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takyam

June 20, 2023

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Battles with Crows カラスとの戦い

A garbage truck comes around twice a week in my city. We are supposed to take out our garbage in a transparent or a semitransparent plastic bag in front of each house on those days. Most of us cover a net on the bag in order to prevent crows from tearing bags to eat the contents and scatter them.

私の市では、生ごみ収集車が週に2回来る。その日には、透明か半透明のビニール袋に生ごみを入れて、出すことになっている。ほとんどの住民は、カラスが中身を食べようと、袋を破って中身を散らかしたりしないように、袋にネットをかぶせている。

The net had worked for many years, but one day, the bag was torn, and the leftover was strewed around. Crows seemed to be smart enough to remove the net. Then I sprayed pesticide over the net the next time to keep them away, and that worked for a while. However, they began to attack the “prey” and make a mess around.

長年、ネットは役目を果たしていたが、ある日のこと、ゴミ袋が破れて中身が散らかっていることがあった。カラスが賢くなって、ネットを外したのだ。そこで、私は次の収集日に、カラスを寄せ付けないように、ネットの上から殺虫剤を噴霧した。何回かは効果があったが、再びカラスが獲物に襲い掛かり、周りを汚した。

I googled this matter and found out various garbage containers for crows. However, I didn’t want to spend money for those bad birds

このことを検索すると、いろんなカラス用のゴミ容器があるのがわかった。しかし、悪い奴らのために、お金を使いたくなかった。

The truck comes around 7:00 AM, and I decided to take out the garbage around 6:50, hoping that crows won’t have enough time to do their “task” in about 10 minutes. That has been effective for about several weeks so far, but I suspect that they will do harm again in the 10 minutes because they are said to be intelligent. Let’s see how long this will work. It’s a battle of wits between crows and me.

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Battles with Crows カラスとの戦い

A garbage truck comes around twice a week in my city.

We are supposed to take out our garbage in a transparent or a semitransparent plastic bag and put it in front of eachthe house on those days.

あるいは、
We are supposed to take out our garbage in transparent or semitransparent plastic bags and put them in front of the house on those days.

Most of us cover a net on the bagthe bag with a net in order to prevent crows from tearing the bags to, eating the contents and scattering them garbage about.

また、
Most residents cover the bags with nets to prevent crows from tearing open the bags and scattering the contents in an attempt to eat the them.

私の市では、生ごみ収集車が週に2回来る。その日には、透明か半透明のビニール袋に生ごみを入れて、出すことになっている。ほとんどの住民は、カラスが中身を食べようと、袋を破って中身を散らかしたりしないように、袋にネットをかぶせている。


The net had worked for many years, but one day, the bag was torn, and the
leftovergarbage was strewedn around.

strew, strewn, strewed

また、
For many years the nets served their purpose, until one day the trash bags were ripped open and the contents scattered.

Crows seemed to be smart enough to remove the net.

Then I sprayed pesticide over the net the next time to keep them away, and that worked for a while.

However, they beganThey began, however, to attack the “prey” and make a mess around.

「However」は書き方で最初の文が使わない方がいいとお思います。

長年、ネットは役目を果たしていたが、ある日のこと、ゴミ袋が破れて中身が散らかっていることがあった。カラスが賢くなって、ネットを外したのだ。そこで、私は次の収集日に、カラスを寄せ付けないように、ネットの上から殺虫剤を噴霧した。何回かは効果があったが、再びカラスが獲物に襲い掛かり、周りを汚した。


I googled this matter and found
outvarious garbage containers for crows.¶

また、¶
I googled this matter and discovered
various garbage containers for crows.

However, I didn’tI didn’t, however, want to spend money foron those bad birds


このことを検索すると、いろんなカラス用のゴミ容器があるのがわかった。しかし、悪い奴らのために、お金を使いたくなかった。



The truck comes around 7:00 AM, and I decided to take out the garbage around 6:50, hoping that
(the) crows wouldn’t have enough time to do their “task” in about 10 minutes.

悪い奴らって、ハハ!そして、頭がいいですね。

That has been effective for about several weeks so far, but I suspect that they will do harm again in the 10 minutes because they are said to be intelligent.

