Oct. 31, 2021
An 18th birthday party
Hi Ashley.
I would like to tell you about my brother's birthday. I had totally forgotten about it but when I saw how our family was preparing to the party I remembered what the day was. The day when my brother born.
Parents are going to orginize the event outside of the house. I have heard that they had booked in the agency which arranges such events it is necessary equipment.
The party will be begun as usual at 5 p.m. but I am sure it will start a bit later.
I have nothing idea what recommend you to buy for a present. In this question you can't count on me. In my opinion it is good thing if you bring a couple idea how to spend my brother's birthsday the best way.
An 18th birthday party
Hi, Ashley.
I would like to tell you about my brother's birthday.
I had totally forgotten about it, but when I saw how ourmy family was preparing tofor the party, I remembered what the day waday it is.
If you are inviting Ashley, the party is not in the past (the day is NOT was).
The day when my brother was born.
This sounds a bit weird. It's ambiguous. Is today your brother's birthday, or is it the day of his birth? Is he turning 18 or is he being born now?
PMy parents are going to orgianizeing the event outside of the house.
"of the house" is redundant, "going to organize" is weird because the party is so soon
I have heard that they had booked ian the agency which arranges such events it is necessary equipment.
I don't know what you meant by "it is necessary equipment", so I removed it.
The party will be begun as usualgin at 5 p.m., but I am sure it will startonly start properly a bit later.
Why "as usual"? Do all of your brother's birthday parties start at 5 p.m.???
I have nothing idea of what recommend you to buy foras a present.
In this questionAs far as that goes, you can't count on me.
In my opinion, it is a good thing if you bringcome up with a couple of ideas of how to spend my brother's birthsday the best way.
Why does Ashley need to come up with ideas? Didn't your parents organize a party?
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Very confusing. I recommend you try writing something simpler next time.
Nov. 2, 2021
Thank you, I will be trying
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Hi Ashley. Hi, Ashley. |
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I would like to tell you about my brother's birthday. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I had totally forgotten about it but when I saw how our family was preparing to the party I remembered what the day was. I had totally forgotten about it, but when I saw If you are inviting Ashley, the party is not in the past (the day is NOT was). |
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The day when my brother born. The day when my brother was born. This sounds a bit weird. It's ambiguous. Is today your brother's birthday, or is it the day of his birth? Is he turning 18 or is he being born now? |
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Parents are going to orginize the event outside of the house.
"of the house" is redundant, "going to organize" is weird because the party is so soon |
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I have heard that they had booked in the agency which arranges such events it is necessary equipment. I I don't know what you meant by "it is necessary equipment", so I removed it. |
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The party will be begun as usual at 5 p.m. but I am sure it will start a bit later. The party will be Why "as usual"? Do all of your brother's birthday parties start at 5 p.m.??? |
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I have nothing idea what recommend you to buy for a present. I have no |
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In this question you can't count on me.
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In my opinion it is good thing if you bring a couple idea how to spend my brother's birthsday the best way. In my opinion, it is a good thing if you Why does Ashley need to come up with ideas? Didn't your parents organize a party? |
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