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Jan. 9, 2020

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Before having a cultural exchange

What I can't forget at a meet-up I went to during the New Year's holiday is that we talked about wars.
Japan has 47 prefectures in total. Do you know which prefecture got the worst damage during the world war I and II?
This question was asked by an European man to us, attendees. Many people including me answered Hiroshima and Nagasaki, but actually it was Tokyo.
In Hiroshima, the dead bodies were around 166 thousand, in Nagasaki were around 74 thousand within 4 months after people were exposed to radiation in the atomic bombing. However, Tokyo'd continued to be destroyed in 106 times air raids, and many buildings and stations like Tokyo station were burned down. At only the night air raid of March 10 in 1945, the dead bodies were more than 100 thousand. The victims and the suffers came to over 1000 thousand in total. It's called The Great Tokyo Air Raid.
At the end of the war in 1945, Tokyo was just a burned field, yet in 1964, Tokyo Olympic was held. To make it for the opening on October 10, Shinkansen(Bullet Train) started in practice on October 1. Before that, expressway was open in 1963 as well.
This recovery and growth hasn't made people to bring up this event so often, but the tragedy was more cruel than Horoshima and Nagasaki. I think I learned this event at schools but forgot most of them.
This European guy explained showing the photos of Tokyo of before war and after war. I was very ashamed that I had learned about my country's history from a person from another country (-""-;)
I asked him why he'd learned about another country's history so much, then he answered that he's been care about other countries' histories because his country'd had many wars from the reasons of religions, races and the territory from way before.
I was shocked at his story. I was painfully aware of the importance of learning histories for cultural exchanges. I deeply reflect on what I thought little of histories (T_T)


文化交流の前に
正月休み中に参加したミートアップで忘れ難いのは戦争の話をしたことだ。
日本は全部で47都道府県ある。第一次、第二次世界大戦を併せて、どこの都道府県が最もダメージを受けたかご存じだろうか。
この質問はあるヨーロッパ人の男性から我々参加者に投げかけられた。私を含め多くの人が広島、長崎と答えたが、実は東京である。
広島では被爆から4か月以内に約16万6千人が、長崎では約7万4千人が死亡しているが、東京では106回の空襲を受け続け東京駅等の多くの駅やビルが焼失した。1945年3月10日一夜の空襲で10万人以上の死者が出ている。罹災者は100万人以上だ。これを東京大空襲と言う。
1945年の終戦時、東京はただの焼け野原だった。にもかかわらず、1964年に東京オリンピックを開催している。10月10日の開催に間に合うよう10月1日に新幹線を開業し、前年の1963年に高速道路も開業している。
これらの回復と成長で東京大空襲のことはあまり取り沙汰されないが、惨事は広島、長崎よりもひどかった。昔、東京大空襲のことは学校で習ったが、ほとんど忘れてしまった。
このヨーロッパ人の男性は戦前と戦後の東京の写真を見せて説明してくれた。自国の歴史を他国の人に教えてもらうとはなんとまぁ恥ずかしいことだろう。
なぜ彼が他国の歴史について詳しいのか訊くと、自分の国が昔から宗教、人種、国土争奪で戦争があったので、他の国の歴史も気になるからだと教えてくれた。
私は彼の話にショックを受けた。文化交流をするのであればまず歴史の勉強をせねばと痛感した。歴史を軽視していたことを深く反省。

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What I can'tI will never forget about a meet-up I went to during the New Year's holiday is that w. We talked about wars.

Do you know which prefecture got the worst damage during the wWorld wWar I and II?

the World Wars or World Wars I and II

This question was asked by an European man to us, attendees.

We like to use active verbs/sentences/clauses, passive isn't so common and is frowned upon in writing.
"A European man asked us this question"
Also its "A European" because, while it European starts with an E, it technically starts with a consonant sound and therefore you shouldn't use "an"

Many people, including me, answered Hiroshima and Nagasaki, but actually it was Tokyo.

In Hiroshima, the dead bodies wnumbered around 166 thousand, and in Nagasaki were around 74 thousand people died within 4 months after people werebeing exposed to radiation infrom the atomic bombing.

Talking about dead bodies isn't something we do often. We talk about 'the dead' or people dying. When you talk about "dead bodies" or "corpses" it makes it sound personal. If someone said to me, "there were so many dead bodies", I would think that they themselves had seen all the dead bodies.

However, Tokyo'd continued to be destroyed in 106 was attacked 106 more times by air raids, and many buildings and stations like Tokyo sStation were burned down.

At onlyBy the time of the night air raid of March 10 in 1945, the dead bodies were more than 100 thousand people died.

The total number of victims and the suffers came to over 1000 thousand in total.

It's called The Great Tokyo Air Raid.

At the end of the war in 1945, Tokyo was just a burnedt field, yet, in 1964, Tokyo Olympic was heldheld the Olympics.

