April 29, 2022
Book - A Shot in the Dark - 65
Summary no. 65
Although Mrs Groynes may well like Constable Twitten, she did revel in setting him straight whenever she had the opportunity. As it happened, Twitten was given to speaking his mind without much consideration of the implications. Twitten wasn’t arrogant, he was simply unselfconscious. Thus, Mrs Groynes promptly pointed out to him that she was none at all afraid of London-based gangstar Terense Chambers, like Twitten had previously claimed. Mrs Groynes went on to explain that Chambers knew everything about her, and if he wanted to, Chambers could easily track her down. Now that Mrs Groynes had spoiled his theory, Twitten was disappointed. That was classic Twitten. He greatly valued logical reasoning, so when nothing useful came of it, he’d feel defeated. Twitten decided to change the subject and discuss Crystal’s murder. Twitten’s half-formed theory was that Crystal might’ve recognised Mrs Groynes’ voice when he turned up at the police station a couple of days ago (Mrs Groynes worked there as a cleaner). From that moment on Mrs Groynes kept Crystal under close watch. When she realised that Crystal had been trying to retrieve his memories* of the bank robbery and was already joining the dots, ready to expose her, she had no choice but to dispose of him.
*It had been so traumatic for him that he’d lost memory of the details of the event.
Although Mrs Groynes may well like Constable Twitten, she did reveled in setting him straight whenever she had the opportunity.
As it happened, Twitten was given to speaking his mind without much consideration of the implications.
Twitten wasn’t arrogant, he was simply unselfconscious.
Thus, Mrs Groynes promptly pointed out to him that she was none at all afraid of London-based gangstar Terense Chambers, like Twitten had previously claimed.
Mrs Groynes went on to explain that Chambers knew everything about her, and if he wanted to, Chambers could easily track her down.
Now that Mrs Groynes had spoiled his theory, Twitten was disappointed.
That was classic Twitten.
He greatly valued logical reasoning, so when nothing useful came of it, he’d feel defeated.
Twitten decided to change the subject and discuss Crystal’s murder.
Twitten’s half-formed theory was that Crystal might’ve recognised Mrs Groynes’ voice when he turned up at the police station a couple of days ago (Mrs Groynes worked there as a cleaner).
From that moment on Mrs Groynes kept Crystal under close watch.
When she realised that Crystal had been trying to retrieve his memories* of the bank robbery and was already joinconnecting the dots, ready to expose her, she had no choice but to dispose of him.
*It had been so traumatic for him that he’d lost memory of the details of the event.
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Very impressive. My only feedback is that the language feels a little old fashioned or very British (e.g "may well like" and "none at all"). If you intend to use a British lexicon, then I think it's probably fine.
April 30, 2022
Many thanks
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Mrs. Groynes went on to explain that Chambers knew everything about her, and if he wanted to, Chambershe could easily track her down.
Now that Mrs. Groynes had spoildisproved his theory, Twitten was disappointed.
Twitten’s half-formed theory was that Crystal might’ve recogniszed Mrs. Groynes’ voice when he turned up at the police station a couple of days ago (Mrs. Groynes worked there as a cleaner).
From that moment onwards, Mrs. Groynes kept Crystal under close watch.
When she realiszed that Crystal had been trying to retrieve his memories* of the bank robbery and was already joinconnecting the dots, ready to expose her, she had no choice but to dispose of him.
*It had been so traumatic for him that he’d lost his memoryies ofn the details of the event.
April 29, 2022
Many thanks. Just for clarification, both "ise" and "ize" are correct in British English. That's why I wrote "realised" and so on. Then, in BE is incorrect to write Mr and Mrs with a period.
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Although Mrs Groynes may well like Constable Twitten, she did revel in setting him straight whenever she had the opportunity. Although Mrs. Groynes may Although Mrs Groynes may well like Constable Twitten, she |
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Thus, Mrs Groynes promptly pointed out to him that she was none at all afraid of London-based gangstar Terense Chambers, like Twitten had previously claimed. Thus, Mrs. Groynes promptly pointed out to him that she was no This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Mrs Groynes went on to explain that Chambers knew everything about her, and if he wanted to, Chambers could easily track her down. Mrs. Groynes went on to explain that Chambers knew everything about her, and if he wanted to, This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Now that Mrs Groynes had spoiled his theory, Twitten was disappointed. Now that Mrs. Groynes had This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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That was classic Twitten. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He greatly valued logical reasoning, so when nothing useful came of it, he’d feel defeated. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Twitten decided to change the subject and discuss Crystal’s murder. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Twitten’s half-formed theory was that Crystal might’ve recognised Mrs Groynes’ voice when he turned up at the police station a couple of days ago (Mrs Groynes worked there as a cleaner). Twitten’s half-formed theory was that Crystal might’ve recogni This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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From that moment on Mrs Groynes kept Crystal under close watch. From that moment onwards, Mrs. Groynes kept Crystal under close watch. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When she realised that Crystal had been trying to retrieve his memories* of the bank robbery and was already joining the dots, ready to expose her, she had no choice but to dispose of him. When she reali When she realised that Crystal had been trying to retrieve his memories* of the bank robbery and was already |
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