Aug. 2, 2020
This morning, I discovered that two bats had flown into my sleeping room while I was asleep. Now, they are hanging upside down at the lamp, sleeping.
I live in the periphery of one of the biggest cities of Germany. It surprises me that there are bats around here, it is kind of unexpected for me that they fly into peoples' homes.
Somewhere I have heard that bats transmit diseases, even though I can't recall the context right now. Therefore it would be kind of them if they could simply fly out and find another place to sleep. Or maybe they could at least wear a face mask. But when I talked to them, they ignored me. And it didn't look like they understand humour. So, I tried to scare them by making a lot of noise with the vacuum cleaner. However, they simply ignored me and my noise. I looked for that terrible incense some aggressive Chinese street vendor me to buy a few years ago. Eventually, it might be of some use. The bats ignored the smell, but it made me get a headache. Great. Next try, maybe bats are scared of cats. I carried the cats into the sleeping room, but the animals ignored each other. After a few minutes, there were four instead of two animals sleeping in my room. I would be really happy if I had a sleep as deep as theirs.
Considering the soundness of their sleep, I could simply catch them, but they look so fragile that I don't dare to do it. Bats are endangered species in Germany. And where should I put them? So there is no way out: I have to wait till the evening. I hope they will get hungry and fly out to hunt insects.
But what do I do if they come back? What do I do if they get used to sleeping in my room? Can humans and bats be friends?
I live ion the periphery of one of the biggest cities ofin Germany.
Somewhere I have heard that bats transmit diseases, even although I can't recall the context right now.
Therefore it would be kind of themnice if they could simply fly out and find another place to sleep.
Or maybe they could at least wear a face masks.
I looked for that terrible incense some aggressive Chinese street vendor me to buypushed on me a few years ago.
could be "got me to buy," I changed it to an idiom I like in this sentence.
Eventually, it might be of some use.Maybe it would drive out the bats?
Original text doesn't sound right for the situation, could be deleted or changed fully. "Eventually" sounds like you are talking about events farther in the future than is the case in this story.
And where shwould I put them?
So there is no way out:; I have to wait till the evening.
I hope they will get hungry and fly out to hunt insects.
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Very well written, I'm jealous of how funny you can be in your second language
I live ion the periphery of one of the biggest cities of Germany.
Therefore it would be kind of them if they could simply fly out and find another place to sleep.
Or maybe they could at least wear a face mask.
But when I talked to them, they ignored me.
And it didn't look like they understand humour.
So, I tried to scare them by making a lot of noise with the vacuum cleaner.
However, they simply ignored me and my noise.
The bats ignored the smell, but it madgave me get a headache.
I carried the cats into the sleeping room, but the animals ignored each other.
After a few minutes, there were four instead of two animals sleeping in my room.
I would be really happy if I had a sleep as deep as theirs.
Considering the soundness of their sleep, I could simply catch them, but they look so fragile that I don't dare to do it.
Bats are endangered species in Germany.
And where should I put them?
So there is no way out: I have to wait till the evening.
I hope they will get hungry and fly out to hunt insects.
But what do I do if they come back?
What do I do if they get used to sleeping in my room?
Can humans and bats be friends?
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Funny! I like your writing style.
Bats are pretty cute. But I still hope that it's only a one night stay, for your sake.
This morning, I discovered that two bats had flown into my sleeping bedroom while I was asleep.
Now, they are hanging upside down at theon a lamp, sleeping.
I live in the periphery of one of the biggest cities ofin Germany.
It surprisesd me that there are bats around here, it is kind of unexpected for me that theythem to fly into peoples' homes.
Therefore, it would be kind of them if they could simply fly out and find another place to sleep.
And it didn't look like they understandood my humour.
So, I tried to scare them by making a lot of noise with the vacuum cleaner.
However, they simply ignored me and mythe noise.
I looked for that terrible incense some aggressive Chinese street vendor me toade me buy a few years ago.
Eventually, it might bbecame of some use.
The bats ignored the smell, but it made me get a headache.
you could also say: "...but it gave me a headache."
NAs for my next try, maybe bats are scared of cats.?
I carried the cats into the sleeping my bedroom, but the animals ignored each other.
After a few minutes, there were now four instead of just two animals sleeping in my room.
I would be really happy if I hadcould have a sleep as deep as theirs.
Considering the soundness of their sleep, I could simply catch them, but they looked so fragile that I wouldon't dare to do it.
Bats are an endangered species in Germany.
And where shwould I put them?
So there is no way out:. I have to wait untill the evening.
But what do I do if they come back?
What do I do if they get used to sleeping in my room?
Can humans and bats be friends?
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I love your story, it's very entertaining! :D I want to find out what happens next!
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This morning, I discovered that two bats had flown into my sleeping bedroom while I was asleep.
Schlafzimmer -> bedroom
Now, they are hanging upside down atfrom the lamp, sleeping.
I live in the periphery of one of the biggest cities of Germany.
It surprises me that there are bats around here,; it is kind of unexpected for me that they fly into peoples's homes.
https://www.grammarly.com/blog/semicolon/
people is already plural, so it is "people's homes"
Somewhere I have heardI heard somewhere that bats transmit diseases, even although I can't recall the context right now.
sounds smoother this way
Therefore, it would be kind of them if they could simply fly out and find another place to sleep.
Or maybe they could at least wear a face mask.
ha!
But when I talked to them, they ignored me.
And it didn't lookseem like they understandood my humour.
if you meant humour in general, then your original sentence was correct (except no matter what, you should change "look" to "seem"), but I think the sentence sounds better when you talk about your humour specifically
So, I tried to scare them by making a lot of noise with the vacuum cleaner.
However, they simply ignored me and my noise.
I looked for thate terrible incense some aggressive Chinese street vendor me persuaded me to buy a few years ago.
when you say "that", it sounds like the reader is supposed to know what you are talking about, as in you told them in the past.
Eventually, it might be of some use.
The bats ignored the smell, but it made me get a headache.
Great.
Next try, maybe bats are scared of cats.
I carried the cats into the sleeping bedroom, but the animals ignored each other.
After a few minutes, there were four animals instead of two animals sleeping in my room.
I would be really happy if I had a sleep as deep as theirs.
Considering the soundness of their sleep, I could simply catch them, but they look so fragile that, so I doidn't dare to do it.
Bats are an endangered species in Germany.
And wWhere should I put them?
So there is no way out: I have to wait till the evening.
I hope they will get hungry and fly out to hunt insects.
But what do I do if they come back?
What do I do if they get used to sleeping in my room?
Can humans and bats be friends?
Feedback
Very interesting story!! You will have to write an update sometime! :)
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