Dec. 5, 2024
Baby Panda
A couple of days ago, I met a Brazilian friend online. She's a fan of pandas, so I told her the story about the first time I saw a baby panda.
It was over ten years ago. I traveled to Chengdu with two of my best friends. We ate many different yummy foods and had a lot of fun so we were a little tired.
But my friends still wanted to go to the Research Base of Giant Panda, which was quite far from our hotel.
Although I preferred plants to animals and just wanted to have a relaxing day, I followed them to the base. Because our rule was "the minority is subordinate to the majority".
You can imagine my low spirit after being stuck in traffic and then walking thousands of steps.
Then we were pushed into the baby panda area by crowded people. Suddenly, I was delighted.
Servel baby pandas were basking in the warm sunshine on a hillside, about four meters far away from us. They were laid down on a blanket by their babysitters. Most of them were obedient, but one of them was different. Its babysitter wanted to let its face toward us, maybe just being polite. But it didn't want to do that. It always turned its ass toward us. Its babysitter tried to adjust it a few times, then gave up.
I can't describe how cute it was, even in Chinese!
That's the day I became a fan of pandas.
几天前，我在网上碰到一个巴西朋友。她是一个熊猫粉，所以我跟她讲了我第一次看到熊猫宝宝的故事。
那是十多年前的事了。我和两个最好的朋友一起去成都旅游。我们吃了很多美味的食物，玩得很开心，以至于有点累了。
但是我的朋友们还是想去大熊猫基地，那里离我们酒店老远。
虽然我更喜欢植物而非动物，也只想松快一天，但少数服从多数，还是跟她们去了基地。
你可以想象我堵车再走了几千步后的低落心情。
然后我们被拥挤的人群推到了熊猫宝宝区。我突然就开心了起来。
几只熊猫宝宝在离我们四米远的山坡上沐浴着阳光。他们被奶爸奶妈放在毯子上。大多数都很乖，但有一个与众不同。它的奶妈想让它脸对我们，大概想礼貌一点。但它不想这么做。它总是把屁股转向我们。它奶妈调整了几次，放弃了。
我无法形容它有多可爱，即使是用中文！
从那天起，我就成了熊猫的粉。
Baby Panda
A couple of days ago, I met a Brazilian friend online.
She's a fan of pandas, so I told her the story about the first time I saw a baby panda.
It was over ten years ago.
I traveled to Chengdu with two of my best friends.
But my friends still wanted to go to the Research Base of Giant Panda, which was quite far from our hotel.
Although I preferred plants to animals and just wanted to have a relaxing day, I followed them to the base.
Because our rule was "the minajority is subordinate to the majoritywins".
It sounds more natural
You can imagine my low spirit after being stuck in traffic and then walking thousands of steps.a very long distance.
Then we were pushed into the baby panda area by the crowded people.
Suddenly, I was delighted.
Serveral baby pandas were basking in the warm sunshine on a hillside, about four meters far away from us.
They were laid down on a blanket by their babysitters.
Most of them were obedient, but one of them was different.
Its babysitter wanted to let its face toward us, maybe just being polite.
But it didn't want to do that.
It always turned its ass toward us.
Its babysitter tried to adjust it a few times, then gave up.
I can't describe how cute it was, even in Chinese!
That' was the day I became a fan of pandas.
Feedback
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A couple of days ago, I madet a Brazilian friend online.
Made could be better here, because met sounds to me like you already knew them.
She's a fan oflikes pandas, so I told her the story about the first time I saw a baby panda.
It could just be me, but saying you are "a fan of" an animal just sounds a little strange
We ate many different yummydelicious foods and had a lot of fun so we were a little tired.
yummy is a very informal word compared to the rest of the text.
But my friends still wanted to go to the Research Base of Giant Pandas, which was quite far from our hotel.
Although I preferred plants to animals and just wanted to have a relaxing day, I followed them to the base.
If you still prefer plants to animals, it sounds more natural to keep that part in the present tense.
Then we were pushed into the baby panda area by crowdeds of people.
They werehad been laid down on a blanket by their babysitters.
"They were laid down" isn't wrong, but it sounds quite archaic! I'm not sure of the meaning of "by their babysitters": do you mean the babysitters were next to the pandas, or that the babysitters had put the pandas on the blanket? I have interpreted it as the latter, but if you meant to the former, "They were lying down on a blanket next to their babysitters" is less ambiguous.
Its babysitter wanted to let its face toward us, maybe just being polite.
I'm uncertain of your meaning "maybe just being polite"
That's the day I became a fan ofrealised I loved pandas.
Dec. 8, 2024
Thanks a lot for such detailed feedback!
Have a nice day!
Baby Panda
A couple of days ago, I met a Brazilian friend online.
She's a fan of pandas, so I told her the story about the first time I saw a baby panda.
It was over ten years ago.
I traveled to Chengdu with two of my best friends.
We ate many different yummy foods and had a lot of fun, so we were a little tired.
But my friends still wanted to go to the Research Base of Giant Panda, which was quite far from our hotel.
Although I preferred plants to animals and just wanted to have a relaxing day, I followed them to the base.
Because our rule was "the minority is subordinate to the majority".
You can imagine my low spirit after being stuck in traffic and then walking thousands of steps.
Then we were pushed into the baby panda area by crowded people.
Suddenly, I was delighted.
Serveral baby pandas were basking in the warm sunshine on a hillside, about four meters far away from us.
They were laid down on a blanket by their babysitters.
Most of them were obedient, but one of them was different.
Its babysitter wanted to let its face toward us, maybe just beingto be polite.
But it didn't want to do that.
It always turned its ass toward us.
Its babysitter tried to adjust it a few times, then gave up.
I can't describe how cute it was, even in Chinese!
That's the day I became a fan of pandas.
Feedback
Wonderful! Sounds like a fun memory
Dec. 8, 2024
Thanks a lot!
Indeed it's a fun memory.
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