Oct. 23, 2024
An experience at a beauty clinic
Last Saturday, I went to a beauty clinic and received some consultations.
I am little concerned about pores on my face and monolid eyes, so I asked for detailed information about treatments.
They were very expensive, which caused me to lose interest, so I said that I would go home and ask someone if I should take the treatments, in order to end the consultation.
Then, a male doctor said that you should decide to take the treatments depending on who I want to be, rather than who others want me to be. He added that this is because if I value opinions of others over my feelings, it could lead to cosmetic surgery addiction.
（This was a little horrible because he seemed t make me stay there and decide the contract.）
Things like this are applied to various things in life. I should make decisions based on my own values, and this time I realized that I do not need the treatments.
An experience at a beauty clinic
Last Saturday, I went to a beauty clinic and received someto have a consultations.
I am little concerned about the pores on my face and monolid eyes, so I asked for detailed information about (possible/available) treatments.
They were very expensive, which caused me to lose interest, so I said that I would go home and ask someone if I should take the treatments, in order to end the consultation.
Then, a male doctor said that you should decide to take the treatments depending on who I want to be, rather than who others want me to be.
He added that this is because if I value opinions of others over my feelings, it could lead to an addiction to cosmetic surgery addiction.
（This was a little horrible because he seemed to want to make me stay there and decide the contract.）
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Things like this are applied to various things in life.
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It is horrible to think there are people out there who say such things to manipulate people. It's disgusting.
An experience at a beauty clinic
Last Saturday, I went to a beauty clinic and received some consultations.
I am a little concerned about pores on my face and monolid eyes, so I asked for detailed information about treatments.
They were very expensive, which caused me to lose interest, s. So I said that I would go home and ask someone if I should take the treatments, in order to end the consultation.
This should be two sentences.
Then, a male doctor said that youI should decide to take the treatments depending on who I want to be, rather than who others want me to be.
He added that this is because if I value opinions of others over my feelings, it could lead to cosmetic surgery addiction.
（This was a little horrible because he seemed to make me stay there and decide the contract.）
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Things like this are applied to various things in life.
The parenthesis are not wrong, but also not necessary.
I should make decisions based on my own values, and this time I realized that I do not need the treatments.
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Great work. These errors were all very minor.
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Last Saturday, I went to a beauty clinic and received some consultations. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Last Saturday, I went to a beauty clinic |
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I am little concerned about pores on my face and monolid eyes, so I asked for detailed information about treatments. I am a little concerned about pores on my face and monolid eyes, so I asked for detailed information about treatments. I am little concerned about the pores on my face and monolid eyes, so I asked for detailed information about (possible/available) treatments. |
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They were very expensive, which caused me to lose interest, so I said that I would go home and ask someone if I should take the treatments, in order to end the consultation. They were very expensive, which caused me to lose interest This should be two sentences. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Then, a male doctor said that you should decide to take the treatments depending on who I want to be, rather than who others want me to be. Then, a male doctor said that This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He added that this is because if I value opinions of others over my feelings, it could lead to cosmetic surgery addiction. This sentence has been marked as perfect! He added that this is because if I value opinions of others over my feelings, it could lead to an addiction to cosmetic surgery |
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（This was a little horrible because he seemed t make me stay there and decide the contract.） Things like this are applied to various things in life.
The parenthesis are not wrong, but also not necessary. （This was a little horrible because he seemed to want to make me stay there and |
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I should make decisions based on my own values, and this time I realized that I do not need the treatments. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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