また、
That has been effective for about several weeks now, but I suspect that they will do harm again in the 10 minutes because they are said to be intelligent.

Let’s see how long this will work.

It’s a battle of wits between crows and me.

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頑張って下さい!応援しています!そして、とてもよく書けています!

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takyam

June 24, 2023

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I haven't seen you for a while, do I was worried if something had happened to you. I'm happy to see you again, mari.

Thank you for your helpful corrections again.

The duplication problems of my posts, which you let me know, were solved thanks to you. I managed to access to the support section, and they did some tricks to fix them. ^^

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mari

June 25, 2023

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I haven't seen you for a while, do I was worried if something had happened to you. I'm happy to see you again, mari. Thank you for your helpful corrections again. The duplication problems of my posts, which you let me know, were solved thanks to you. I managed to access to the support section, and they did some tricks to fix them. ^^

よかった!申し訳ありません。🙇🏻‍♀️ 家族に会ったり用事をしたりしました。これからもっと添削するようにしています。^^

Battles with Crows カラスとの戦い

After reading your entry, I think a better title is "My Battle Against the Crows"

AThe garbage truck comes around twice a week in my city.

Yours is technically correct! But "The garbage truck" is more common to say :)

We are supposed to take out our garbage in a transparent or a semitransparent plastic bag, and place it in front of each houseour homes on those days.

Most of us coverplace a net on the bag in orderver our bags to prevent the crows from tearing bags tothem apart and eating the contents andinside, then scattering them contents everywhere.

私の市では、生ごみ収集車が週に2回来る。その日には、透明か半透明のビニール袋に生ごみを入れて、出すことになっている。ほとんどの住民は、カラスが中身を食べようと、袋を破って中身を散らかしたりしないように、袋にネットをかぶせている。


The net had worked for many years
, but. That is until one day, the bag was torn, and the leftovers wasere found strewedn arboundt.

CThe crows seemed to bhave become smart enough to remove the net.

Then I sprayed pesticide over the net the next time to keep them away, and that worked for a while.

However, they eventually began to attack their “prey” and make a mess aroundgain, resulting in a mess everywhere.

Personally, instead of "prey," I think "target" is a better word choice as "prey" suggests the target is alive. But I think that might be an intentional choice on your part?

長年、ネットは役目を果たしていたが、ある日のこと、ゴミ袋が破れて中身が散らかっていることがあった。カラスが賢くなって、ネットを外したのだ。そこで、私は次の収集日に、カラスを寄せ付けないように、ネットの上から殺虫剤を噴霧した。何回かは効果があったが、再びカラスが獲物に襲い掛かり、周りを汚した。


I googled this matter and found
out various garbage containers fordesigned to keep the crows away.

However, I didn’on't want to spend any more money foron those bad birds


このことを検索すると、いろんなカラス用のゴミ容器があるのがわかった。しかし、悪い奴らのために、お金を使いたくなかった。



The truck comes around 7:00 AM,
and I decidedso my current strategy is to take out the garbage around 6:50, hoping that the crows won’t have enough time to do their “task” in abouwork on the garbage bag in that 10 minutes window.

I think "bad" is an awkward choice for an adult to describe birds. A better word could be "mean," "annoying," "thieving," "scavenging," or even "wretched" (though "wretched" is more dramatic lol)

Thatis has been effective for about several weeks so far, but I suspect that they will do harm again in the 10 minutes because they crows will eventually figure out how to ravage a bag within a 10 minute window/time frame. Crows are said to be intelligent.

Let’s see how long this will work.

It’s a battle of wits between the crows and me.

I think technically it should be "the crows and I" but in spoken English, only teachers care lol.

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This was a very entertaining read! I am invested in who will triumph in the saga of the garbage bag vs the crows. Your English is great.

A general tip--some of your sentences appear to get quite lengthy and you risk having run-on sentences. It is sometimes difficult to fit all the information you want to fit into one sentence. Don't be afraid to break them up!

In Canada, the garbage bags go into a garbage can with a heavy lid. I've never seen crows get into the garbage, but I have seen raccoons knock the garbage cans over and scavenge through the leftovers... Gross.

