April 19, 2020
『 The Hare and the Tortoise』
Hare country and Tortoise country hold a marathon race every year to compete which one runs faster.
Peter, the representative runner of Hare, said to Kevin, the representative runner of Tortoise, “No matter how many times we compete, Hare would win for sure, so let's stop such a stupid race.” Kevin said back, “No way! Tortoise will win for sure. If we lose, we will challenge again until we will win!”
The race got started. Peter pretended to be asleep on the way to the goal and lost it purposely. Tortoise won for the first time. Peter said to Kevin, “You are satisfied with this, aren't you? Let's stop our countries from holding meaningless races no longer.” “Nope! We will continue to compete and Tortoise will aim at a consecutive winner.” Kevin said so and left Peter. Peter was accused of the lost by Hare citizens and expatriated from Hare.
“I think the aim is wrong. It's not always nice to run faster. Tortoise has its own qualities. Furthermore, if Hare wants to improve themselves, they should challenge in other things like a contest of wits. They're all ridiculous!” Peter spat out and quickly left there for a new land.
Lesson:
There’s no accounting for tastes.
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『ウサギとカメ』
ウサギ国とカメ国は毎年マラソン大会を開催し、どちらが早く走れるか勝負していました。
ウサギ国代表の出場者ピーターは、同じくカメ国代表の出場者ケビンに言いました。「何度やってもウサギが勝つから、こんなバカバカしい大会はやめようぜ」ケビンは言い返しました。「いいや!必ずカメが勝つんだ!負けたら勝つまで勝負し続けるんだ!」
大会が始まると、ピーターは途中で寝たふりをしてわざと負けました。初めてカメが勝ちました。ピーターはケビンに言いました。「これで満足だろ?我々の国にもうムダな大会をやらせないようにしようぜ」「いいや!これからも勝負して連勝を目指すんだ」そう言ってケビンは去って行きました。ピーターは負けたことで仲間から非難され、ウサギ国を追放されました。
「目指すものが違ってると思うんだ。早く走ればいいってもんじゃないだろ。カメにはカメの良さがあるだろうが。それにウサギも自分たちを改善したいのなら、知恵比べとかもっと他のことで挑戦すればいいのに。アホか!」ピーターは吐き捨てるように言って、新しい土地を目指しさっさとそこを去りました。
教訓:
蓼食う虫も好き好き
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『 "The Hare and the Tortoise』"
The race got startedbegan.
"Started" is fine, too, but you don't need to use "got."
Peter pretended to befall asleep on the way to the goalfinish line and lost iton purposely.
"Fall asleep" sounds best to me. Also, for races, we say "finish line." Goal is used for other sports, such as soccer and basket ball.
Tortoise won for the first time.
We will continue to compete and Tortoise will aim at afor consecutive winner.s,” Kevin said so and left Peter.
"Wins" should be plural.
TheyYou're all ridiculous!” Peter spat out and quickly left there for a new land.
If Peter is saying this to the hares, "you're" is best.
"Left there" sounds a little awkward to me.
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Nice job. I made a few additional suggestions/corrections. This is an unusual but interesting re-telling of the story.
Hare country and Tortoise country hold a marathon race every year to compete which one runs faster.
I might say "to see which animal runs faster." The "one" here sounds like it's talking about the countries, but countries cannot run.
Peter, the representative runner of Hare, said to Kevin, the representative runner of Tortoise, “No matter how many times we compete, Hare wouldill win for sure, s. So let's stop such a stupid race.” Kevin said back, “No way!¶
"No way," replied Kevin.
"Tortoise will win for sure.
If we lose, we will challenge you again until we will win!”
The race got started.
You can also simply say "the race started," but this is fine.
Peter pretended to be asleep on the way to the goal and lost iton purposely.
Tortoise won for the first time.
Let's stop our countries from holding meaningless races noany longer.” “Nope!
We will continue to compete and Tortoise will aim atfor a consecutive winner.,” Kevin said so and left Peter.
Peter was accused ofblamed for the losts by Hare citizens and expatriated from Hare (country).
If you want to use the word accuse, you would write the sentence like this:
"Peter was accused of losing the race on purpose..."
“I think the aimour goal is wrong.
I would say, "I think we are misguided."
It's not always nicebetter to run faster.
If you mean that running faster is mean, then the original sentence is OK.
Tortoise has its own qualities.
Or, "Tortoises have their own qualities." But I think "Tortoise" is the name of the land, so it's OK the way you wrote it.
Furthermore, if Hares wants to improve themselves, they should challengompete in other things like a contest of wits.
The word challenge needs to have an object. For example, "challenge you" or "challenge something." It isn't used by itself very often.
They're all ridiculous!” Peter spat out and quickly left there for a new land.
If he's talking to the Hares, he should say "You're all ridiculous!"
There’s no accounting for tastes.
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This isn't the version of the story I remember, haha! What an interesting take on a classic fairy tale. Thank you for sharing!
Hare country and Tortoise countryThe hares and the tortoises hold a marathon race every year to competsee which one runs faster.
