Sept. 2, 2023
An articel on ageism
Dear Readers,
I considered this topic really interesting. Because of this I would like to share my opinion. Young people respect elderly people in my country and there are several retirees who still are working. As employees they are appreciated, but they earn more less.
It is a significant problem that the most of them have to work still after approaching retirement. It is crucial that the government provide appropriate livelihood for retirees.
My personal experience was happened a couple of years. I was driving when I noticed a young man who helped an elderly lady to walk through the crosswalk. It was a selfless gesture from him.
Perhaps, if people would focus on such deeds like this and the humility for the older people, we could understand the feelings of the older adults. Additionally, it could help if we talk about this condition honestly for instance on the TV.
Best regards
Clara
Dear Readers,
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I considered this topic really interesting.
Consider is present tense, and considered is past tense. I assume you still consider it interesting now.
Because of this, I would like to share my opinion.
Young people respect elderly people in my country and there are several retirees who still are working.
As employees they are appreciated, but they earn moreuch less.
It is a significant problem that the most of them have to work still after approaching retirement.
Or "It is a significant problem that most of them still have to work after approaching retirement."
My personal experience was happened a couple of years ago.
I was driving when I noticed a young man who helpeding an elderly lady to walk through the crosswalk.
It was a selfless gesture from him.
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There were some minor mistakes, but very well written!
Sept. 6, 2023
Thank you so much for your help and your kindness!
An articele on ageism
Dear Readers,
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I considered this topic
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This is a topic I consider really interesting.
The original is still correct, but it sounds a bit awkward.
Because of thisat I would like to share my opinion on it.
very minor stylistic change, original is good too
Young people respect elderly people in my country and there are several retirees who still are working.
As employees they are appreciated, but they earn more less. (more?)
I'm not sure what you meant here, but "more" and "less" can't go together like this.
It is a significant problem that the most of them still have to work still aftereven while approaching retirement.
It is crucial that the government provide appropriate livelihood for retirees.
My personal experience was happened a couple of years ago.
I was driving when I noticed a young man who helped an elderly lady to walk through the crosswalk.
It was a selfless gesture from him.
Perhaps, if people would focus on such deeds like this and the humility for the older people, we could understand the feelings of the older adults.
Additionally, it could help if we talk about this condition honestly for instance on the TV.
Best regards Clara
Sept. 6, 2023
I am very grateful for your help. Thank you!
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Dear Readers, I considered this topic really interesting. Dear Readers, The original is still correct, but it sounds a bit awkward. Dear Readers, Consider is present tense, and considered is past tense. I assume you still consider it interesting now. |
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Because of this I would like to share my opinion. Because of th very minor stylistic change, original is good too Because of this, I would like to share my opinion. |
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As employees they are appreciated, but they earn more less. As employees they are appreciated, but they earn I'm not sure what you meant here, but "more" and "less" can't go together like this. As employees they are appreciated, but they earn m |
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It is a significant problem that the most of them have to work still after approaching retirement. It is a significant problem that It is a significant problem that Or "It is a significant problem that most of them still have to work after approaching retirement." |
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It is crucial that the government provide appropriate livelihood for retirees. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I was driving when I noticed a young man who helped an elderly lady to walk through the crosswalk. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I was driving when I noticed a young man who help |
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It was a selfless gesture from him. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Perhaps, if people would focus on such deeds like this and the humility for the older people, we could understand the feelings of the older adults. Perhaps, if people would focus on such deeds like this and the humility for the older people, we could understand the feelings of |
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Additionally, it could help if we talk about this condition honestly for instance on the TV. Additionally, it could help if we talk about this condition honestly for instance on |
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