March 2, 2024
After reading”Thank You,Ma’m”
Recently,I read short story “Thank You, Ma'm”. it’s pretty good. If I use two words to describe Mrs. Bates, it will be” tough and soft”. Mrs. Bates was a tough woman. She was tall and strong,like a bear. When Roger try to steal her bag,she gave him a harsh lesson. She kicked Roger’s leg, it made him painful. But she was also soft. She has a gentle heart. When she know that Roger have nobody live in his home,she took him a dinner and told him what’s right and wrong. That’s her,Mrs. Bates.
After reading ”Thank You, Ma’am”
Recently, I read the short story, “Thank You, Ma'am”.
iIt’s pretty good.
If I were to use two words to describe Mrs. Bates, it willould be” "tough" and "soft”.
"If I were....... (I) would............" is the structure you can use if you are giving an example of what you would do given the circumstances.
Since you explicitly say "two words", I enclosed each word with quotation marks to make each word more distinct.
Mrs. Bates was a tough woman.
She was tall and strong, like a bear.
When Roger tryied to steal her bag, she gave him a harsh lesson.
She kicked Roger’s leg, it madewhich caused him painful.
"Painful" is an adjective so if you want to use it, you should use the noun that is causing the pain with it.
Ex: painful kick
But she was also soft.
She has a gentle heart.
When she knoew that Roger haved nobody liveing in his home, she took him aout to dinner and told/taught him what’s right and (what's) wrong.
That’s her, Mrs. Bates
After reading ”Thank You, Ma’am”
Recently, I read short story “Thank You, Ma'am”.
iIt’s pretty good.
If I use two words to describe Mrs. Bates, it will be” tough and soft”.
Mrs. Bates was a tough woman.
She was tall and strong,like a bear.
When Roger try to steal her bag,she gave him a harsh lesson.
But she was also soft.
She has a gentle heart.
When she got to know that Roger haves nobody live in his home, she took him aout for dinner and told him what’s right and wrong.
That’s her, Mrs.
Bates.
Feedback
A few small mistakes, good job, I might what the series myself !
After reading ”Thank You, Ma’am”
Recently, I read short story called “Thank You, Ma'm”.am.”
Punctuation goes inside the ending quotation mark.
it’It was pretty good.
Since you are recounting something you did, you want to use the past tense here.
If I were to use two words to describe Mrs. Bates, it willould be” ”tough andbut soft”.”
If I WERE to ###, I WOULD ***
Since your two adjectives are strikingly different, it's more natural to say "but" rather than "and" between them
Mrs. Bates was a tough woman.
She was tall and strong, like a bear.
There is always a space after a comma.
When Roger tryied to steal her bag, she gave him a harsh lesson.
She kicked Roger’s leg, it made himwhich was painful.
Alternative: She kicked Roger’s leg, which caused him pain.
But she was also soft.
She hasd a gentle heart.
The rest of the story is in past tense, so this needs to stay past tense as well.
When she knoew that Roger have nobody live in his homlived alone, she tookbrought him a dinner and toldaught him what’s right and wrong.
That’s her, Mrs. Bates.
Feedback
Good job
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it’s pretty good.
Since you are recounting something you did, you want to use the past tense here.
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