"The hares" sounds more natural than "hare country." I would either write "to see which one runs faster" or "to compete" but not "to compete which one runs faster."
One year Peter, the representative runner of Hfrom the hares, saidys to Kevin, the representative runner of Ttortoise, “No matter how many times we compete, Hare wouldwe will win for sure, so let's stop such a stupid race.” Kevin said backreplies, “No way!
You could also put the whole story in the past tense:
One year Peter, the representative from the hares, said to Kevin, the representative tortoise, “No matter how many times we compete, we will win for sure, so let's stop such a stupid race.” Kevin replied, “No way!
I think present tense is more natural
Tortoise will win for sure.
If we lose, we will challenge again until we will win!”
The race got started.
Or
"The race starts" if you switch to present tense.
Peter pretended to be asleep on the way to the goal and lost iton purposely.
Or
Peter pretends to be asleep on the way and loses on purpose.
Tortoise won for the first time.
Peter said to Kevin, “You are satisfied with this, aren't you?
Let's stop our countries from holding meaningless races no longer.” “Nope!
We will continue to compete, and Tortoise will aim atfor a consecutive winner.” Kevin said so and left Peter.
Peter was accused of the lost by Hare citizenthe other hares and expatriated from Hhare country.
“I think the aim is wrong.
It's not always nice to run faster.
Tortoises has itsve their own qualities.
Furthermore, if Hhare wants to improve themselves, they should challengompete in other things like a contest of wits.
They're all ridiculous!” Peter spat out and quickly left there for a new land.
Lesson:
There’s no accounting for tastes.
😆😆
Feedback
Nice work!
The race got started. The race Or "The race starts" if you switch to present tense. The race got started. You can also simply say "the race started," but this is fine. The race "Started" is fine, too, but you don't need to use "got." |
Peter pretended to be asleep on the way to the goal and lost it purposely. Peter pretended to be asleep on the way to the goal and lost Or Peter pretends to be asleep on the way and loses on purpose. Peter pretended to be asleep on the way to the goal and lost Peter pretended to "Fall asleep" sounds best to me. Also, for races, we say "finish line." Goal is used for other sports, such as soccer and basket ball. |
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『 The Hare and the Tortoise』
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Hare country and Tortoise country hold a marathon race every year to compete which one runs faster.
"The hares" sounds more natural than "hare country." I would either write "to see which one runs faster" or "to compete" but not "to compete which one runs faster." Hare country and Tortoise country hold a marathon race every year to compete which one runs faster. I might say "to see which animal runs faster." The "one" here sounds like it's talking about the countries, but countries cannot run. |
Peter, the representative runner of Hare, said to Kevin, the representative runner of Tortoise, “No matter how many times we compete, Hare would win for sure, so let's stop such a stupid race.” Kevin said back, “No way! One year Peter, the representative You could also put the whole story in the past tense: One year Peter, the representative from the hares, said to Kevin, the representative tortoise, “No matter how many times we compete, we will win for sure, so let's stop such a stupid race.” Kevin replied, “No way! I think present tense is more natural Peter, the representative runner of Hare, said to Kevin, the representative runner of Tortoise, “No matter how many times we compete, Hare w |
Tortoise will win for sure. This sentence has been marked as perfect! "Tortoise will win for sure. |
If we lose, we will challenge again until we will win!” This sentence has been marked as perfect! If we lose, we will challenge you again until we will win!” |
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Peter said to Kevin, “You are satisfied with this, aren't you? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
Let's stop our countries from holding meaningless races no longer.” “Nope! This sentence has been marked as perfect! Let's stop our countries from holding meaningless races |
We will continue to compete and Tortoise will aim at a consecutive winner.” Kevin said so and left Peter. We will continue to compete, and Tortoise will aim We will continue to compete and Tortoise will aim We will continue to compete and Tortoise will aim "Wins" should be plural. |
Peter was accused of the lost by Hare citizens and expatriated from Hare. Peter was accused of the lost by Peter was If you want to use the word accuse, you would write the sentence like this: "Peter was accused of losing the race on purpose..." |
“I think the aim is wrong. This sentence has been marked as perfect! “I think I would say, "I think we are misguided." |
It's not always nice to run faster. This sentence has been marked as perfect! It's not always If you mean that running faster is mean, then the original sentence is OK. |
Tortoise has its own qualities. Tortoises ha Tortoise has its own qualities. Or, "Tortoises have their own qualities." But I think "Tortoise" is the name of the land, so it's OK the way you wrote it. |
Furthermore, if Hare wants to improve themselves, they should challenge in other things like a contest of wits. Furthermore, if Furthermore, if Hares want The word challenge needs to have an object. For example, "challenge you" or "challenge something." It isn't used by itself very often. |
They're all ridiculous!” Peter spat out and quickly left there for a new land. This sentence has been marked as perfect! They're all ridiculous!” Peter spat out and quickly left there for a new land. If he's talking to the Hares, he should say "You're all ridiculous!"
If Peter is saying this to the hares, "you're" is best. "Left there" sounds a little awkward to me. |
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There’s no accounting for tastes. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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