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Scarlett_Father

Nov. 17, 2022

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I gradually bought about 3 bitcoins in the last 5 years, average price around us$ 6,000 for each. I'd like to try something new for me. When I purchased it, I was asked not to write any comments including the word "bitcoin", because the word is censored by bank.
Amazingly the bitcoin price go up quickly, when it reached to $15,000, I sold half of them to go traveling and shopping.
About the year before last, the boss of TESLA Elong Musk allow customers to buy Tesla on official website. The Bitcoin price soared up rapidly, reached at it's highest point $69,000.
Everyone who owning bitcoin were very exciting including me , I know I am a very very small owner, but if you get additional $30,000 after one night, why not.
To be continued in my next essay.

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I gradually bought about 3 bitcoins in the last 5 years, average price around us$ $6,000 forUSD each.

Or 'for each bitcoin.'

I'd like to try something new for me.

When I purchased ithem, I was asked not to write any comments including the word "bitcoin"," because the word is censored by the bank.

It is one bitcoin. Them is all 3 of them.

Comma before apostrophe.

Amazingly, the bitcoin price gowent up quickly, when it reached to $15,000, I sold half of them to go travelling and shopping.

Abroutnd the year before last year, the boss of TESLA, Elong Musk allowed customers to buy Tesla s on the official website.

You could write 'two years ago.' Sounds better

The Bitcoin price soared up rapidly, and reached at it's highest point at $69,000.

Everyone who owninged bitcoin wereas very excitinged including me , I know I am a very very small owner, but if you get an additional $30,000 after one night, why notwouldn't I be excited.

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Scarlett_Father

Nov. 17, 2022

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thanks for your help! :)

I gradually bought about 3 bitcoins in the last 5 years, and the average price was around us$ $6,000 USD for each.

I'd like wanted to try something new for me.

When I purchased ithem, I was asked not to write any comments including the word "bitcoin", because ithe word is censored by the bank.

Amazingly, the bitcoin price gowent up quickly, and when it reached to $15,000, I sold half of them to go traveling and shopping.

About the year before last, the bossCEO of TESLAesla, Elong Musk, allowed customers to buy a Tesla on the official website.

The Bitcoin price soared up rapidly, and reached at it's highest point at $69,000.

Everyone who owninged bitcoin wereas very excitinged, including me ,. I know I am a very very small owner, but anyone would be excited if you get an additional $30,000 after one night, why noovernight.

To be continued in my next essay.

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Scarlett_Father

Nov. 17, 2022

1

Thank you! :)

Bitcoin (1)


I gradually bought about 3 bitcoins in the last 5 years, average price around us$ 6,000 for each.


I gradually bought about 3 bitcoins in the last 5 years, and the average price was around us$ $6,000 USD for each.

I gradually bought about 3 bitcoins in the last 5 years, average price around us$ $6,000 forUSD each.

Or 'for each bitcoin.'

I'd like to try something new for me.


I'd like wanted to try something new for me.

I'd like to try something new for me.

When I purchased it, I was asked not to write any comments including the word "bitcoin", because the word is censored by bank.


When I purchased ithem, I was asked not to write any comments including the word "bitcoin", because ithe word is censored by the bank.

When I purchased ithem, I was asked not to write any comments including the word "bitcoin"," because the word is censored by the bank.

It is one bitcoin. Them is all 3 of them. Comma before apostrophe.

Amazingly the bitcoin price go up quickly, when it reached to $15,000, I sold half of them to go traveling and shopping.


Amazingly, the bitcoin price gowent up quickly, and when it reached to $15,000, I sold half of them to go traveling and shopping.

Amazingly, the bitcoin price gowent up quickly, when it reached to $15,000, I sold half of them to go travelling and shopping.

About the year before last, the boss of TESLA Elong Musk allow customers to buy Tesla on official website.


About the year before last, the bossCEO of TESLAesla, Elong Musk, allowed customers to buy a Tesla on the official website.

Abroutnd the year before last year, the boss of TESLA, Elong Musk allowed customers to buy Tesla s on the official website.

You could write 'two years ago.' Sounds better

The Bitcoin price soared up rapidly, reached at it's highest point $69,000.


The Bitcoin price soared up rapidly, and reached at it's highest point at $69,000.

The Bitcoin price soared up rapidly, and reached at it's highest point at $69,000.

Everyone who owning bitcoin were very exciting including me , I know I am a very very small owner, but if you get additional $30,000 after one night, why not.


Everyone who owninged bitcoin wereas very excitinged, including me ,. I know I am a very very small owner, but anyone would be excited if you get an additional $30,000 after one night, why noovernight.

Everyone who owninged bitcoin wereas very excitinged including me , I know I am a very very small owner, but if you get an additional $30,000 after one night, why notwouldn't I be excited.

To be continued in my next essay.


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