April 22, 2022
Asking the boss for a raise
Dear Mr boss,
I am glad to report that the sales increased by 15 %. The reason lies within our team and our work ethics. Everybody contributes to the company with their knowledge and proffessionalism so we can grow beyond ourselves and therefore enrich the company.
As a result, there are strong indicators for raising the salary for others in my team and for me.
First of all, my profession is quite specialized and needed because I garantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company whereas nobody has a special training for this . It is therefore inevitable having somebody like me.
Because of the high demand of such workers like me, different companies, who see my worth, have offered me a job.I still have not answered to these offers.
I am looking forward to disscussing upon mutual agreement about the salary with you that will depict my worth for the company in a more appropriate manner so I can decline these companies` offers.
Sincerely
Erny [last name]
Dear Mr b. Boss,
I am glad to report that the sales have increased by 15 %.
The reason lies within our team and our work ethics.
Everybody contributes to the company with their knowledge and proffessionalism so we can grow beyondwith their professional knowledge and work ethics so we can improve ourselves and therefore enrich the company.
Not really sure what you mean by "professionalism".
As a resultTherefore, there are strong indicatorreasons for raising the salary for othof all the members in my team and for me.
First of all, my profession is quite specialized and neededa necessity because I can guarantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company, whereas nobody has aelse has had the special training for this to do so.
It is tTherefore inevitable, having somebody like me is a must.
Sorry, personal bias here but due to a certain very popular movie franchise, the word "inevitable" has a lot of extra baggage now. You're free to use the word if you want.
Because of the high demand of such workers like me, different companies, who see my worth, have offered me a job.I still have not answered to these offersfor those with my expertise, other companies have approached me with job offers. I have yet to answer those.
I am looking forward to disscussing uponand coming to a mutual agreement about the salary with you that will depict my worth foron an increased salary befitting my contributions to theis company in a more appropriate manner, so I can decline these companies` other offers.
Personally, I don't think you should keep the last part about declining offers.
Sincerely,
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Just upfront, I've never had to write a letter like this before, so I'm not really positive on what the standard should look like and which word choices may be more appropriate. Maybe someone else can give you a more professional sounding edit.
April 22, 2022
It is tTherefore inevitable, having somebody like me is a must.
Sorry, I do not know what you mean. Why does "inevitable" has an extra baggage ?
April 22, 2022
There's a very famous movie quote that's: "I am...inevitable." The franchise it's from is ridiculously popular, and that quote has become a meme, hence the extra baggage. It now has connotations outside of its dictionary definition, though that may not apply to everyone.
This is going into pop culture territory, so it's probably fine if you just ignore it and use the word as you normally would. However, it's probably better to avoid "I am inevitable" or anything that describes you yourself as "inevitable", unless you're making a joke or reference to that specific quote.
Your original sentence kind of skirted the edge of that, which is why I mentioned it. That quote is famous enough that I am probably not the only person who would make such a connection. Sorry if I confused you.
Dear Mr boss,
I am glad to report that the sales increased by 15 %.
The reason lies within our team and our work ethics.
Everybody contributes to the company with their knowledge and proffessionalism so we can grow beyond ourselves and therefore enrich the company.
professionalism
As a result, there are strong indicators for raising the salary for others in my team and for me.
First of all, my profession is quite specialized and needed because I garantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company whereas nobody has a special training for this .
my job role sounds better and more natural
It is therefore inevitable having somebody like me.
crucial is a better word to use instead of inevitable.
Because of the high demand of such workers like me, different companies, who see my worth, have offered me a job.I still have not answered to these offers.
I am looking forward to disscussing upon mutual agreement about the salary with you that will depict my worth for the company in a more appropriate manner so I can decline these companies` offers.
Feedback
Great work, overall it makes sense it just needed a few tweaks. :)
Dear Mr. boss,
The reason lies within our team and our work ethics.
Work ethic and work ethics mean slightly different things. Work ethic means someone's obligation to work, while work ethics would more mean the ethics of work.
First of all, my profession is quite specialized and needed because I guarantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company whereas nobody has a special training for this .
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Everybody contributes to the company with their knowledge and proffessionalism so we can grow beyond ourselves and therefore enrich the company. Everybody contributes to the company with their knowledge and proffessionalism so we can grow beyond ourselves and therefore enrich the company. professionalism Everybody contributes Not really sure what you mean by "professionalism". |
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As a result, there are strong indicators for raising the salary for others in my team and for me. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
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First of all, my profession is quite specialized and needed because I garantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company whereas nobody has a special training for this . First of all, my profession is quite specialized and needed because I guarantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company whereas nobody has a special training for this . First of all, my profession is quite specialized and needed because I garantee the functionality of difficult processes within the company whereas nobody has a special training for this . my job role sounds better and more natural First |
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It is therefore inevitable having somebody like me. It is therefore inevitable having somebody like me. crucial is a better word to use instead of inevitable.
Sorry, personal bias here but due to a certain very popular movie franchise, the word "inevitable" has a lot of extra baggage now. You're free to use the word if you want. |
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Because of the high demand of such workers like me, different companies, who see my worth, have offered me a job.I still have not answered to these offers. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Because of the high demand |
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I am looking forward to disscussing upon mutual agreement about the salary with you that will depict my worth for the company in a more appropriate manner so I can decline these companies` offers. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I am looking forward to dis Personally, I don't think you should keep the last part about declining offers. |
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