They were still scared of me and flew away whenevery time I stood by my window or my camera worked on my windowsill.

But they were not too scared to fly very far awayfar.

In my last entry, I told you about the birds who landed outside my window and I couldn't take a video of them.

The use of "who" when describing animals is very interesting. You may want to check this out: https://www.thedodo.com/what-calling-animals-who-reall-432479625.html.

I don't think there's a right or wrong rule here in modern language. Personally, I wouldn't refer to birds as "who" in this sentence. Rather, I would have written:
"I told you about the birds that landed outside my window"... but that's personal preference.

Your sentence is perfect, so don't feel the need to change it!

They were still scared of me and flew away every time I stood by my window or placed my camera worked on myon the windowsill.

But they were not toso scared as to fly very far away.

So I could capture some photos.

This sentence doesn't feel complete. Are you trying to communicate that you could capture the photos because the birds were on your neighbour's rails?

"They just stood on my neighbors' clothes rails and I was able to capture some photos"

In my last entry, I told you about the birds whothat landed outside my window and how I couldn't take a video of them.

They were still scareafraid of me and flew away every time I stood by my window or my camera worked onapproached my windowsill.

I'm not sure exactly what you mean by "or my camera worked on my windowsill"

But they were not too scaredfrightened enough to fly away very far away.

They just stooperched on my neighbors's clothes raillines.

So I couldwas able to capture some photos.