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Are Women More Peaceful than Men?

Women have nurturing characters, can be better caregivers, and get along with children, elders and other pets. There’s an idea that they're more peaceful by nature and aren’t adapted to competitive struggle whether in a career or in life in general. While this assumption is ubiquitous among modern humans in general, there're plenty of reasons to think it’s a preconception.

Society is accustomed to believing that men are strong and aggressive, love sports and beer, while women are fragile and gorgeous, enjoying cooking and cleaning. In some countries today, a woman who dresses in a gender-neutral way still might be perceived as rebellious or weird. However, these persuasions are no more than social roles created by society many years ago. Because women are more polite and nurturing, dress in feminine ways, people think it’s their natural traits. But women are expected to be polite and feminine, so they act according to this ideology so as not to be excluded from society.

The world expects helpfulness, kindness, and vulnerability from women, and many people don’t even realise that it’s gender stereotyping. In a culture that expects women to be obedient, their expression of anger and other strong emotions is not welcome. This results in jeopardizing women’s freedom, achievements and happiness in general. Women who live under social pressure and gender stereotyping face a wide range of social and psychological problems, among which are violence at home and depression. Frightened by their own husbands and society’s condemnation, many of them are hesitant to leave their partners or ask for help.

Modern culture, which dictates social norms of behavior and appearance, creates unrealistic standards of beauty for women. Popular media broadcast messages that implicitly and openly advertise the image of a perfect woman, with an excellent body and classical manners. The continued promotion of dieting, exercising, and plastic surgery implies that women are able to achieve these standards of appearance.

Unrealistic standards of beauty can also be seen in movies. For example, in Disney movies men are often portrayed as big and strong, while women are shown as being fragile, vulnerable and always needed to be saved. Princess Ariel in The Little Mermaid loses her voice, while Belle in Beauty and the Beast is scared by the intimidating and gigantic Beast. Princess Snow White in Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs is constantly busy with cooking, and Sleeping Beauty is simply waiting to be rescued… the list goes on.

Having found themselves unable to meet the standards of society, women give up and become depressed. Being exhausted and tired, many of them are chronically unsatisfied with themselves and struggle with self-confidence. Although many women are still expected to act according to their gender, be domestic and emotional, we have to admit that these are only gender stereotypes that restrict human’s freedom. Furthermore, these standards prevent not only women but also men from having a happy and satisfactory life.


Women have nurturing characters, can be better caregivers, and get along with children, elders and other pets. There’s an idea that they're more peaceful by nature and aren’t adapted to competitive struggle whether in a career or in life in general. While this assumption is ubiquitous among modern humans in general, there're plenty of reasons to think it’s a preconception.

Society is accustomed to believing that men are strong and aggressive, love sports and beer, while women are fragile and gorgeous, enjoying cooking and cleaning. In some countries today, a woman who dresses in a gender-neutral way still might be perceived as rebellious or weird. However, these tendencies are no more than social roles created by society many years ago. Because women are more polite and nurturing, dress in feminine ways, people think these are their natural traits. But women are expected to be polite and feminine, so they act according to this ideology so as not to be excluded from society.

The world expects helpfulness, kindness, and vulnerability from women, and many people don’t even realise that it’s gender stereotyping. In a culture that expects women to be obedient, their expression of anger and other strong emotions is not welcome. This results in jeopardizing women’s freedom, achievements and happiness in general. Women who live under social pressure and gender stereotyping face a wide range of social and psychological problems, among which are violence at home and depression. Frightened by their own husbands and society’s condemnation, many of them are hesitant to leave their partners or ask for help.

Modern culture, which dictates social norms of behavior and appearance, creates unrealistic standards of beauty for women. Popular media broadcast messages that implicitly and openly advertise the image of a perfect woman, with an excellent body and classical manners. The continued promotion of dieting, exercising, and plastic surgery implies that women are able to achieve these standards of appearance.

Unrealistic standards of beauty can also be seen in movies. For example, in Disney movies men are often portrayed as big and strong, while women are shown as being fragile, vulnerable and always needed to be saved. Princess Ariel in The Little Mermaid loses her voice, while Belle in Beauty and the Beast is scared by the intimidating and gigantic Beast. Princess Snow White in Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs is constantly busy with cooking, and Sleeping Beauty is simply waiting to be rescued.

