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pascal00d

Jan. 16, 2026

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Swimming!

I’ve started a new sport this year and I’m happier than I could expect!
I learnt to swim at school when I was about 10 years old, but my technique was pretty basic and I was not confident at all. For example, I didn’t put my head under the water, as I didn’t like it, but you can’t have an efficient swim by this way and you will be quickly exhausted.
However, I love swimming in pools or at the beach during holidays, or even just the pleasure of floating in the water. So I had that idea in my head for many years that one day I would take some lessons to improve my swimming skills.
On last September, I moved in a new house and by chance there is a public swimming pool at less than ten minutes by foot. So, no excuse anymore!
I subscribed the lessons for a year, one hour a week except during the school holidays when there are no lessons. However, I hadn’t imagined learning swimming would be so difficult at the very beginning!
I really struggled to manage my breathing. Nothing could be more logical than exhaling under the water and inhaling above it. Nevertheless, in practice my brain was overwhelmed by trying to do the right movement for every body part at the right time. As soon as I lost my concentration, the punishment was immediate : I swallowed water, I choked and I panicked!
Thanks to the coach’s exercices and support, I haven’t given up and I’ve even made such progress than I’m now able to do a swim lap — 25 metres — almost without a pause for 3 swimming styles — front crawl, breaststroke and backstroke.
I’m eager to improve myself even more until I can glide over the water!

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I’ve started a new sport this year, and I’m happier than I could expected!

Add a comma before “and.”
Use the past tense “expected” to match the time frame.

I learnted to swim at school when I was about 10 years old, but my technique was pretty basic, and I was not confident at all.

“Learned” is the standard American English form (though “learnt” is fine in British English).

For example, I didn’t put my head under the water, as I didn’t like it, but you can’t have answim efficient swim bly this way, and you will be quickly become exhausted.

Swim efficiently” is the natural phrasing.
Add a comma for clarity.
“Quickly become exhausted” is smoother.

On lLast September, I moved into a new house, and by chance, there is a public swimming pool atwithin less than ten minutes by foot.

Remove “On.”
Use “moved into” instead of “moved in” when referring to a house.
Change preposition.

I subscribedigned up for the lessons for a year, one hour a week, except during the school holidays when there are no lessons.

“Signed up for lessons” is the natural phrasing.
Put a comma before "except"

Thanks to the coach’s exercicses and support, I haven’t given up, and I’ve even made such progress thant I’m now able to do a swim lap — 25 metres — almost without a pause for 3 swimming styles — front crawl, breaststroke and backstroke.

Spelling correction.
“Such progress that” is the correct phrase.

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Corrections are mostly about verb tense and spelling. Good job, keep writing!

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pascal00d

Jan. 18, 2026

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Thanks for the corrections!
I really struggle with commas, so I appreciated your help with them.

I’ve started a new sport this year and I’m happier than I could expect!

For example, I didn’t put my head under the water, as I didn’t like it, but you can’t have an efficient swim by this way and you will be quickly exhausted.

On last September, I moved into a new house and by chance there is a public swimming pool at less than ten minutes by foot.

As soon as I lost my concentration, the punishment was immediate : I swallowed water, I choked, and I panicked!

Thanks to the coach’s exercices and support, I haven’t given up and I’ve even made such progress than. I’m now able to do a swim lap of 25 metres, almost without a pause, for 3 swimming styles — front crawl, breaststroke and backstroke.

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pascal00d

Jan. 18, 2026

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Thanks for the corrections!

Swimming!

I’ve started a new sport this year and I’m happier than I could expect!

I learnt to swim at school when I was about 10 years old, but my technique was pretty basic and I was not confident at all.

For example, I didn’t put my head under the water, as I didn’t like it, but you can’t have an efficient swim by this way and you will be quickly exhausted.

However, I love swimming in pools or at the beach during holidays, or even just the pleasure of floating in the water.

So I had that idea in my head for many years that one day I would take some lessons to improve my swimming skills.

On last September, I moved in a new house and by chance there is a public swimming pool at less than ten minutes by foot.

So, no excuse anymore!

I subscribed the lessons for a year, one hour a week except during the school holidays when there are no lessons.

However, I hadn’t imagined learning swimming would be so difficult at the very beginning!

I really struggled to manage my breathing.

Nothing could be more logical than exhaling under the water and inhaling above it.

Nevertheless, in practice my brain was overwhelmed by trying to do the right movement for every body part at the right time.

As soon as I lost my concentration, the punishment was immediate : I swallowed water, I choked and I panicked!

Thanks to the coach’s exercices and support, I haven’t given up and I’ve even made such progress than I’m now able to do a swim lap — 25 metres — almost without a pause for 3 swimming styles — front crawl, breaststroke and backstroke.

I’m eager to improve myself even more until I can glide over the water!

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pascal00d

Jan. 18, 2026

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Please stop doing that!

Swimming!

I’ve started a new sport this year and I’m happier than I could expectever!

I learnt to swim at school when I was about 10 years old, but my technique was pretty basic and I was not confident at all.

For example, I didn’t put my head under the water, as I didn’t like it, but you can’t have answim efficient swim by this way andly like that so you will be quickly be exhausted.

However, I love swimming in pools or at the beach during holidays, or even just the pleasure of floating in the water.

So I had that idea in my head for many years that one day I would take some lessons to improve my swimming skills.

