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Tammy

Oct. 26, 2024

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An extra day

I won't hike today because of the rain in eastern China.

It seems like I have an extra day this week.

By now, I already finished my English learning routine, took care of my little windowsill garden, and cooked a big meal for lunch.

Oh, I also edited and uploaded a video of the mountain view from my hike last Saturday.

Last Saturday, I hiked Xianhua Mountain in Pujiang, Zhejiang Province.

Contrary to the cloudy weather forecast, it rained all the time. This was a disaster for the hiking process because it made the trail muddy and slippery.

When we finally got to the top of the mountain, I felt it was definitely worth it.

Maybe you can see the reason in this video:https://youtu.be/f0ixdLi-lBs

One of my favorite Tang poets, Wang Wei, once said, "Go to the water ending, sit and watch the clouds rise"--That's also my joy of hiking.

I'm already kind of missing the feeling of hiking.


因为华东的雨,我今天不去徒步了。

这周多了一天的感觉。

到现在为止,我已经完成了我的英语学习,打理了我的窗台小花园,并做了一顿丰盛的午餐。

哦,我还编辑并上传了上周六徒步旅行时的山景视频。

上周六,我去浙江浦江的一座山里徒步了。

不同于预报的阴天,一直下雨。这对徒步来说可谓一场灾难,山路泥泞而湿滑。

当终于到达山顶,我觉得这绝对值得。

也许你可以在这个视频中看到原因https://youtu.be/f0ixdLi-lBs

我最喜欢的唐代诗人之一王维曾说:“行到水穷处,坐看云起时。”——这也是我徒步旅行的乐趣。

已经在怀念徒步的感觉了。

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An extra day

I won't hike today because of the rain in eastern China.

It seems like I have an extra day this week.

By now, I already finished my English learning routine, took care of my little windowsill garden, and cooked a big meal for lunch.

Oh, I also edited and uploaded a video of the mountain view from my hike last Saturday.

Last Saturday, I hiked Xianhua Mountain in Pujiang, Zhejiang Province.

Contrary to the cloudy weather forecastforecast that said it would be cloudy, it rained all ththe entire time.

This was a disaster for the hiking process because it made the trail muddy and slippery.

When we finally got to the top of the mountain, I felt it was definitely worth it.

Maybe you can see the reason in this video:https://youtu.be/f0ixdLi-lBs


One of my favorite Tang
Dynasty poets, Wang Wei, once said, "Go to the water ending, sit and watch the clouds rise"--That's also my joy of hiking.

I'm already kind of missing the feeling of hiking.

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Tammy

Oct. 27, 2024

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Thank you so much!

Have a nice day!

I won't hike today because of theit's raining in eastern China.

This feels a bit more natural.

It seems like I have an extra day this week.

By now, II've already finished my English learning routine, tookaken care of my little windowsill garden, and cooked a big meal for lunch.

Changing tense like this is a more natural way to include the meaning of "by now" in your sentence.

Oh, I also edited and uploaded a video of the mountain view from my hike last Saturday.

As written is fine. You could also continue this sentence in the present perfect tense, like the last one.

Last Saturday, I hiked Xianhua Mountain in Pujiang, Zhejiang Province.

Contrary to the cloudy weather forecast, it rained all ththe whole time.

A bit more natural

ThisIt was a disaster for the hiking process, because it made the trail muddy and slippery.

This is more natural.

When we finally got to the top of the mountain, I felt it was definitely worth it.

Maybe you can see the reason (why) in this video: https://youtu.be/f0ixdLi-lBs


One of my favorite Tang poets, Wang Wei, once said, "Go to the water ending, sit and watch the clouds rise"--That's also
myhow I find joy ofin hiking.

A bit more natural with "why" in the sentence, I think.

I'm already kind of missing the feeling of hiking.

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How beautiful!

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Tammy

Oct. 27, 2024

1

Thanks a lot!

Have a nice day!

An extra day

I won't hike today because of the rain in eastern China.

It seems like I have an extra day this week.

By now, II have already finished my English learning routine, tookaken care of my little windowsill garden, and cooked a big meal forsumptuous lunch.

1. The present perfect aspect better conveys the meaning. You’re trying to focus on your present state of having time to spare, rather than the three acts themselves. Wikipedia has an overview of with examples of English sentences: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Perfect_(grammar).
2. Serial comma in this case is not necessary for clarity. But either way is perfectly acceptable to most English users.