Having found themselves unable to meet the standards of society, women give up and become depressed. Being exhausted and tired, many of them are chronically unsatisfied with themselves and struggle with self-confidence. Although many women are still expected to act according to their gender, be domestic and emotional, we have to admit that these are only gender stereotypes that restrict human’s freedom. Furthermore, these standards prevent not only women but also men from having a happy and satisfactory life.

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Are Women More Peaceful Tthan Men?

Nitpick: In titles, there is a rule for certain words that should *not* be capitalized unless they are the first or last word in the title. Basically, it's short or unimportant words, but "than" is usually one of them. See: https://whenyouwrite.com/what-words-do-you-not-capitalize-in-a-title/

However, these persuasceptions are no more than social roles created by society many years ago.

"Persuasions" works grammatically, but it's an odd word to use here.

If "these" refers to "being perceived as rebellious or weird": perceptions, impressions, beliefs, stereotypes, attitudes
If "these" refers to gender roles: roles, tendencies, behaviors, habits

Because women are more polite and nurturing, dress in feminine ways, people think it’sthese are their natural traits.

polite, nuturing, dress -> three traits

For example, in Disney movies men are often portrayed as big and strong, while women are shown as being fragile, vulnerable and always neededing to be saved.

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Very nice essay! Flows very naturally.

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Jan. 30, 2023

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Are Women More Peaceful Tthan Men?

thank you !

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thank you so much for your help and comments!

Are Women More Peaceful Than Men?

Women have nurturing characters, can be better caregivers, and get along with children, elders and other pets.

This is fine grammatically. Note that this phrase says that women having nurturing characters is factual. In regard to the rest of the text, I am not sure if you intended to write it this way.

There’s an idea that they're more peaceful by nature and aren’t adapted to competitive struggle whether in a career or in life in general.

While this assumption is ubiquitous among modern humans in general, there're plenty of reasons to think it’s a preconception.

Society is accustomed to believing that men are strong and aggressive, love sports and beer, while women are fragile and gorgeous, enjoying cooking and cleaning.

In some countries today, a woman who dresses in a gender-neutral way still might be perceived as rebellious or weird.

However, these persuasions are no more than social roles created by society many years ago.

Because women are more polite and nurturing, dress in feminine ways, people think it’s their natural traits.

But women are expected to be polite and feminine, so they act according to this ideology so as not to be excluded from society.

The world expects helpfulness, kindness, and vulnerability from women, and many people don’t even realise that it’s gender stereotyping.

In a culture that expects women to be obedient, their expression of anger and other strong emotions is not welcome.

This results in jeopardizing women’s freedom, achievements and happiness in general.

Women who live under social pressure and gender stereotyping face a wide range of social and psychological problems, among which are violence at home and depression.

Frightened by their own husbands and society’s condemnation, many of them are hesitant to leave their partners or ask for help.

Modern culture, which dictates social norms of behavior and appearance, creates unrealistic standards of beauty for women.

Popular media broadcast messages that implicitly and openly advertise the image of a perfect woman, with an excellent body and classical manners.

The continued promotion of dieting, exercising, and plastic surgery implies that women are able to achieve these standards of appearance.

Unrealistic standards of beauty can also be seen in movies.

For example, in Disney movies men are often portrayed as big and strong, while women are shown as being fragile, vulnerable and always neededing to be saved.

Princess Ariel in The Little Mermaid loses her voice, while Belle in Beauty and the Beast is scared by the intimidating and gigantic Beast.

Princess Snow White in Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs is constantly busy with cooking, and Sleeping Beauty is simply waiting to be rescued… the list goes on.

If this is intended to be an academic piece, the "... the list goes on" is usually not done in academic writings. However, it is natural in casual speech and writings.

Having found themselves unable to meet the standards of society, women give up and become depressed.

Being exhausted and tired, many of them are chronically unsatisfied with themselves and struggle with self-confidence.

Although many women are still expected to act according to their gender, be domestic and emotional, we have to admit that these are only gender stereotypes that restrict human’s freedom.

Furthermore, these standards prevent not only women but also men from having a happy and satisfactory life.

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Great read! You made clear and compelling arguments.

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liya_allien

Jan. 30, 2023

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Thank you so much!

