Jan. 4, 2023
Adventures with anxiety (spoilers)
Today in this text, I am going to explain the story of a recent and popular game called "Adventures with Anxiety".
This game is about a teenage girl, who has a red jacket that represents her anxiety throughout the game.
During the game, we can see how her life is with an anxiety disorder. Her jacket can also transform into a big wolf, who is constantly scaring and advicing the protagonist about all the dangers around her.
At some point in the game. She will meet another teenage girl, who devoleped a coping mechanism against her anxiety, drinking alcohol. Futhermore, she encourage our main character to drink alcohol. And unfortunately, she will eventually success.
The game has two endings: The good one, and the bad one,and it is our responsability to get each one. But despite our decisions and the ending that we got, at the end our protagonist will understand that her big anxiety wolf is just a "bad protector" who needs to train harder to become good at protecting the girl.
I knew this will be a short text, and apparently it was, it does not bother me though. As a final idea, I would like to say to all of you that I highly recommend this game and you should play it.
:) Anxiety can be difficult to deal with.
Adventures with anxiety (spoilers)
Today in this textFor today’s journal, I am going to explain the story of a recent and popular game called "Adventures with Anxiety".
This game is about a teenage girl, who has a red jacket that represents her anxiety throughout the game.
During the game, we can see how her life is with anaffected by her anxiety disorder.
Her jacket can also transform into a big wolf, who is constantly scaring and advicsing the protagonist about all the dangers around her.
At some point in the game she meets another teenage girl who developed a coping mechanism against her anxiety by drinking alcohol.
She will meet another teenage girl, who devoleped a coping mechanism against her anxiety, drinking alcohol.
Futhermore, she encourages our main character to drink alcohol.
And unfortunately, she will eventually succeseeds.
The game has two endings: Thea good one, and thea bad one,and it is our responsability to get reach one.
But despite our decisions and the ending that we goet, atin the end our protagonist will understand that her big anxiety wolf is just a "bad protector" who needs to train harder to become good at protecting the girlr.
I knew this willould be a short text, and apparently it was, it does not bother me though.
Subjunctive or future tense (i am not entirely sure which sorry, it is difficult to break down one’s language).
As a final idea, I would like to say to all of you that I highly recommend this game and you should play it.
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Adventures with anxiety (spoilers)
Today, in this text, I am going to explain the story of a recent and popular game called "Adventures with Anxiety".
This game is about a teenage girl, who has a red jacket that represents her anxiety throughout the game.
During the game, we can see how her life is filled with an anxiety disorder.
Her jacket can also transform her into a big wolf, who is constantly scaring and advicwarning the protagonist about all the dangers around her.
At some point in the game.,
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I knew this will be a short text, and apparently it was, and it does not bother me though.
As amy final ideaadvice, I would like to say to all of you that I highly recommend this game and you should play it.
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As a final ideathought, I would like to say to all of you that I highly recommend this game and that you should play it.
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Thank you for the recommendation! Good work!
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She will meet another teenage girl, who devoleped a coping mechanism against her anxiety, drinking alcohol.
Yeesh! That's not good. Since you're explaining the story, present tense is used.
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Futhermore, she encourage our main character to drink alcohol.
The "furthermore" transition is odd here. You want to use that to strengthen an already existing argument, but there is no argument made. Connect to the next sentence. Furthermore, she encourages our main character to drink alcohol. Oh, no! "She" is a singular pronoun so it requires a singular verb.
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