June 17, 2022
Book - A Shot in the Dark - 86
Summary no. 86
Sergeant Brunswick was recovering in hospital from a gunshot wound to his leg. It wasn’t the first time that he had been shot in the leg and he sensed it wouldn’t be the last. What bothered him was the staying in hospital; the food was dreadful and the nursery staff were cold. Lying in bed, Brunswick found he *couldn’t settle to anything positive*. A deep sense of guilt was nagging at him, eating away at his confidence. Brunswick believed that if he had been more thorough when he encountered Professor Mesmer, yesterday’s ghastly events might have been prevented. He run through his encounter with Professor Mesmer. The Sergeant had asked some tricky questions, and Mesmer, clearly out of his depth, gave away too much. When it dawned on the Professor what he had done, he tried to put things right. Mesmer hypnotised Brunswick to try and make him forget whatever he had learned during the interview. The notion that he had been deceived and hypnotised was painful for Brunswick to acknowledge.
*By that I meant that he was worried enough that he couldn’t think about positive stuff.
Book - A Shot in the Dark - 86
Summary no.
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Sergeant Brunswick was recovering in the hospital from a gunshot wound to his leg.
It wasn’t the first time that he had been shot in the leg and he sensed it wouldn’t be the last.
What bothered him was the staying in the hospital; the food was dreadful and the nursery staff were cold.
both nursery and nurse work here, I just wanted to bring it to your attention.
Lying in bed, Brunswick found he *couldn’t settle to anything positive*.
A deep sense of guilt was nagging at him, eating away at his confidence.
Brunswick believed that if he had been more thorough when he encountered Professor Mesmer, yesterday’s ghastly events might have been prevented.
He ruan through his encounter with Professor Mesmer.
The Sergeant had asked some tricky questions, and Mesmer, clearly out of his depth, gave away too much.
When it dawned on the Professor what he had done, he tried to put things right.
Mesmer hypnotised Brunswick to try and make him forget whatever he had learned during the interview.
The notion that he had been deceived and hypnotised was painful for Brunswick to acknowledge.
*By that I meant that he was worried enough that he couldn’t think about positive stuff.
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Great work!
June 17, 2022
Thank you
Sergeant Brunswick was recovering in the hospital from a gunshot wound to his leg.
What bothered him was the staying in the hospital; the food was dreadful and the nursery staff were cold.
He ruan through his encounter with Professor Mesmer.
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Excellent work. Just some minor points on where to put "the" and a verb tense
June 17, 2022
Thank you. I wrote the text following British English rules, that's why I wrote "in hospital" and not "in the hospital".
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Sergeant Brunswick was recovering in hospital from a gunshot wound to his leg. Sergeant Brunswick was recovering in the hospital from a gunshot wound to his leg. Sergeant Brunswick was recovering in the hospital from a gunshot wound to his leg. |
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It wasn’t the first time that he had been shot in the leg and he sensed it wouldn’t be the last. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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What bothered him was the staying in hospital; the food was dreadful and the nursery staff were cold. What bothered him was What bothered him was both nursery and nurse work here, I just wanted to bring it to your attention. |
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Lying in bed, Brunswick found he *couldn’t settle to anything positive*. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A deep sense of guilt was nagging at him, eating away at his confidence. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Brunswick believed that if he had been more thorough when he encountered Professor Mesmer, yesterday’s ghastly events might have been prevented. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He run through his encounter with Professor Mesmer. He r He r |
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The Sergeant had asked some tricky questions, and Mesmer, clearly out of his depth, gave away too much. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When it dawned on the Professor what he had done, he tried to put things right. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Mesmer hypnotised Brunswick to try and make him forget whatever he had learned during the interview. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The notion that he had been deceived and hypnotised was painful for Brunswick to acknowledge. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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*By that I meant that he was worried enough that he couldn’t think about positive stuff. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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