"burned" is the past participle of "burn" but "burnt" is the adjective.
To further illustrate; "The toast got burned" and "He ate burnt toast"

To make it in time for the opening on October 10, the Shinkansen (Bullet Train) started in poperacticeng on October 1.

or "was put into operation". I also do not know if there was only one Shinkansen or multiple. If multiple trains were put into operation, I'd rather say "the Shinkansen service"

Before that, an/the expressway was opened in 1963 as well.

Thise recovery and growth hasn't made people to bring upresulted in people not talking about this event so often, but the tragedy was more cruel than Horoshima and Nagasaki.

I think I learned this eventabout this at schools, but forgot most of them(a lot) about it.

in or at

This European guy explained showing theand showed photos of Tokyo of before war and after warthe war(s).

or "explained by showing"

I was very ashamed that I had learned about my country's history from a person from another country (-""-;). I asked him why he'd learned so much about another country's history so much, then h. He answered that he's been cares about other countries' histories because his country'd has had many wars from the reasonsbecause of religions, races and the territory from way before/land disputes.

I was shocked at his story.

I wasam now painfully aware of the importance of learning historiesy for cultural exchanges.

I deeply reflect on whathow little I thought little of historiesy (T_T)

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Really good and super informative! Remember to use periods/full-stops.

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shiera

Jan. 10, 2020

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Thank you

Before having a cultural exchange

What I can't forget what I learned at a meet-up I went to during the New Year's holiday is thatwhere we talked about wars.

Do you know which prefecture gotsuffered the worst damage during both of the world war I and IIs?

Or you could say "during both World War I and World War II"

This question was asked of us by an European man to us, attendees.

Many people, myself including meed, answered Hiroshima and Nagasaki, but actually it was Tokyo.

In Hiroshima, the dead bodies were around 166 thousand people died, in Nagasaki were around 74 thousand were dead within 4four months after people wereof being exposed to radiation infrom the atomic bombing.

Numbers up to ten are normally written out. Above that you can use the numeral. But you must use either the words or the numerals, you can't mix - 74 thousand is wrong, it should be 74,000.

However, Tokyo'd continued to be destroyed in 106 timesattacked and suffered through 106 air raids, and many buildings and stationimportant places like Tokyo station were burned down.

At onlyOn the night of the air raid of March 10 in, 1945, the dead bodies were more than 100 thousan more than 100,000 people were killed.

The victims and the suffers came to over 1000 thousand in totaldead and injured totalled more than one million.

It's called The Great Tokyo Air Raid.

At the end of the war in 1945, Tokyo was just a burned field, yet in 1964, the Tokyo Olympics wasere held.

To make it for thehe Shinkansen (Bullet Train) openinged on October 10, Shinkansen(Bullet Train) started in practicejust in time for the opening on October 10.

Before that,The expressway was opened in 1963 as well.

This recovery and growth hasn'tmeans madeny people to bring updon't remember this event so often, but the tragedy was more cruel than Horoshima and Nagasaki.

I think I learned about this event at schools but forgot most of ithem.

This European guyman explained the story, showing the photos of Tokyo ofrom before war and after the war.

Guy isn't wrong but is a bit casual, more used when speaking than when writing.

I was very ashamed that I had to learned about my country's history from a person from another country (-""-;)I asked him why he'd learned so much about another country's history so much, then h. He answered that he's been cared about the history of other countries' histories because his country'd had been part of many wars forom the reasons of religions, races and the territory from way before.

I was shocked atby his story.

I wast made me painfully aware of the importance of learning histories for cultural exchanges.

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Interesting story!

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shiera

Jan. 10, 2020

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Thank you

Before having a cultural exchange


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What I can't forget at a meet-up I went to during the New Year's holiday is that we talked about wars.


What I can't forget what I learned at a meet-up I went to during the New Year's holiday is thatwhere we talked about wars.

What I can'tI will never forget about a meet-up I went to during the New Year's holiday is that w. We talked about wars.

Japan has 47 prefectures in total.


Do you know which prefecture got the worst damage during the world war I and II?


Do you know which prefecture gotsuffered the worst damage during both of the world war I and IIs?

Or you could say "during both World War I and World War II"

Do you know which prefecture got the worst damage during the wWorld wWar I and II?

the World Wars or World Wars I and II

This question was asked by an European man to us, attendees.


This question was asked of us by an European man to us, attendees.

This question was asked by an European man to us, attendees.

We like to use active verbs/sentences/clauses, passive isn't so common and is frowned upon in writing. "A European man asked us this question" Also its "A European" because, while it European starts with an E, it technically starts with a consonant sound and therefore you shouldn't use "an"

Many people including me answered Hiroshima and Nagasaki, but actually it was Tokyo.


Many people, myself including meed, answered Hiroshima and Nagasaki, but actually it was Tokyo.

Many people, including me, answered Hiroshima and Nagasaki, but actually it was Tokyo.

In Hiroshima, the dead bodies were around 166 thousand, in Nagasaki were around 74 thousand within 4 months after people were exposed to radiation in the atomic bombing.


