Jan. 6, 2023
Be a hardworking person
A person must not be prefering eating but lazy working. Because only when you work you hard, you can succeed.
Buqing Su is a famous mathematician and scholar from China, and was once the headmaster of Fudan university. He was born in 1901 in a poor farmer family. So he work in the farmlands when he was little, such as grazing bulls, cutting grass, ploughing fields, and many other things. He thought that he will never have the chance of geting an education.
Luckily, there was a wealthy family in the neighborhood who hired a teacher to teach their son. When Buqing Su was available, he would listen to the class outside the window, and taking notes. In the end, the rich family's son did not turned out to be good in his study, but Buqing Su got a lot of knowledge instead. Su's uncle saw that Su was this hard to study, so he took some money and convinced Su's father to send Su to the closest elementry school to them which is 100 miles away.
In the first semester of elementry school, Su got the last place in class in a test. The teacher called him to the office, but he did not criticize Su, in the other hand, he encouraged Su with lots of effort. That moved Su a lot, so he decided to rise in great vigor. From the next semester to the end of college, he is always the first place in class in every test.
Buqing Su is a model of making best use of his time and study hard. He read lots of books from the beginning of primary school. When he hands his artical to his teacher in middle school, the teacher reads and finds that its way of writting is similar to the famous acient book 《Zuozhuan》, so the teacher suspect Su that he didn't write it himself. So the teacher decided to test Su in class, and point to an artical in 《Zuozhuan》 and asked Su what this artical is about. Unexpectedly, Su can recite the whole artical to the teacher. This surprises the teacher and all the classmates. It turned out that he read 《Zuozhuan》so much that he could recite it!
一个人不能好吃懒做，因为只有努力才能得到成功。
苏步青，1901年生，我国着名数学家、学者，曾任复旦大学名誉校长。他出生于贫苦的农民家庭，从小就在地里劳动：放牛、割草、犁田，什么都干。那时他想，这辈子肯定没有读书的机会了。
恰好，村里一户有钱人请了家庭教师，教他的公子读书。苏步青有空，就在窗外听听，随手写写画画。想不到，那位公子没学好，苏步青却因此学到不少知识。他的叔叔见他这么想学习，便拿出钱，说服苏步青的爸爸，把他送到百里之外的一所小学去读书。
在小学的第一个学期，苏步青考了个倒数第一名，老师把他叫到办公室，热忱地鼓励他。这使苏步青大受感动，决心发愤图强。真下了决心，情况就不一样了，从第二学期起一直到大学毕业，他每学期都考第一。
苏步青是抓紧时间、勤奋学习的典范。他从小学起，就抓紧时间读了好多好书。进初中后，他的第一篇作文交上去，教师一看，那写作方法，很像是古代着名的《左传》的写法，便怀疑这是不是苏步青自己写的。上课时，老师要考考他，随便点了《左传》上的一篇文章，要他说说写的是什么。不料，他立即一字不错地把那篇文章背给老师听。这使老师和同学们大吃一惊：原来，他读《左传》读得能够背出来了！
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From the Chinese translation
Because only when you work you hard, you can succeed.
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Wow, that's amazing! Good work!
Be a hardworking person.
A person mustshould not be prefering eating but lazy workinglazy, they should instead work hard.
Because only when you work you hard, you cancan you succeed.
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Writing "his article" here makes it seem like the reader should already know about the article. I changed it to "piece of work" as it isn't something you had already introduced in the text and so it may be slightly easier to read this way.
So, the teacher decided to test Su in class, and point to an articale in 《'Zuozhuan》' and asked Su what thise articale is about.
Unexpectedly, Su can recite the whole articale to the teacher, which surprises the teacher and all the classmates.
This surprises the teacher and all the classmates.
It turned out that he read 《'Zuozhuan》' so much that he could recite it!
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Nice piece of work, just a few grammatical and stylistic points you could think about :)
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He was born in 1901 in a poor farmer family. He was born in 1901 He was born "into" a family, or, he was born "to" a family, are more commonly used than "in" He was born in 1901 |
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Be a hardworking person Be a hardworking person. Be a We capitalize the first letter of important words in titles. |
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A person must not be prefering eating but lazy working. A person A person From the Chinese translation |
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Because only when you work you hard, you can succeed. Because only when you work
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Buqing Su is a famous mathematician and scholar from China, and was once the headmaster of Fudan university. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Buqing Su is a famous mathematician and scholar from China |
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So he work in the farmlands when he was little, such as grazing bulls, cutting grass, ploughing fields, and many other things.
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He thought that he will never have the chance of geting an education. He thought that he w He thought that he w "Would" is the past tense for "will." |
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Luckily, there was a wealthy family in the neighborhood who hired a teacher to teach their son. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When Buqing Su was available, he would listen to the class outside the window, and taking notes. When Buqing Su |
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In the end, the rich family's son did not turned out to be good in his study, but Buqing Su got a lot of knowledge instead. In the end, the rich family's son did not In the end, the rich family's son did not turn |
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Su's uncle saw that Su was this hard to study, so he took some money and convinced Su's father to send Su to the closest elementry school to them which is 100 miles away. Su's uncle saw that Su w
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In the first semester of elementry school, Su got the last place in class in a test. In the first semester of elementary school, Su In the first semester of elementary school, Su |
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The teacher called him to the office, but he did not criticize Su, in the other hand, he encouraged Su with lots of effort. The teacher called him to the office, but he did not criticize Su, in The teacher called him to the office, but he did not criticize Su |
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That moved Su a lot, so he decided to rise in great vigor. That moved Su Th |
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From the next semester to the end of college, he is always the first place in class in every test. From the next semester to the end of college, he From the next semester to the end of college, he |
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Buqing Su is a model of making best use of his time and study hard. Buqing Su is a model Buqing Su |
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He read lots of books from the beginning of primary school. He read lots of good books from the beginning of primary school onwards. |
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