Oh, I have also edited and uploaded a video of the mountain view from my hike last Saturday.

Same as preceding comments regarding the perfective aspect.

Last Saturday, I hiked Xianhua Mountain in Pujiang, Zhejiang Province.

Contrary to the cloudy weather forecast, it rained all the timeDefying the forecast of overcast skies, it rained continuously.

This was a disaster for the hiking process because it made the trail muddy and slippery.

When we finally got to the top of the mountainreached the peak, I felt it was definitely worth it.

Maybe you can see the reason in this video: https://youtu.be/f0ixdLi-lBs


One of my favorite Tang poets, Wang Wei, once said, "
Go to the water endingProceed to where the water stream ends, sit and watch the clouds rise"--That's also my joy of hiking.

Or perhaps “where the water starves itself” would be a more literal translation. But that is not really interpreted in English the same way as “ends”.

I'm already kind of missing the feeling of hiking.

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Tammy

Oct. 26, 2024

1

Thank you so much! I learned a lot from your corrections and feedback.

Have a nice weekend!

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I won't hike today because of theit's raining in eastern China.

This feels a bit more natural.

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It seems like I have an extra day this week.


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By now, I already finished my English learning routine, took care of my little windowsill garden, and cooked a big meal for lunch.


By now, II have already finished my English learning routine, tookaken care of my little windowsill garden, and cooked a big meal forsumptuous lunch.

1. The present perfect aspect better conveys the meaning. You’re trying to focus on your present state of having time to spare, rather than the three acts themselves. Wikipedia has an overview of with examples of English sentences: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Perfect_(grammar). 2. Serial comma in this case is not necessary for clarity. But either way is perfectly acceptable to most English users.

By now, II've already finished my English learning routine, tookaken care of my little windowsill garden, and cooked a big meal for lunch.

Changing tense like this is a more natural way to include the meaning of "by now" in your sentence.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Oh, I also edited and uploaded a video of the mountain view from my hike last Saturday.


Oh, I have also edited and uploaded a video of the mountain view from my hike last Saturday.

Same as preceding comments regarding the perfective aspect.

Oh, I also edited and uploaded a video of the mountain view from my hike last Saturday.

As written is fine. You could also continue this sentence in the present perfect tense, like the last one.

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Last Saturday, I hiked Xianhua Mountain in Pujiang, Zhejiang Province.


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Contrary to the cloudy weather forecast, it rained all the time.


Contrary to the cloudy weather forecast, it rained all the timeDefying the forecast of overcast skies, it rained continuously.

Contrary to the cloudy weather forecast, it rained all ththe whole time.

A bit more natural

Contrary to the cloudy weather forecastforecast that said it would be cloudy, it rained all ththe entire time.

This was a disaster for the hiking process because it made the trail muddy and slippery.


This was a disaster for the hiking process because it made the trail muddy and slippery.

ThisIt was a disaster for the hiking process, because it made the trail muddy and slippery.

This is more natural.

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When we finally got to the top of the mountain, I felt it was definitely worth it.


When we finally got to the top of the mountainreached the peak, I felt it was definitely worth it.

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I'm already kind of missing the feeling of hiking.


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Maybe you can see the reason in this video:https://youtu.be/f0ixdLi-lBs One of my favorite Tang poets, Wang Wei, once said, "Go to the water ending, sit and watch the clouds rise"--That's also my joy of hiking.


Maybe you can see the reason in this video: https://youtu.be/f0ixdLi-lBs


One of my favorite Tang poets, Wang Wei, once said, "
Go to the water endingProceed to where the water stream ends, sit and watch the clouds rise"--That's also my joy of hiking.

Or perhaps “where the water starves itself” would be a more literal translation. But that is not really interpreted in English the same way as “ends”.

Maybe you can see the reason (why) in this video: https://youtu.be/f0ixdLi-lBs


One of my favorite Tang poets, Wang Wei, once said, "Go to the water ending, sit and watch the clouds rise"--That's also
myhow I find joy ofin hiking.

A bit more natural with "why" in the sentence, I think.

Maybe you can see the reason in this video:https://youtu.be/f0ixdLi-lBs


One of my favorite Tang
Dynasty poets, Wang Wei, once said, "Go to the water ending, sit and watch the clouds rise"--That's also my joy of hiking.

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