Today is a wonderful day because gof I can get up from bed untilmy bed. I waoke up at 9 am in the morning. Today is a wonderful day because got up from my bed. I woke up at 9 am in the morning.

It is very important to break down sentence clauses and also utilise possesive pronouns such as me, my, mine. Also, adding a comma and a full-stop after the sentence

Today iwas a wonderful day because of I can get up from bed until I wake up at 9amI was able to get out of bed and wake up by 9 a.m. in the morning. Today was a wonderful day because I was able to get out of bed and wake up by 9 a.m. in the morning.

The phrase "Today is a wonderful day" is in the present tense, but the rest of the paragraph is in past tense. To keep consistency, change "is" to "was." "because of I can get up from bed until I wake up at 9 am in the morning": The phrase "because of" is incorrect here. Also, "I can get up" should be in the past tense, so it should be "I was able to get out of bed." "Until I wake up" doesn't make sense in this context; "wake up by 9 a.m." works better.

I went to a beautiful garden near my house with my daughter. I went to a beautiful garden near my house with my daughter.

This is very good!

The sunlightweather was very hot and many people laid on the grass ground. The weather was very hot and many people laid on the grass.

It is "NOT" the sunlight that is very hot but rather the weather which so happen to be the Sun. So you can also say the "The sun was shining and the weather was so hot it made people to lay on the grass''.

The sunlight was very hotstrong, and many people laidy on the grass ground. The sunlight was very strong, and many people lay on the grass.

"Hot" isn't the best word for sunlight (it’s usually "strong" or "bright"), and "laid" should be "lay" (past tense of "lie"). The word "ground" isn’t needed after "grass," so it’s cleaner to say "on the grass."

After sun down, the weather became cold and wind gust.y. After sun down, the weather became cold and windy.

This is good! You utilized weather here.

After sunthe sun went down, the weather became cold, and the wind gustpicked up. After the sun went down, the weather became cold, and the wind picked up.

"Sun down" should be "the sun went down," and "wind gust" should be "the wind picked up" or "there were gusts of wind." "After the sun went down, the weather became cold, and the wind picked up."

We walked for a long time trying to find a dessert shop. We walked for a long time trying to find a dessert shop.

This sentence is grammatically correct, but it could be smoother in past tense by saying "trying to find" to show ongoing effort.

Maybe too late many shop closed and we have to got theThe shops had closed because it was late. Afterwards, we hopped on a bus back to home. The shops had closed because it was late. Afterwards, we hopped on a bus back home.

Maybe it was too late, as many shops were closed, and we haved to gottake the bus back to home. Maybe it was too late, as many shops were closed, and we had to take the bus back home.

The phrase "Maybe too late" needs to be changed to "Maybe it was too late" to match the past tense. "Many shop" should be "many shops" to make it plural. "We have to got" should be corrected to "we had to take" because it’s a past event. Finally, "back to home" should be simplified to "back home" to avoid redundancy.