Jan. 17, 2022
Book - A Shot in the Dark - P32
Part thirty-two.
This summary was deliberately written in present tenses (analyse it as it’s taking place as you read it.)
Despite having lost evidence, that is Crystal’s list, Twitten is not worried. Not only has he committed to memory ist contents, he has thoroughly planned his line of inquiry as well. He has* traced precisely Crystal movements from the train station to the ice cream parlour. So, he is already forming ideas about what jogged Crystal’s memory on that way. He will also get Crystal’s secretary, Miss Sibert, to come down from London with the notes on the “Aldersgate Stick-up”. He has even requested a copy of the play to work out what struck Crystal in the theatre. Yet, Mrs. Groynes is sure it will all be in vain without the list. They would probably even question if it ever existed at all. Her face is a picture of sterness, as she advises him to let the whole thing lie. Twitten is appalled. He will not hold back**; Inspector Steine and Sergeant Brunswick are the ones who have got everything wrong so far. But then she points out that Inspector Steine already despises Twitten. Therefore, if Steine thought that Twitten made up some evidence, he would use it as a pretext for having Twitten move on to another constabulary. Mrs. Groynes has clearly a strong point yet Twitten does not care: he can prove it all even without the list. She stares at him with a stern look: “Can you, though?”
*”has traced” or “traced” (I presume he did it over night, and now it’s early morning)
**what could be a better expression to say he won’t stop from carrying on with his investigation?
This summary was deliberately written in the present tenses (analyse it as it’s taking place as you read it. )
“Present tense” or “the present tense” rather than “present tenses.”
Despite having lost evidence, that is Crystal’s list, Twitten is not worried.
Not sure about your meaning here. Is the “lost evidence” Crystal’s list? If so, I’d recommend: “Despite having lost the evidence—that is, Crystal’s list—Twitter is not worried.”
Yet, Mrs. Groynes is sure it will all be in vain without the list.
No comma after “yet,” unless followed by a subordinate clause of some sort. Like: “Yet, without the list, Mrs. Groynes is sure it will all be in vain.”
They would probably even question if it ever existed at all.
“Ever” and “at all” serve similar purposes as intensifiers here. Having both is too much. Choose one. Either “ever” to emphasize doubt about its existence at any point in time, or “at all” to emphasize doubt about its existence as such.
Jan. 20, 2022
thanks a lot!
Not only has he committed to memory ists contents, he has thoroughly planned his line of inquiry as well.
He has* traced precisely traced Crystal's movements from the train station to the ice cream parlour.
He will not hold back**; Inspector Steine and Sergeant Brunswick are the ones who have got everything wrong so far.
A few options for your inquiry:
1. He won't let that stop him.
2. He disregards their [concern/worries/warnings].
3. He has his mind made up. (Meaning that nothing can change his mind)
Mrs. Groynes has clearly has a strong point, yet Twitten does not care: h. He can prove it all even without the list.
She stares at him with a stern look:, “Can you, though?”
Jan. 20, 2022
thanks
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Book - A Shot in the Dark - P32 |
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Part thirty-two. |
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This summary was deliberately written in present tenses (analyse it as it’s taking place as you read it. ) This summary was deliberately written in the present tense “Present tense” or “the present tense” rather than “present tenses.” |
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Despite having lost evidence, that is Crystal’s list, Twitten is not worried. Despite having lost evidence, that is Crystal’s list, Twitten is not worried. Not sure about your meaning here. Is the “lost evidence” Crystal’s list? If so, I’d recommend: “Despite having lost the evidence—that is, Crystal’s list—Twitter is not worried.” |
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Not only has he committed to memory ist contents, he has thoroughly planned his line of inquiry as well. Not only has he committed to memory i |
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He has* traced precisely Crystal movements from the train station to the ice cream parlour. He has |
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So, he is already forming ideas about what jogged Crystal’s memory on that way. |
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He will also get Crystal’s secretary, Miss Sibert, to come down from London with the notes on the “Aldersgate Stick-up”. |
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He has even requested a copy of the play to work out what struck Crystal in the theatre. |
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Yet, Mrs. Groynes is sure it will all be in vain without the list. Yet No comma after “yet,” unless followed by a subordinate clause of some sort. Like: “Yet, without the list, Mrs. Groynes is sure it will all be in vain.” |
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They would probably even question if it ever existed at all. They would probably even question if it ever existed “Ever” and “at all” serve similar purposes as intensifiers here. Having both is too much. Choose one. Either “ever” to emphasize doubt about its existence at any point in time, or “at all” to emphasize doubt about its existence as such. |
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Her face is a picture of sterness, as she advises him to let the whole thing lie. |
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Twitten is appalled. |
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He will not hold back**; Inspector Steine and Sergeant Brunswick are the ones who have got everything wrong so far. He will not hold back**; Inspector Steine and Sergeant Brunswick are the ones who have got everything wrong so far. A few options for your inquiry: 1. He won't let that stop him. 2. He disregards their [concern/worries/warnings]. 3. He has his mind made up. (Meaning that nothing can change his mind) |
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But then she points out that Inspector Steine already despises Twitten. |
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Therefore, if Steine thought that Twitten made up some evidence, he would use it as a pretext for having Twitten move on to another constabulary. |
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Mrs. Groynes has clearly a strong point yet Twitten does not care: he can prove it all even without the list. Mrs. Groynes |
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She stares at him with a stern look: “Can you, though?” She stares at him with a stern look |
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*”has traced” or “traced” (I presume he did it over night, and now it’s early morning) |
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**what could be a better expression to say he won’t stop from carrying on with his investigation? |
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