March 9, 2020
The period of the lasts two months has been too confusion for my life, in the cents of the organization that we have been obligated to accommodate our daily routines in my house and in my family. As a humongous spin of situations, the former brother of another mother of mine files motions to reduce the persons who are working in the branch, and with total lack of advertance, he did one day publish in the face book portal of the branch that cubiclers and managers will be reduced because the enterprise is needing to make more bucks, and with the present performance of the last months of the last year, that money is not enough to cover every expenses that they need, and that all persons that are selected in the low performing ranges will be calling in the after days for interviews to decide the destiny and choose if it is satisfactory, or negative with the personal vision for the future. I have always the habit to never give my knees permisions to go shaking if there is horror near, or if all other persons in the rooms have the shiverings of terror to think they are losing their works. So, for this reason, my knees stayed like icebergs, solid and with no movements, and I continuing with my day like all is normal, but a few little things did I know before the moments I am called to enter the office of my friend, and he shuts the door.
He always has good flavors for the music, and for spirits, so as soon I see a turning table and stacks of albums of the more iconic bands of the history recent; Mothership is on top. In additions he has on the top of the desk on the side of the computer a flask of crystal in the shape of a skull and it is full of rum, the Cuban kind, 32-years-old of age, and it is looking delicious. So I sit and expect a pouring of this rum, but I receive a very long cold impersonal heavy salutation in return, “empty your lockers, and leave the cubicle by the end of this Friday. Expect to receive your money of your termination by the second Saturday of the month in deposit forms and check with your local bank.” I am not for feelings my legs shaking, but in those moments, the mix of fear and joy overpowers reason and gut, and almost immediately I feel both my feet sweat, my ankles crumble, my knees crackle, the back of my knees grind, my stomach burn, my chest quiver, and my tears fear. I took the longest possible breathe of my time on earth, and exited the master cubicle. At the door I complements the tastes of the flask, and the stack, and with no looks back, I shut the door for ever.
The moment that Friday comes, I leave my belongings in the trunk of my car, and exit threw the big door, and drive to the stations where is the place that my family has been await for me to arrive, and as soon as they see my bucket of rust, they cheer and wave. I stop. They get on the car, and we drive for all the night until we got to the new town. New town, new life, new house, no looks for the behind. We arrive in the approximations of 3 in the morning of Saturday and no person bothers to unbox the packs, or unpack the boxes, we just only flat to bed like die right there, and sleep without stop until the 4 or 5 o’clock in the afternoon. For the rests of the days, we prepare the homestead as we best can. My wive has collections of paintings and proceeds to hang to the wall until looks beautiful, and I helping all the day with the things heavys. The childrens perfom recognition of the vicinity to the east and to the west, and they come back with news positive that the territory has all the things in their expectations. The neighborhoods are friendly for the more part, and the next door ones keep to them and never talk, which is fine by us. This is the longer week I have never have in all my time on earth, but in the final, it pass and Satuday is here so I drive to the bank, and open my wallet for the id and tell the teller to read me my balance and what surprise, there is forty two thousand dollars in the account, and I was to flip but in control don’t. I only leave the bank and drive back to the house jumping in my mind of joy and to understand how this happens, where did all money comes from. I check all statements and all is clear, and when my wive sees this, she overjoys with happiness and faster than sooner she says we are opening the business the she has ever wants, and this is fine by me, so we find a local, set the tables and burners and in less then two weeks, we have a diner serving pulled sanwhiches, deep fried fajitas, hot dogs with the dog made in the home, and the barbecue salsa that we make in the home drives all the peoples crazy and they love it, they ask for more, and the selection of natural waters that we make with infusions of spices are heaven to their tongues, so we do good and I am standing on my feet again, and we are standing upright altogether as a family.
The bigger surprise is when Jonas, my former ex friend, one day enters the joint and sits to eat guacamole tacos with hibiscus slurpy, and when we connect the eyes, my instinct basic calls for retaliation but suppressing my anger, I arrive to the table and asks if the food is to his liking, and he says he is glad to see the dream of food shop has been coming true, and before I can talk, he continues to say that it was necessary to lay me like that, and that the money was enough severance for to accomplish the dream, and finally he tells me that the branch is now another thing with new administration and nobody likes the new direction and that he hopes what he did for me is working, and because I don’t understand I say if he makes this on purpose, and he says he knows I felt miserable if continue to work in a work that has no passion anymore. He says he don’t have expectations for forgiveness but he enjoys that the dream of my family is now a possibility.
