March 30, 2022
An email: Going away to university (C1 CAE)
An email: Going away to university
You have received the email below from your friend, Alex.
From: [email protected]
Subject: Going away to university
Hi
You know my 18-year-old daughter, Jane, wants to go to university? Well, she told me she’d applied to a university in another city. I’m worried about her living alone in a different city and I told her I didn’t want her to go. Do you think I’ve done the right thing? What would you have done? Do you think it’s a good idea for her to study away from home?
Alex
Reply to Alex’s email. Write about 200 words.
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(What could I do to make it sound more natural?)
(ANSWER)
Hi Alex,
It's been a long time since I don't hear from you. That is a really good new, I'm very proud of your son Sarah. For sure you did the wrong thing. I doubt your decision would have been the same in case of your son were a boy. In fact, you were studying a physics degree at her age, so I think your worries about her are a bit old-fashioned.
Besides, Sarah just turned 18 years old, so she's an adult now and can take her own decisions. It is also true that you are getting behind her economically, and this could make you believe that is your choice. However, she is able to get a part-time job to fund her studies, like many students do. Therefore, in the end is her decision not yours. If she is looking forward to going to university, you should encourage and support her, not banning.
I know Sarah since she was a baby, and she was usually ahead of her classmates in the school. Beyond classes, she behave quite mature for her age in other contexts, for example, thanks to your sexist way of thinking she could do all housework without help at the age of 14. Thus, in my humble opinion, she is more prepared than we were at this point.
All in all, I trust in her potential (as you should do) and think she will adjust to this new life with ease. What will have become of her life if you finally get to stop her dream come true? Trust me, you will regret it in the future. Open your mind and let her do her own life.
Isaac
What could I do to make it sound more natural
It's been a long time since I don't've heard from you.
The negative sounds a bit awkward there.
That is a really good news, I'm very proud of your sondaughter, Sarah.
News is plural
I doubt your decision would have been the same in case of your sonf your daughter were a boy.
You could also say child.
In fact, you were studying a physics degree at her age, so I think your worries about her are a bit old-fashioned.
Besides, Sarah just turned 18 years old, so she's an adult now and can tmake her own decisions.
It is also true that you are getting behindhelping her economically, and this could make you believe that is your choice.
However, she is able to get a part-time job to fund her studies, like many students do.
Therefore, in the end it is her decision not yours.
If she is looking forward to going to university, you should encourage and support her, not banning/stop her.
I know Sarah since she was a baby, and she was usually ahead of her classmates in the school.
Beyond classes, she behaves quite mature for her age in other contexts, for example, thanks to your sexist way of thinking she could do all housework without help at the age of 14.
All in all, I trust in her potential (as you should do) and think she will adjust to this new life with ease.
What will have become of her life if you finally get to stop her dream comefrom coming true?
Trust me, you will regret it in the future.
Open your mind and let her do her own life.
Feedback
Great job!
April 1, 2022
Thank you so much Tidfara for all your corrections.
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An email: Going away to university (C1 CAE) |
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An email: Going away to university |
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You have received the email below from your friend, Alex. |
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From: [email protected] |
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Subject: Going away to university |
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Hi |
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You know my 18-year-old daughter, Jane, wants to go to university? |
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Well, she told me she’d applied to a university in another city. |
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I’m worried about her living alone in a different city and I told her I didn’t want her to go. |
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Do you think I’ve done the right thing? |
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What would you have done? |
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Do you think it’s a good idea for her to study away from home? |
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Alex |
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Reply to Alex’s email. |
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Write about 200 words. |
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(What could I do to make it sound more natural? ) |
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(ANSWER) |
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Hi Alex, |
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It's been a long time since I don't hear from you. It's been a long time since I The negative sounds a bit awkward there. |
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That is a really good new, I'm very proud of your son Sarah. That is News is plural |
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For sure you did the wrong thing. |
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I doubt your decision would have been the same in case of your son were a boy. I doubt your decision would have been the same i You could also say child. |
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In fact, you were studying a physics degree at her age, so I think your worries about her are a bit old-fashioned. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Besides, Sarah just turned 18 years old, so she's an adult now and can take her own decisions. Besides, Sarah just turned 18 years old, so she's an adult now and can |
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It is also true that you are getting behind her economically, and this could make you believe that is your choice. It is also true that you are |
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However, she is able to get a part-time job to fund her studies, like many students do. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Therefore, in the end is her decision not yours. Therefore, in the end it is her decision not yours. |
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If she is looking forward to going to university, you should encourage and support her, not banning. If she is looking forward to going to university, you should encourage and support her, not ban |
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I know Sarah since she was a baby, and she was usually ahead of her classmates in the school. I know Sarah since she was a baby, and she was usually ahead of her classmates in |
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Beyond classes, she behave quite mature for her age in other contexts, for example, thanks to your sexist way of thinking she could do all housework without help at the age of 14. Beyond classes, she behaves quite mature for her age in other contexts, for example, thanks to your sexist way of thinking she could do all housework without help at the age of 14. |
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Thus, in my humble opinion, she is more prepared than we were at this point. |
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All in all, I trust in her potential (as you should do) and think she will adjust to this new life with ease. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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What will have become of her life if you finally get to stop her dream come true? What will have become of her life if you finally get to stop her dream |
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Trust me, you will regret it in the future. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Open your mind and let her do her own life. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Isaac |
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