March 19, 2021
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“When I went for the police, five people, four of them accepted, I was the only guy they didn’t”
This paragraph was picked from a speech of Jack Ma. I think there may be something wrong with this sentence, but I am not sure. At least, I think “four of them accepted” is wrong, shouldn’t it be “four of them were accepted”? Shouldn’t this sentence be in passive voice? And the first sentence “I went for the police” is a bit off. Shouldn’t it be “I went to the police station to apply for a policeman”? Because my English is limited, I asked for your help.
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This paragraphsentence was picked from a speech ofby Jack Ma.
This sentence was picked from a speech by Jack Ma.
I think there may be something wrong with this sentence, but I am not sure.
At least, I think “four of them accepted” is wrong,; shouldn’t it be “four of them were accepted”?
At least, I think “four of them accepted” is wrong; shouldn’t it be “four of them were accepted”?
Shouldn’t this sentence be in passive voice?
And the first sentence “I went for the police” is a bit off.
Shouldn’t it be “I went to the police station to apply forto be a policeman”?
Shouldn’t it be “I went to the police station to apply to be a policeman”?
Because my English is limited, I asked for your help.
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Yeah, this sentence is definitely weird. It doesn't actually sound that unnatural in speech I guess because people often don't use correct grammar, but it's definitely bad practice. I would probably have said "When I applied to be a police officer, there were five people applying. Four of them were accepted; I was the only guy who wasn't." You're right that the second bit should be passive and also the last bit "I was the only guy they didn't" makes no sense here because "they" wouldn't have been the subject in the second part.
March 19, 2021
Thank you very much.
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“When I went for the police, five people, four of them accepted, I was the only guy they didn’t” |
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This paragraph was picked from a speech of Jack Ma.
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I think there may be something wrong with this sentence, but I am not sure. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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At least, I think “four of them accepted” is wrong, shouldn’t it be “four of them were accepted”?
At least, I think “four of them accepted” is wrong |
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Shouldn’t this sentence be in passive voice? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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And the first sentence “I went for the police” is a bit off. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Shouldn’t it be “I went to the police station to apply for a policeman”?
Shouldn’t it be “I went to the police station to apply |
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Because my English is limited, I asked for your help. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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