across itgo through.

A few tries after, the little poor Alice still haven't open the door, she sat down and cried so hard, all of her tear have becoming a tear pool.


A few tries after, thefter many tries, poor little poor Alice still haven't opencouldn't enter the door, s. She sat down and cried so hard, all of her tear have becoming a tears formed a pool.

A few tries lafter, the poor little poor Alice still haven't open the door,couldn't get the door to open. So she sat down and cried sovery hard, until all of her tear have becos ended up forming a tear pool.

After a few tries after, the, poor little poor Alice still haven'couldn’t open the door, and she sat down and cried so hard, that all of her tear have becoming a tear pools became a pool of water.

Suddenly she saw a white rabbit with whitecoat looking at he's watch.


Looked for a few minutes, Alice found a small door which lead into a lovely garden.


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