On lLast September, I moved into a new house and by chance there iwas a public swimming pool at less than a ten minutes by foot walk away.

So, no more excuse anymores!

I subscribed theigned up for lessons for a year, one hour a week except during the school holidays when there are no lessons.

However, I hadn’t imagined learning swimming would be so difficult at the very beginning!

I really struggled to manage my breathing.

Nothing could be more logical than exhaling under the water and inhaling above it.

Nevertheless, in practice my brain was overwhelmed by trying to do the right movement for every body part at the right time.

As soon as I lost my concentration, the punishment was immediate : I swallowed water, I choked and I panicked!

A comma can be used here instead of a colon, but I think both work fine.

Thanks to the coach’s exercicses and support, I haven’t given up and I’ve even made so much progress than I’m now able to do a swim lap — 25 metres — almost without a pauseresting for 3 swimming styles — front crawl, breaststroke and backstroke.

I’m eager to improve myself even more until I can glide over the water!

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This was very interesting to read as it very closely resembles my own journey of getting back into swimming as an adult! You did a great job of articulating the difficulties of starting to learn how to swim. Especially the breathing aspect, that really resonated with me. Swimming is such a beautiful activity/sport. You've inspired me to make a post in my target language describing my experience as well. Keep at it, good luck!

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pascal00d

Jan. 18, 2026

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Thanks for your corrections and your kind message!
I really appreciate that you shared your feelings about my text, as my ultimate goal in learning English is to share life experiences.
I agree with you about swimming! I signed up for a year, but now I know I will sign up again for many more years!
Good luck with your target language, too!

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Nevertheless, in practice my brain was overwhelmed by trying to do the right movement for every body part at the right time.


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As soon as I lost my concentration, the punishment was immediate : I swallowed water, I choked and I panicked!


As soon as I lost my concentration, the punishment was immediate : I swallowed water, I choked and I panicked!

A comma can be used here instead of a colon, but I think both work fine.

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As soon as I lost my concentration, the punishment was immediate : I swallowed water, I choked, and I panicked!

Thanks to the coach’s exercices and support, I haven’t given up and I’ve even made such progress than I’m now able to do a swim lap — 25 metres — almost without a pause for 3 swimming styles — front crawl, breaststroke and backstroke.


Thanks to the coach’s exercicses and support, I haven’t given up and I’ve even made so much progress than I’m now able to do a swim lap — 25 metres — almost without a pauseresting for 3 swimming styles — front crawl, breaststroke and backstroke.

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Thanks to the coach’s exercices and support, I haven’t given up and I’ve even made such progress than. I’m now able to do a swim lap of 25 metres, almost without a pause, for 3 swimming styles — front crawl, breaststroke and backstroke.

Thanks to the coach’s exercicses and support, I haven’t given up, and I’ve even made such progress thant I’m now able to do a swim lap — 25 metres — almost without a pause for 3 swimming styles — front crawl, breaststroke and backstroke.

Spelling correction. “Such progress that” is the correct phrase.

I’m eager to improve myself even more until I can glide over the water!


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I’ve started a new sport this year and I’m happier than I could expect!


I’ve started a new sport this year and I’m happier than I could expectever!

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I’ve started a new sport this year and I’m happier than I could expect!

I’ve started a new sport this year, and I’m happier than I could expected!

Add a comma before “and.” Use the past tense “expected” to match the time frame.

I learnt to swim at school when I was about 10 years old, but my technique was pretty basic and I was not confident at all.


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I learnted to swim at school when I was about 10 years old, but my technique was pretty basic, and I was not confident at all.

“Learned” is the standard American English form (though “learnt” is fine in British English).

For example, I didn’t put my head under the water, as I didn’t like it, but you can’t have an efficient swim by this way and you will be quickly exhausted.


For example, I didn’t put my head under the water, as I didn’t like it, but you can’t have answim efficient swim by this way andly like that so you will be quickly be exhausted.

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For example, I didn’t put my head under the water, as I didn’t like it, but you can’t have an efficient swim by this way and you will be quickly exhausted.

For example, I didn’t put my head under the water, as I didn’t like it, but you can’t have answim efficient swim bly this way, and you will be quickly become exhausted.

Swim efficiently” is the natural phrasing. Add a comma for clarity. “Quickly become exhausted” is smoother.

However, I love swimming in pools or at the beach during holidays, or even just the pleasure of floating in the water.


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So I had that idea in my head for many years that one day I would take some lessons to improve my swimming skills.


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On last September, I moved in a new house and by chance there is a public swimming pool at less than ten minutes by foot.


On lLast September, I moved into a new house and by chance there iwas a public swimming pool at less than a ten minutes by foot walk away.

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On last September, I moved into a new house and by chance there is a public swimming pool at less than ten minutes by foot.

On lLast September, I moved into a new house, and by chance, there is a public swimming pool atwithin less than ten minutes by foot.

Remove “On.” Use “moved into” instead of “moved in” when referring to a house. Change preposition.

I subscribed the lessons for a year, one hour a week except during the school holidays when there are no lessons.


I subscribed theigned up for lessons for a year, one hour a week except during the school holidays when there are no lessons.

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I subscribedigned up for the lessons for a year, one hour a week, except during the school holidays when there are no lessons.

“Signed up for lessons” is the natural phrasing. Put a comma before "except"

However, I hadn’t imagined learning swimming would be so difficult at the very beginning!


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