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So, fFor this reason, my knees stayed like icebergs, solid and with no movements, and I continuinged with my day like all iwas normal, but a few little things did I know before the moments, I am called to enter the office of my friend moments later, and he shuts the door.
He always hasd good flavors for thetaste in music, and forin spirits, so as soon I seeaw a turning table and stacks of albums of the more iconic bands of therecent history recent; Mothership is on top.
In additions, he hasd on the top of the desk on the side of the computer a flask of crystal in the shape of a skull and it iwas full of rum, the Cuban kind, 32-years-old of age, and it is lookinged delicious.
So I siat and expect aed pouring of this rum, but I received a very long, cold, impersonal and heavy salutation in return, “eEmpty your lockers, and leave the cubicle by the end of this Friday.
Expect to receive your money ofor your termination by the second Saturday of the month in deposit forms and check with your local bank.” I am not for feelings my legs shaking, but in those moments, the mix of fear and joy overpowersed reason and gut, and almost immediately I feelt both my feet sweat, my ankles crumble, my knees crackle, the back of my knees grind, my stomach burn, my chest quiver, and my tears fearall.
I took the longest possible breathe of my time on earth, and exited the master cubicle.
At the door, I compleimentsed the tastes of the flask, and the stack, and with no looksing back, I shut the door for ever.
The moment that Friday comes, I leave my belongings in the trunk of my car, and exit threwough the big door, and drive to the stations where is the place that my family has been awaiting for me to arrive, and as soon as they see my bucket of rust, they cheer and wave.
They get oin the car, and we drive for all the night until we goet to the new town.
New town, new life, new house, no looks for the behinding back.
We arrive in the approximations ofat around 3 in the morning ofn Saturday and no person bothers to unbox the packs, or unpack the boxes, we just only flat to bed, like die right there, and sleep without stop until the 4 or 5 o’clock in the afternoon.
My wivfe has collections of paintings and proceeds to hang tohem on the wall until looks beautiful, and I'm helping all the day with the things heavyheavy things.
The childrens perfom recognition ofze the vicinity to the east and to the west, and they come back with news positive news that the territory has all the things in theiry expectations.
The neighborhoods are friendly for the morest part, and the next door ones keep to themselves and never talk, which is fine by us.
This is the longerst week I have never haved in all my time on earth, but ion the final day, it passes and Saturday is here so I drive to the bank, and open my wallet for the id andID, tell the teller to read me my balance and what a surprise,: there is forty -two thousand dollars in the account, and I was going to flip but in control don’didn't.
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You have a lot of run-on sentences, meaning you don't use a lot of periods to break up your sentences. Instead of using "and" so often, try to end sentences more often to make it easier to follow the story. The story content was very good and interesting!
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The neighborhoods are friendly for the morest part, and the ones next door ones keep to themselves and never talk to us, which is fine by us.
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Hi please try to break up your really long sentences into smaller sentences. You have a bunch of run on sentences which makes it very difficult to correct.
Also please remember to correct Spanish entries. I'm pretty sure I mentioned this to you awhile back. You received over 350 corrections, but have made none. Please remember to give back to the community or risk losing your posting privileges.
Beginning at the start of a new life and work.
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The period of the lasts two months has been too confusion for my life, in the cents of the organization that we have been obligated to accommodate our daily routines in my house and in my family. The I'm not sure what you want to say in the second half The After saying you're very confused, I don't know what you're trying to say in the second half. |
As a humongous spin of situations, the former brother of another mother of mine files motions to reduce the persons who are working in the branch, and with total lack of advertance, he did one day publish in the face book portal of the branch that cubiclers and managers will be reduced because the enterprise is needing to make more bucks, and with the present performance of the last months of the last year, that money is not enough to cover every expenses that they need, and that all persons that are selected in the low performing ranges will be calling in the after days for interviews to decide the destiny and choose if it is satisfactory, or negative with the personal vision for the future.