In Hiroshima, the dead bodies were around 166 thousand people died, in Nagasaki were around 74 thousand were dead within 4four months after people wereof being exposed to radiation infrom the atomic bombing.

Numbers up to ten are normally written out. Above that you can use the numeral. But you must use either the words or the numerals, you can't mix - 74 thousand is wrong, it should be 74,000.

In Hiroshima, the dead bodies wnumbered around 166 thousand, and in Nagasaki were around 74 thousand people died within 4 months after people werebeing exposed to radiation infrom the atomic bombing.

Talking about dead bodies isn't something we do often. We talk about 'the dead' or people dying. When you talk about "dead bodies" or "corpses" it makes it sound personal. If someone said to me, "there were so many dead bodies", I would think that they themselves had seen all the dead bodies.

However, Tokyo'd continued to be destroyed in 106 times air raids, and many buildings and stations like Tokyo station were burned down.


However, Tokyo'd continued to be destroyed in 106 timesattacked and suffered through 106 air raids, and many buildings and stationimportant places like Tokyo station were burned down.

However, Tokyo'd continued to be destroyed in 106 was attacked 106 more times by air raids, and many buildings and stations like Tokyo sStation were burned down.

At only the night air raid of March 10 in 1945, the dead bodies were more than 100 thousand.


At onlyOn the night of the air raid of March 10 in, 1945, the dead bodies were more than 100 thousan more than 100,000 people were killed.

At onlyBy the time of the night air raid of March 10 in 1945, the dead bodies were more than 100 thousand people died.

The victims and the suffers came to over 1000 thousand in total.


The victims and the suffers came to over 1000 thousand in totaldead and injured totalled more than one million.

The total number of victims and the suffers came to over 1000 thousand in total.

It's called The Great Tokyo Air Raid.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

At the end of the war in 1945, Tokyo was just a burned field, yet in 1964, Tokyo Olympic was held.


At the end of the war in 1945, Tokyo was just a burned field, yet in 1964, the Tokyo Olympics wasere held.

At the end of the war in 1945, Tokyo was just a burnedt field, yet, in 1964, Tokyo Olympic was heldheld the Olympics.

"burned" is the past participle of "burn" but "burnt" is the adjective. To further illustrate; "The toast got burned" and "He ate burnt toast"

To make it for the opening on October 10, Shinkansen(Bullet Train) started in practice on October 1.


To make it for thehe Shinkansen (Bullet Train) openinged on October 10, Shinkansen(Bullet Train) started in practicejust in time for the opening on October 10.

To make it in time for the opening on October 10, the Shinkansen (Bullet Train) started in poperacticeng on October 1.

or "was put into operation". I also do not know if there was only one Shinkansen or multiple. If multiple trains were put into operation, I'd rather say "the Shinkansen service"

Before that, expressway was open in 1963 as well.


Before that,The expressway was opened in 1963 as well.

Before that, an/the expressway was opened in 1963 as well.

This recovery and growth hasn't made people to bring up this event so often, but the tragedy was more cruel than Horoshima and Nagasaki.


This recovery and growth hasn'tmeans madeny people to bring updon't remember this event so often, but the tragedy was more cruel than Horoshima and Nagasaki.

Thise recovery and growth hasn't made people to bring upresulted in people not talking about this event so often, but the tragedy was more cruel than Horoshima and Nagasaki.

I think I learned this event at schools but forgot most of them.


I think I learned about this event at schools but forgot most of ithem.

I think I learned this eventabout this at schools, but forgot most of them(a lot) about it.

in or at

This European guy explained showing the photos of Tokyo of before war and after war.


This European guyman explained the story, showing the photos of Tokyo ofrom before war and after the war.

Guy isn't wrong but is a bit casual, more used when speaking than when writing.

This European guy explained showing theand showed photos of Tokyo of before war and after warthe war(s).

or "explained by showing"

I was very ashamed that I had learned about my country's history from a person from another country (-""-;)I asked him why he'd learned about another country's history so much, then he answered that he's been care about other countries' histories because his country'd had many wars from the reasons of religions, races and the territory from way before.


I was very ashamed that I had to learned about my country's history from a person from another country (-""-;)I asked him why he'd learned so much about another country's history so much, then h. He answered that he's been cared about the history of other countries' histories because his country'd had been part of many wars forom the reasons of religions, races and the territory from way before.

I was very ashamed that I had learned about my country's history from a person from another country (-""-;). I asked him why he'd learned so much about another country's history so much, then h. He answered that he's been cares about other countries' histories because his country'd has had many wars from the reasonsbecause of religions, races and the territory from way before/land disputes.

I was shocked at his story.


I was shocked atby his story.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I was painfully aware of the importance of learning histories for cultural exchanges.


I wast made me painfully aware of the importance of learning histories for cultural exchanges.

I wasam now painfully aware of the importance of learning historiesy for cultural exchanges.

I deeply reflect on what I thought little of histories (T_T)


I deeply reflect on whathow little I thought little of historiesy (T_T)

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