June 24, 2025
An Ancient Town
I found some videos and pictures of an ancient town while organizing my iPhone. I took those images during my visit to the place approximately six months ago.
The place was called Longmen Ancient Town, the hometown of Sunquan-If you've known the history of the Three Kingdoms 1800 years ago, you'll recognize him as one of the emperors.
There are still some old buildings in the town, and some high mountains in the distance. It's a nice place to stroll. I enjoyed many different local snacks and rice wine with my friends.
We set off from Pudong, Shanghai, and it took us three and a half hours to reach there by car. Regrettably, we only stayed for half a day and then went to another place.
If I go again next time, I will stay at a B&B for one day, to fully experience the morning and evening there.
整理iPhone空间时，我发现了几段有关一个古镇的视频和图片。这些照片是我大约六个月前去那个地方游玩时拍摄的。
这个地方被称为龙门古镇，是孙权的故乡。如果你了解 1800 年前三国时期的历史，就会认出他是其中一个开国皇帝。
镇上还有一些古老的建筑，远处还有些高山。这是一个闲逛的好去处。我和朋友们品尝了许多不同的当地小吃和米酒。
我们从上海浦东出发，乘车花了三个半小时才到达那里。遗憾的是，我们只在那里停留了半天，就去了别处。
如果下次再去的话，我会在一家民宿住上一天，体验那里的清晨和傍晚。
An Ancient Town
I found some videos and pictures of an ancient town while organizing my iPhone.
I took those images during my visit to the place approximately six months ago.
The place was called Longmen Ancient Town, the hometown of Sunquan-If you've known the history of the Three Kingdoms 1800 years ago, you'll recognize him as one of the emperors.
There are still some old buildings in the town, and some high mountains in the distance.
It's a nice place to stroll.
I enjoyed many different local snacks, and rice wine with my friends.
We set off from Pudong, Shanghai, and it took us three and a half hours to reach there by car.
Regrettably, we only stayed for half a day and then went to another place.
If I go again next time, I will stay at a B&B for one day, to fully experience the morning and evening there.
June 25, 2025
Thank you so much!
Have a nice day!
An Ancient Town
I took those images during my visit to the place approximately six months ago.
There are still some old buildings in the town, and some high mountains in the distance.
It's a nice place to stroll.
I enjoyed many different kinds of local snacks and rice wine with my friends.
Another way to put it
Regrettably, we only stayed for half a day and then went to another place.
If I go again next time, I will stay at a B&B for one day, to fully experience the morning and evening there.
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An Ancient Town
I found some videos and pictures of an ancient town while organizing my iPhone.
I took those images during my visit to the place approximately six months ago.
The place was called Longmen Ancient Town, the hometown of Sunquan-I—if you've known the history of the Three Kingdoms 1800 years ago, you'll recognize him as one of the emperors.
There are still some old buildings in the town, and some high mountains in the distance.
It's a nice place to stroll.
I enjoyed many different local snacks and rice wine with my friends.
We set off from Pudong, Shanghai, and it took us three and a half hours to reach there by car.
Regrettably, we only stayed for half a day and then went to another place.
If I go again, next time,(,) I will stay at a B&B for one day, to fully experience the morning and evening there.
alternative: Next time, if I go again, I will stay….
It would also be natural to omit “next time”: If I go again, I will…
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Well done.
June 25, 2025
再次感谢！
顺颂安康！
An Ancient Town
I found some videos and pictures of an ancient town while organizing my iPhone.
I took those images during my visit to the place approximately six months ago.
The place was called Longmen Ancient Town, the hometown of Sunquan-I—if you've known the history of the Three Kingdoms 1800 years ago, you'll recognize him as one of the emperors.
(1) I understand that the em dash ("—") can be troublesome to type out, depending on your keyboard. However, if you're substituting it with a hyphen, you should, at the least, place spaces around it: "...the hometown of Sunquan - if you know the history..." This distinguishes it from a normal hyphen. (If you're using the proper em dash, it's not necessary to place spaces around it; it's up to preference.)
(2) "If" isn't the first word of a new sentence, so it shouldn't be capitalised. The em dash doesn't indicate the end of a sentence here, and it generally doesn't.
(3) The simple present tense ("know") sounds more natural here (as opposed to the present perfect), since you should be emphasising the current state of knowing the history, rather than the past event of getting to know it. I hope that makes some sense.
There are still some old buildings in the town, and some hightall mountains in the distance.
"Tall" is more commonly used when describing mountains. In my experience, "tall" typically refers to height (the length from bottom to top), while "high" refers to altitude. For example, the phrase "the tall man is high up in the mountains" means "the man with a great HEIGHT is in the mountains at a great ALTITUDE".
It's a nice place to stroll.
I enjoyed many different local snacks and rice wine with my friends.
We set off from Pudong, Shanghai, and it took us three and a half hours to reach there by car.
Regrettably, we only stayed for half a day and then went to another place.
If I go again next time, I will stay at a B&B for one day, to fully experience the morning and evening there.
June 25, 2025
Thank you so much for such detailed feedback!
Have a nice day!
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