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takyam

June 20, 2023

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However, I didn’on't want to spend any more money foron those bad birds


このことを検索すると、いろんなカラス用のゴミ容器があるのがわかった。しかし、悪い奴らのために、お金を使いたくなかった。



The truck comes around 7:00 AM,
and I decidedso my current strategy is to take out the garbage around 6:50, hoping that the crows won’t have enough time to do their “task” in abouwork on the garbage bag in that 10 minutes window.

Haha. I can imagine how many childish English words I have used because of my vocabulary shortage.>< Thanks for letting me know those words.

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takyam

June 20, 2023

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Thank you for your helpful corrections, detailed explanations, and nice comment.

I'll try not to be afraid to break my sentences up.^^

Housing complexes do have sturdy garbage cans, but many detached houses don't. Wow, raccoons! Our saying, "ところ変われば、品変わる" or "Different places, different things". I guess.

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takyam

June 20, 2023

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Battles with Crows カラスとの戦い

Oh, yes! That's much better.

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goprincess13525

June 22, 2023

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Thank you for your helpful corrections, detailed explanations, and nice comment. I'll try not to be afraid to break my sentences up.^^ Housing complexes do have sturdy garbage cans, but many detached houses don't. Wow, raccoons! Our saying, "ところ変われば、品変わる" or "Different places, different things". I guess.

Aaah, I see. That makes sense. And no problem!

Thank you for teaching me that expression! ^_^

Battles with Crows カラスとの戦い


Battles with Crows カラスとの戦い

After reading your entry, I think a better title is "My Battle Against the Crows"

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

A garbage truck comes around twice a week in my city.


AThe garbage truck comes around twice a week in my city.

Yours is technically correct! But "The garbage truck" is more common to say :)

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

We are supposed to take out our garbage in a transparent or a semitransparent plastic bag in front of each house on those days.


We are supposed to take out our garbage in a transparent or a semitransparent plastic bag, and place it in front of each houseour homes on those days.

We are supposed to take out our garbage in a transparent or a semitransparent plastic bag and put it in front of eachthe house on those days.

あるいは、 We are supposed to take out our garbage in transparent or semitransparent plastic bags and put them in front of the house on those days.

Most of us cover a net on the bag in order to prevent crows from tearing bags to eat the contents and scatter them.


Most of us coverplace a net on the bag in orderver our bags to prevent the crows from tearing bags tothem apart and eating the contents andinside, then scattering them contents everywhere.

Most of us cover a net on the bagthe bag with a net in order to prevent crows from tearing the bags to, eating the contents and scattering them garbage about.

また、 Most residents cover the bags with nets to prevent crows from tearing open the bags and scattering the contents in an attempt to eat the them.

私の市では、生ごみ収集車が週に2回来る。その日には、透明か半透明のビニール袋に生ごみを入れて、出すことになっている。ほとんどの住民は、カラスが中身を食べようと、袋を破って中身を散らかしたりしないように、袋にネットをかぶせている。 The net had worked for many years, but one day, the bag was torn, and the leftover was strewed around.


私の市では、生ごみ収集車が週に2回来る。その日には、透明か半透明のビニール袋に生ごみを入れて、出すことになっている。ほとんどの住民は、カラスが中身を食べようと、袋を破って中身を散らかしたりしないように、袋にネットをかぶせている。


The net had worked for many years
, but. That is until one day, the bag was torn, and the leftovers wasere found strewedn arboundt.

私の市では、生ごみ収集車が週に2回来る。その日には、透明か半透明のビニール袋に生ごみを入れて、出すことになっている。ほとんどの住民は、カラスが中身を食べようと、袋を破って中身を散らかしたりしないように、袋にネットをかぶせている。


The net had worked for many years, but one day, the bag was torn, and the
leftovergarbage was strewedn around.

strew, strewn, strewed また、 For many years the nets served their purpose, until one day the trash bags were ripped open and the contents scattered.

Crows seemed to be smart enough to remove the net.


CThe crows seemed to bhave become smart enough to remove the net.

