Correct this email and let it sound more formal, pls. Thx.ease. Thank you. Correct this email and let it sound more formal, please. Thank you.

Dear Sir or Madam:, Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or /Madam:, Dear Sir/Madam,

https://forum.wordreference.com/threads/dear-sir-or-madam-dear-sir-madam.470417/ I would also prefer “Dear Hiring Manager” or something similar.

I hope you are finedoing well. I hope you are doing well.

I hope you are fine. I hope you are fine.

This seems extraneous in a business email, unless you have already established a connection with the person before.

I hope you are fine.doing well. I hope you doing well.

My name is Dominik Doe, and I am interested in your International Internship Program. My name is Dominik Doe, and I am interested in your International Internship Program.

Especially tThe opportunities page on your website especially aroused my interest immensely. The opportunities page on your website especially aroused my interest immensely.

Especially tThe opportunities page on your website especially aroused my interest immensely. The opportunities page on your website especially aroused my interest.

Especially, the opportunities page on your website arouspeaked my interest immensely. Especially, the opportunities page on your website peaked my interest immensely.

However, some questions occurred during reading through your websiteafter reading through the information, I have a couple of questions which I would like to get answeredask before applying:. However, after reading through the information, I have a couple of questions which I would like to ask before applying.

However, some questions occurred duringto me while I was reading through your website, which I would like to gethave answered before applying: However, some questions occurred to me while I was reading through your website, which I would like to have answered before applying:

“Occur” needs an indirect object when it means something closer to “realize” than to “happen.”

However, some questions occurred duringto me while reading through your website which I would like to gethave answered before applying: However, some questions occurred to me while reading through your website which I would like to have answered before applying:

You are talking aboutFirst of all, I saw details regarding “special projects” which are assigned for a 6 month rotation. First of all, I saw details regarding “special projects” which are assigned for a 6 month rotation.

You arr webpage talkings about “special projects” which are assigned for a 6 six-month rotation. Your webpage talks about “special projects” which are assigned for a six-month rotation.

Could you give me a fewsome examples, please? Could you give me some examples, please?

Are there any plans to realizestart them in the future? Are there any plans to restart them in the future?

Are there any plans to realizhave them in the future? Are there any plans to have them in the future?

We do “realize” possibilities, but here it doesn’t work because “exclude” suggests that there is no such possibility at the moment.

Are there any plans to realizintroduce them in the future? Are there any plans to introduce them in the future?

18 months ago, I did a first internship at a BMW plant in my region for ten weeks. 18 months ago, I did a first internship at a BMW plant in my region for ten weeks.

this is correct, but "region" sounds kind of weird. Was it in your state or your city, for example? If you can't find a replacement word, I would replace "in my region" to "nearby"

18 months ago, I did amy first internship at a BMW plant in my region for ten weeks. 18 months ago, I did my first internship at a BMW plant in my region for ten weeks.

One of yourthe requirements is that it lastedthe duration of the internship should have been at least three months. One of the requirements is that the duration of the internship should have been at least three months.

One of your requirements is that ithis prior internship lasted at least three months. One of your requirements is that this prior internship last at least three months.

Is there a chance to participate in your Pprogram either anyway? Is there a chance to participate in your program anyway?

Is therWill I have a chance to participate in your Program either wayregardless? Will I have a chance to participate in your Program regardless?

“Either way” suggests that more than one scenario has been put out.

Thanks you in advance for answering the questions. Thank you in advance for answering the questions.

Thanks you in advance for answering the questions. Thank you in advance for answering the questions.

“Thanks” is rather informal. It can be fine if a more informal tone has been set, but without such context I wouldn’t use it.

Yours sSincerely, Sincerely,

Yours sincerely, Yours sincerely,

Yes, a comma is necessary for closing remarks of this variety.

Yours sincerely, Yours sincerely,