Are Women More Peaceful Than Men?


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Are Women More Peaceful Tthan Men?

Nitpick: In titles, there is a rule for certain words that should *not* be capitalized unless they are the first or last word in the title. Basically, it's short or unimportant words, but "than" is usually one of them. See: https://whenyouwrite.com/what-words-do-you-not-capitalize-in-a-title/

Women have nurturing characters, can be better caregivers, and get along with children, elders and other pets.


Women have nurturing characters, can be better caregivers, and get along with children, elders and other pets.

This is fine grammatically. Note that this phrase says that women having nurturing characters is factual. In regard to the rest of the text, I am not sure if you intended to write it this way.

There’s an idea that they are more peaceful by nature and aren’t adapted to competitive struggle whether in a career or in life in general.


While this idea is ubiquitous among modern humans in general, there are plenty of reasons to think it’s a preconception.


Society is accustomed to believing that men are strong and aggressive, love sports and beer, while women are fragile and gorgeous, enjoying cooking and cleaning.


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In some countries today, a woman who dresses in a gender-neutral way still might be perceived as rebellious or weird.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

However, these persuasions are no more than social roles created by society many years ago.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

However, these persuasceptions are no more than social roles created by society many years ago.

"Persuasions" works grammatically, but it's an odd word to use here. If "these" refers to "being perceived as rebellious or weird": perceptions, impressions, beliefs, stereotypes, attitudes If "these" refers to gender roles: roles, tendencies, behaviors, habits

Because women are more polite and nurturing, dress in feminine ways, people think it’s their natural traits.


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Because women are more polite and nurturing, dress in feminine ways, people think it’sthese are their natural traits.

polite, nuturing, dress -> three traits

But women are expected to be polite and feminine, so they act according to this ideology so as not to be excluded from society.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The world expects helpfulness, kindness, and vulnerability from women, and many people don’t even realise that it’s gender stereotyping.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In a culture that expects women to be obedient, their expression of anger and other strong emotions is not welcome.


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This results in jeopardizing women’s freedom, achievements and happiness in general.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Women who live under social pressure and gender stereotyping face a wide range of social and psychological problems, among which are violence at home and depression.


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Frightened by their own husbands and society’s condemnation, many of them are hesitant to leave their partners or ask for help.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Modern culture, which dictates social norms of behavior and appearance, creates unrealistic standards of beauty for women.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Popular media broadcast messages that implicitly and openly advertise the image of a perfect woman, with an excellent body and classical manners.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The continued promotion of dieting, exercising, and plastic surgery implies that women are able to achieve these standards of appearance.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Unrealistic standards of beauty can be seen in movies.


For example, in Disney movies men are often portrayed as big and strong, while women are shown as being fragile, vulnerable and always needed to be saved.


For example, in Disney movies men are often portrayed as big and strong, while women are shown as being fragile, vulnerable and always neededing to be saved.

For example, in Disney movies men are often portrayed as big and strong, while women are shown as being fragile, vulnerable and always neededing to be saved.

Princess Ariel in The Little Mermaid loses her voice, while Belle in Beauty and the Beast is scared by the intimidating and gigantic Beast.


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Princess Snow White in Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs is constantly busy with cooking, and Sleeping Beauty is simply waiting to be rescued… the list goes on.


Princess Snow White in Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs is constantly busy with cooking, and Sleeping Beauty is simply waiting to be rescued… the list goes on.

If this is intended to be an academic piece, the "... the list goes on" is usually not done in academic writings. However, it is natural in casual speech and writings.

Having found themselves unable to meet the standards of society, women give up and become depressed.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Being exhausted and tired, many of them are chronically unsatisfied with themselves and struggle with self-confidence.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Although many women are still expected to act according to their gender, be domestic and emotional, we have to admit that these are only gender stereotypes that restrict human’s freedom.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Furthermore, these standards prevent not only women but also men from having a happy and satisfactory life.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

There’s an idea that they're more peaceful by nature and aren’t adapted to competitive struggle whether in a career or in life in general.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

While this idea is ubiquitous among modern humans in general, there're plenty of reasons to think it’s a preconception.


Unrealistic standards of beauty can also be seen in movies.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

While this assumption is ubiquitous among modern humans in general, there're plenty of reasons to think it’s a preconception.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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