March 11, 2022
Book - A Shot in the Dark - 54
Part num. 54.
This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s unfolding as you read it).
After getting off the ghost train attraction, Inspector Steine makes his way back* the pier. Steine is still dazed, barely aware of the surroundings, when someone calls out to him, “Are you all right?” It was Mrs Groynes, the station charlady. For a moment, he doesn’t seem to recognise her, a blank expression on his face. He’s not used to her in everyday clothes, thus it takes him a while. After he acknowledges her, she explains that she’s been sent out for Mr Jupiter. Hearing of Mr Jupiter makes Steine's mind come back to the incident. Hazy yet ghastly details of it flood him with guilt. Steine ponders how to word his answer. Just as he starts explaining, he is cut off by shrieks of terror coming from the shore below the pier. The two of them hurry over to the rail and lean over. A man’s body is floating in the water. Steine is both appalled and bewildered. Taking in the whole scene and being quick-witted, Mrs Groynes enquires Steine about the man. She starts to suspect that Steine pushed* the man off the pier. Being a person not afraid to speak its mind, she bluntly voices her concern. However, Steine doesn’t acknowledge anything.
*The attraction was at the end of the pier. I just meant that he started walking back the pier, not that he walked the whole lentgh of it. Is the sentence right?
**”has pushed” - “pushed” - “could/may/might have”?
After getting off the ghost train attraction, Inspector Steine makes his way back* along the pier. (towards the beach).
Along can mean in any direction that is parallel (like two lines in the same direction //) to the object you are talking about. "Back" (or forwards) can tell the reader the direction you are moving along in. To make it even clearer, add in what Inspector Steine is moving towards (towards the beach).
She starts to suspect that Steine pushed* the man off the pier.
You could have "pushed" or "could/may/might have pushed" here. They both make sense. :)
March 14, 2022
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Book - A Shot in the Dark - 54 |
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Part num. |
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54. |
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This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s unfolding as you read it). |
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After getting off the ghost train attraction, Inspector Steine makes his way back* the pier. After getting off the ghost train attraction, Inspector Steine makes his way back Along can mean in any direction that is parallel (like two lines in the same direction //) to the object you are talking about. "Back" (or forwards) can tell the reader the direction you are moving along in. To make it even clearer, add in what Inspector Steine is moving towards (towards the beach). |
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Steine is still dazed, barely aware of the surroundings, when someone calls out to him, “Are you all right?” It was Mrs Groynes, the station charlady. |
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For a moment, he doesn’t seem to recognise her, a blank expression on his face. |
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He’s not used to her in everyday clothes, thus it takes him a while. |
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After he acknowledges her, she explains that she’s been sent out for Mr Jupiter. |
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Hearing of Mr Jupiter makes Steine's mind come back to the incident. |
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Hazy yet ghastly details of it flood him with guilt. |
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Steine ponders how to word his answer. |
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Just as he starts explaining, he is cut off by shrieks of terror coming from the shore below the pier. |
|
The two of them hurry over to the rail and lean over. |
|
A man’s body is floating in the water. |
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Steine is both appalled and bewildered. |
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Taking in the whole scene and being quick-witted, Mrs Groynes enquires Steine about the man. |
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She starts to suspect that Steine pushed* the man off the pier. She starts to suspect that Steine pushed You could have "pushed" or "could/may/might have pushed" here. They both make sense. :) |
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Being a person not afraid to speak its mind, she bluntly voices her concern. |
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However, Steine doesn’t acknowledge anything. |
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*The attraction was at the end of the pier. |
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I just meant that he started walking back the pier, not that he walked the whole lentgh of it. |
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Is the sentence right? |
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**”has pushed” - “pushed” - “could/may/might have”? |
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