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tsukeyyy

Jan. 24, 2024

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After reading an article and I wrote a summary.

At first ,some Native Americans wore tattoos.
And then, U.S.explovers came to America and they learned about tattoos.
Tattoos became more common among soldiers.
They serving in the Civil War and they got tattoos.
In 1960 to 1970, tattoos were accepted by more people.
And in 1980 ,tattoos had become a popular.
Sometimes it’s a part of a costume.
And it’s a kind of modern art.
It also be a history.


At first ,some Native Americans wore tattoos.
And then, U.S.explovers came to America and they learned about tattoos.
Tattoos became more common among soldiers.
They serving in the Civil War and they got tattoos.
In 1960 to 1970, tattoos were accepted by more people.
And in 1980 ,tattoos had become a popular.
Sometimes it’s a part of a costume.
And it’s a kind of modern art.
It also be a history.

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After reading an article and, I wrote a summary.

At first , some Native Americans wore tattoos.

And tThen, U.S. explovrers came to America and they learned about tattoos.

Tattoos became more common among soldiers.

They were serving in the Civil War and they got tattoos.

In 1960 to 1970, tattoos werethe 1960s, tattoos [ became / were becoming ] accepted by more people.

"The 1960s" is a much more common and natural way of referring to the years 1960–1970.

Because you are telling the history of tattoos here, "became" or "were becoming" sounds more natural than "were".

And inby 1980 , tattoos had become a popular.

Sometimes it’s a part of a costume.

And it’s a kind of modern art.

ItTattoos can also bhave a history / have historical significance.

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Nice job!

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tsukeyyy

Jan. 24, 2024

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🩷🩷🩷Thank you so much !!!

After reading an article and, I wrote a summary.

the and here is not needed

At first ,someHistorically, Native Americans have wore tattoos.

this is a little tough to fix, I want to say something like "In the beginning" to contrast.

And then, U.S.When explovrers came to America and they learned about tattoos.

America works here because it also refers to the whole continents.

Tattoos became more common among soldiers.

I think this is maybe the best sentence so far but another sentence connecting it would be helpful.

TheyMany soldiers got tattoos while serving in the Civil War and they got tattoos.

needs a to be rearranged a little to make sense.

In 1960 to 1970, tattoos were accepted by more peopleMuch later, around the 1960s, tattoos became more accepted.

1960s covers the time period you mentioned.

And inBy 1980 , tattoos had become a popular.

I'm a little mixed on this since I'm not sure how true I would say this is.

Sometimes it’tattoos are part of a costume. --

And it’sor a kind of modern art. --

It also be abut it's also history.

I would make these all into one sentence.

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Tattoos are an interesting topic! I hope you enjoyed your reading. I tried to keep your meaning as best I could but I did make big changes, sorry for that.

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tsukeyyy

Jan. 24, 2024

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🥺🥺🥺Thank you!!!

After reading an article and I wrote a summary.


After reading an article and, I wrote a summary.

the and here is not needed

After reading an article and, I wrote a summary.

At first ,some Native Americans wore tattoos.


At first ,someHistorically, Native Americans have wore tattoos.

this is a little tough to fix, I want to say something like "In the beginning" to contrast.

At first , some Native Americans wore tattoos.

And then, U.S.explovers came to America and they learned about tattoos.


And then, U.S.When explovrers came to America and they learned about tattoos.

America works here because it also refers to the whole continents.

And tThen, U.S. explovrers came to America and they learned about tattoos.

Tattoos became more common among soldiers.


Tattoos became more common among soldiers.

I think this is maybe the best sentence so far but another sentence connecting it would be helpful.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

They serving in the Civil War and they got tattoos.


TheyMany soldiers got tattoos while serving in the Civil War and they got tattoos.

needs a to be rearranged a little to make sense.

They were serving in the Civil War and they got tattoos.

In 1960 to 1970, tattoos were accepted by more people.


In 1960 to 1970, tattoos were accepted by more peopleMuch later, around the 1960s, tattoos became more accepted.

1960s covers the time period you mentioned.

In 1960 to 1970, tattoos werethe 1960s, tattoos [ became / were becoming ] accepted by more people.

"The 1960s" is a much more common and natural way of referring to the years 1960–1970. Because you are telling the history of tattoos here, "became" or "were becoming" sounds more natural than "were".

And in 1980 ,tattoos had become a popular.


And inBy 1980 , tattoos had become a popular.

I'm a little mixed on this since I'm not sure how true I would say this is.

And inby 1980 , tattoos had become a popular.

Sometimes it’s a part of a costume.


Sometimes it’tattoos are part of a costume. --

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

And it’s a kind of modern art.


And it’sor a kind of modern art. --

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It also be a history.


It also be abut it's also history.

I would make these all into one sentence.

ItTattoos can also bhave a history / have historical significance.

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