April 19, 2022
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In past 20 years, as the rapid development of global economy. Many goods that we use on daily basis were produced by other countries, and transported for a long distance to all over the world. Did the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
To begin with, the global economy tighten the relationship and encourage more business activities between countries, so many companies will set their factories in country who have cheaper workforce and lower tariff , to reduce the cost. When the product's cost has decreased, the company can sell the product at an lower price to attract more customers. On another hand, we can buy things at an cheaper price, so we can less our living cost. either company and customers get benefits.
Meanwhile. There are many companies moved their production line to other countries. It means a safety and faster logistics is crucial. However, it usually facing problems like, the bad weather will affect the sea and air freight, caused extend the transport time.........
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Great work. This was a really complicated topic to write about and you did it very well with very few errors.
April 20, 2022
Thank you very much for correcting my essay. My English is not good, so l am trying to make it better 😅 probably l should choose some easy topic to write about.
April 20, 2022
Thank you very much for correcting my essay. My English is not good, so l am trying to make it better 😅 probably l should choose some easy topic to write about.
I think your English is actually quite good. I could understand almost everything you had written. The main thing you should focus on is sentence structure and punctuation. Overall you should be really proud of what you have achieved - learning another language is really difficult!
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Because of the global economy many goods including what we u Because of the global economy many goods including what we This sentence is missing a word to make the meaning clear |
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In past 20 years, as the rapid development of global economy. In the past 20 years, as the global economy has rapidly develop This is not a full sentence, it needs to be joined with a comma to the next sentence for it to make sense. |
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Many goods that we use on daily basis were produced by other countries, and transported for a long distance to all over the world.
I have chaned the start of this sentence to a lower case m because I have connected this sentence and the previous sentence together. |
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Did the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. D Use do not did, since this is currently happening. |
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To begin with, the global economy tighten the relationship and encourage more business activities between countries, so many companies will set their factories in country who have cheaper workforce and lower tariff , to reduce the cost. To begin with, the global economy |
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When the product's cost has decreased, the company can sell the product at an lower price to attract more customers.
The part I added to the end means that this sentence and the next sentence fit together better. |
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On another hand, we can buy things at an cheaper price, so we can less our living cost.
On the other hand is used when there are two contrasting but related ideas. For example: I like cheese, but on the other hand I hate yoghurt. This works since they are both related but different. What you are saying is too related to use this expression. Please let me know if you need me to explain this more, I know it is really confusing |
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either company and customers get benefits.
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Meanwhile. Meanwhile Meanwhile is not a sentence by itself, you need to use a comma to connect it to the next sentence. |
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There are many companies moved their production line to other countries.
I have made this sentence start with a lower case since it should be part of the previous sentence. |
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It means a safety and faster logistics is crucial.
The meaning here is a little unclear, what do you mean by safer? |
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However, it usually facing problems like, the bad weather will affect the sea and air freight, caused extend the transport time......... However, When we use ... we only ever put three. |
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