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Then I sprayed pesticide over the net the next time to keep them away, and that worked for a while.


Then I sprayed pesticide over the net the next time to keep them away, and that worked for a while.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

However, they began to attack the “prey” and make a mess around.


However, they eventually began to attack their “prey” and make a mess aroundgain, resulting in a mess everywhere.

Personally, instead of "prey," I think "target" is a better word choice as "prey" suggests the target is alive. But I think that might be an intentional choice on your part?

However, they beganThey began, however, to attack the “prey” and make a mess around.

「However」は書き方で最初の文が使わない方がいいとお思います。

長年、ネットは役目を果たしていたが、ある日のこと、ゴミ袋が破れて中身が散らかっていることがあった。カラスが賢くなって、ネットを外したのだ。そこで、私は次の収集日に、カラスを寄せ付けないように、ネットの上から殺虫剤を噴霧した。何回かは効果があったが、再びカラスが獲物に襲い掛かり、周りを汚した。 I googled this matter and found out various garbage containers for crows.


長年、ネットは役目を果たしていたが、ある日のこと、ゴミ袋が破れて中身が散らかっていることがあった。カラスが賢くなって、ネットを外したのだ。そこで、私は次の収集日に、カラスを寄せ付けないように、ネットの上から殺虫剤を噴霧した。何回かは効果があったが、再びカラスが獲物に襲い掛かり、周りを汚した。


I googled this matter and found
out various garbage containers fordesigned to keep the crows away.

長年、ネットは役目を果たしていたが、ある日のこと、ゴミ袋が破れて中身が散らかっていることがあった。カラスが賢くなって、ネットを外したのだ。そこで、私は次の収集日に、カラスを寄せ付けないように、ネットの上から殺虫剤を噴霧した。何回かは効果があったが、再びカラスが獲物に襲い掛かり、周りを汚した。


I googled this matter and found
outvarious garbage containers for crows.¶

また、¶
I googled this matter and discovered
various garbage containers for crows.

However, I didn’t want to spend money for those bad birds このことを検索すると、いろんなカラス用のゴミ容器があるのがわかった。しかし、悪い奴らのために、お金を使いたくなかった。 The truck comes around 7:00 AM, and I decided to take out the garbage around 6:50, hoping that crows won’t have enough time to do their “task” in about 10 minutes.


However, I didn’on't want to spend any more money foron those bad birds


このことを検索すると、いろんなカラス用のゴミ容器があるのがわかった。しかし、悪い奴らのために、お金を使いたくなかった。



The truck comes around 7:00 AM,
and I decidedso my current strategy is to take out the garbage around 6:50, hoping that the crows won’t have enough time to do their “task” in abouwork on the garbage bag in that 10 minutes window.

I think "bad" is an awkward choice for an adult to describe birds. A better word could be "mean," "annoying," "thieving," "scavenging," or even "wretched" (though "wretched" is more dramatic lol)

However, I didn’tI didn’t, however, want to spend money foron those bad birds


このことを検索すると、いろんなカラス用のゴミ容器があるのがわかった。しかし、悪い奴らのために、お金を使いたくなかった。



The truck comes around 7:00 AM, and I decided to take out the garbage around 6:50, hoping that
(the) crows wouldn’t have enough time to do their “task” in about 10 minutes.

悪い奴らって、ハハ!そして、頭がいいですね。

That has been effective for about several weeks so far, but I suspect that they will do harm again in the 10 minutes because they are said to be intelligent.


Thatis has been effective for about several weeks so far, but I suspect that they will do harm again in the 10 minutes because they crows will eventually figure out how to ravage a bag within a 10 minute window/time frame. Crows are said to be intelligent.

That has been effective for about several weeks so far, but I suspect that they will do harm again in the 10 minutes because they are said to be intelligent.

また、 That has been effective for about several weeks now, but I suspect that they will do harm again in the 10 minutes because they are said to be intelligent.

Let’s see how long this will work.


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It’s a battle of wits between crows and me.


It’s a battle of wits between the crows and me.

I think technically it should be "the crows and I" but in spoken English, only teachers care lol.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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