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I have always the habit to never give my knees permisions to go shaking if there is horror near, or if all other persons in the rooms have the shiverings of terror to think they are losing their works. I have always had the habit |
So, for this reason, my knees stayed like icebergs, solid and with no movements, and I continuing with my day like all is normal, but a few little things did I know before the moments I am called to enter the office of my friend, and he shuts the door.
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He always has good flavors for the music, and for spirits, so as soon I see a turning table and stacks of albums of the more iconic bands of the history recent; Mothership is on top. He always ha |
In additions he has on the top of the desk on the side of the computer a flask of crystal in the shape of a skull and it is full of rum, the Cuban kind, 32-years-old of age, and it is looking delicious. In addition |
So I sit and expect a pouring of this rum, but I receive a very long cold impersonal heavy salutation in return, “empty your lockers, and leave the cubicle by the end of this Friday. So I s |
Expect to receive your money of your termination by the second Saturday of the month in deposit forms and check with your local bank.” I am not for feelings my legs shaking, but in those moments, the mix of fear and joy overpowers reason and gut, and almost immediately I feel both my feet sweat, my ankles crumble, my knees crackle, the back of my knees grind, my stomach burn, my chest quiver, and my tears fear. Expect to receive your money |
I took the longest possible breathe of my time on earth, and exited the master cubicle. I took the longest possible breathe I took the longest possible breath |
At the door I complements the tastes of the flask, and the stack, and with no looks back, I shut the door for ever. At the door I complement At the door, I compl |
The moment that Friday comes, I leave my belongings in the trunk of my car, and exit threw the big door, and drive to the stations where is the place that my family has been await for me to arrive, and as soon as they see my bucket of rust, they cheer and wave.
The moment that Friday comes, I leave my belongings in the trunk of my car, |
I stop. I stopped. |
They get on the car, and we drive for all the night until we got to the new town. They get They get |
New town, new life, new house, no looks for the behind. New town, new life, new house, no look |
We arrive in the approximations of 3 in the morning of Saturday and no person bothers to unbox the packs, or unpack the boxes, we just only flat to bed like die right there, and sleep without stop until the 4 or 5 o’clock in the afternoon. We a We arrive |
For the rests of the days, we prepare the homestead as we best can. |
My wive has collections of paintings and proceeds to hang to the wall until looks beautiful, and I helping all the day with the things heavys. My wi My wi |
The childrens perfom recognition of the vicinity to the east and to the west, and they come back with news positive that the territory has all the things in their expectations. The The children |
The neighborhoods are friendly for the more part, and the next door ones keep to them and never talk, which is fine by us. The neighbor The neighborhoods are friendly for the mo |
This is the longer week I have never have in all my time on earth, but in the final, it pass and Satuday is here so I drive to the bank, and open my wallet for the id and tell the teller to read me my balance and what surprise, there is forty two thousand dollars in the account, and I was to flip but in control don’t. This is the longe |
I only leave the bank and drive back to the house jumping in my mind of joy and to understand how this happens, where did all money comes from. I |
I check all statements and all is clear, and when my wive sees this, she overjoys with happiness and faster than sooner she says we are opening the business the she has ever wants, and this is fine by me, so we find a local, set the tables and burners and in less then two weeks, we have a diner serving pulled sanwhiches, deep fried fajitas, hot dogs with the dog made in the home, and the barbecue salsa that we make in the home drives all the peoples crazy and they love it, they ask for more, and the selection of natural waters that we make with infusions of spices are heaven to their tongues, so we do good and I am standing on my feet again, and we are standing upright altogether as a family. I check all statements and all is clear, and when my wi |
The bigger surprise is when Jonas, my former ex friend, one day enters the joint and sits to eat guacamole tacos with hibiscus slurpy, and when we connect the eyes, my instinct basic calls for retaliation but suppressing my anger, I arrive to the table and asks if the food is to his liking, and he says he is glad to see the dream of food shop has been coming true, and before I can talk, he continues to say that it was necessary to lay me like that, and that the money was enough severance for to accomplish the dream, and finally he tells me that the branch is now another thing with new administration and nobody likes the new direction and that he hopes what he did for me is working, and because I don’t understand I say if he makes this on purpose, and he says he knows I felt miserable if continue to work in a work that has no passion anymore. The bigger surprise is when Jonas, my former ex |
He says he don’t have expectations for forgiveness but he enjoys that the dream of my family is now a possibility. He says he do |
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