March 25, 2022
Banning the use of mobile phones (C1 CAE Writing)
A letter: Banning the use of mobile phones
Your town council is thinking about banning the use of mobile phones on public transport and in shops and restaurants.
Write a letter to the town council giving your opinion about this and why you think it is or is not a good idea.
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(Could you help me to make it sound more natural? Thanks in advance)
(ANSWER)
To whom it may concern,
Current mobiles phones can access on the internet, play multiple sorts of games, record audio, take photos,.... For these reasons, almost everybody has always their mobiles with them. This digital addiction sometimes interfere with daily life, for example, during a meeting with friends, in which some of them seem to be more interested in texting than having a conversation face to face. Despite this fact, banning people so far is not a good precedent in a democracy.
In my humble opinion, these are very severe restrictions for the citizenship, because they unable people communicating in the commonest places of our town, so if they are aproved it would not take so long until citizen take them down.
In a hand-on point of view, mobiles are helpful for people to use in restaurants and shops to pay or to do shopping list; even on public transport as a bus ticket, all of which is faster than the traditional way.
It is also true that people are abusing on their use, though it would be better educate people not to overuse mobiles and lift his head, rather than imposing so tight a banning.
Finally, what is worst, whenever politicians forced citizen to be educated by means of restrictions results are just the opposite. Moreover, it is usually the beginning of the end of freedom, which every one consider to be linked to democracy.
All in all, I do think these kinds of banning would be useful for nothing more than create controversy.
Best regards,
Jesús Correa Benitez
Could you help me to make it sound more natural? Thanks in advance
To whom it may concern,
Current mobiles phones can access on the internet, play multiple sorts of games, record audio, take photos,.... For these reasons, almost everybody has always their mobiles with them.
This digital addiction can sometimes interfere with daily life, for example, during a meeting with friends, in which some of them seem to be more interested in texting than having a conversation face to face.
Despite this fact, banning people so far is not a good precedent in a democracy.
In my humble opinion, these are very severe restrictions for theon citizenship, because they unableprevent people from communicating in the most commonest places of our town, so if they are approved it then would not take so long until citizen take them down.
In a hands-on point of view, mobiles are helpful for people to use in restaurants and shops to pay or to domake shopping list; even on public transport as a bus ticket, all of which is faster than the traditional way.
It is also true that people are abusing on their usphone usage, though it would be better to educate people not to overuse mobiles and lift his headook up, rather than imposing soa tight a banning.
Finally, what is worst, whenever politicians forced citizen to be educated by means of restrictions the results are just the opposite.
Moreover, it is usually the beginning of the end of freedom, which every one considers to be linked to democracy.
All in all, I do think these kinds of bannings would be useful for nothing more than to create controversy.
Best regards,
Jesús Correa Benitez
March 26, 2022
Hi Kaity, thank you so much for your help and patience.
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Banning the use of mobile phones (C1 CAE Writing) |
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A letter: Banning the use of mobile phones |
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Your town council is thinking about banning the use of mobile phones on public transport and in shops and restaurants. |
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Write a letter to the town council giving your opinion about this and why you think it is or is not a good idea. |
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(Could you help me to make it sound more natural? Thanks in advance) |
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(ANSWER) |
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To whom it may concern, This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Current mobiles phones can access on the internet, play multiple sorts of games, record audio, take photos,.... For these reasons, almost everybody has always their mobiles with them. Current mobile |
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This digital addiction sometimes interfere with daily life, for example, during a meeting with friends, in which some of them seem to be more interested in texting than having a conversation face to face. This digital addiction can sometimes interfere with daily life, for example, during a meeting with friends, in which some of them seem to be more interested in texting than having a conversation face to face. |
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Despite this fact, banning people so far is not a good precedent in a democracy. Despite this fact, banning people |
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In my humble opinion, these are very severe restrictions for the citizenship, because they unable people communicating in the commonest places of our town, so if they are aproved it would not take so long until citizen take them down. In my humble opinion, these are very severe restrictions |
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In a hand-on point of view, mobiles are helpful for people to use in restaurants and shops to pay or to do shopping list; even on public transport as a bus ticket, all of which is faster than the traditional way. In a hands-on point of view, mobiles are helpful for people to use in restaurants and shops to pay or to |
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It is also true that people are abusing on their use, though it would be better educate people not to overuse mobiles and lift his head, rather than imposing so tight a banning. It is also true that people are abusing |
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Finally, what is worst, whenever politicians forced citizen to be educated by means of restrictions results are just the opposite. Finally, what is worst, whenever politicians forced citizen to be educated by means of restrictions the results are just the opposite. |
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Moreover, it is usually the beginning of the end of freedom, which every one consider to be linked to democracy. Moreover, it is usually the beginning of the end of freedom, which every |
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All in all, I do think these kinds of banning would be useful for nothing more than create controversy. All in all, I do think these kinds of ban |
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Best regards, This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Jesús Correa Benitez This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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