Nov. 25, 2024
Studying at a private university has both advantages and disadvantages.starting with the positive factors,better education opportunites are important for the quality of a university.For example,modern classroom furniture ,new equipment,modern laboratories can improve the quality of education.If the furniture is broken or outdated ,it can affect your focus and comfort.Another advantage is better accommodation conditions.For instance,if your dorm is far away,you can spend extra money on transportation,such as taxis or buses.On the other hand,one major disadvantage is the high cost of a private university.For example,you need to pay for meals,school materials,accommodation,books,extra lessons,and so on.It can want money for everything.Another disadvantage islower quality of education because teachers prefer a private university for money so teachers teach as long as they get their money.In conclusion,studyingg at a private university can be very expensive.You should think about all the pros and cons before deciding for your education.
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Studying at a private university has both advantages and disadvantages.s Starting with the positive factors, better education opportunities are important for the quality of a university. For example, modern classroom furnitures, ,new equipment,s, modern laboratories can improve the quality of education. If the furniture is broken or outdated , it can affect your focus and comfort. Another advantage is better accommodation conditions. For instance,if your dorm is far away, you canwill spend extra money on transportation, such as taxis or buses. On the other hand, one major disadvantage is the high cost of a private university. For example, you need to pay for meals, school materials, accommodation, books, extra lessons, and so on.It can want money for everything. Another disadvantage is lower quality of education because teachers prefer a private university for money aso teachers teach as long as they get their money. In conclusion, studyingg at a private university can be very expensive. You should think about all the pros and cons before deciding for your educatiowhich university you will school in.
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Your writing was clustered making it very difficult to read. Between every word you write, there must be space so as to make what you write easier to read and understand.
Your grammar is okay 👍🏾.
Studying at a private university has both its advantages and disadvantages.s Starting with the positive factors,better education opportunit: better facilities are important for the quality of a university. For example, modern classroom furniture , new equipment, and modern laboratories can improve the quality of education. If the furniture is broken or outdated , it can affect your focus and comfort. Another advantage is better accommodation conditions. For instance, if your dorm is far away, you canmay have to spend extra money on transportation, such as taxis or buses. On the other hand,one major disadvantage is the high cost of a private university. For example, you need to pay for meals, school materials, accommodation,s, books, extra lessons, and so on.It can want A private university may require money for everything. Another disadvantage is the lower quality of education because teachers prefer a private university for money, so teachers only teach as long as they get their money. In conclusion, studyingg at a private university can be very expensive. You should think about all the pros and cons before deciding foron your education.
I think you're doing a good job here. I mainly focused on the grammar. One big note I noticed would be to include a space after all punctuation. I think because of this, the sentece looked a bit cluttered. Content wise, I'm not sure if this argument would hold up, but for practicing to write I think this is a good job. I think it was a really good attempt to write a pursuasive piece.
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Studying at a private university has both its advantages and disadvantages.s Starting with the positive factors, better education opportunites are important for the quality of a university. For example, modern classroom furniture , new equipment, and modern laboratories can [all] improve the quality of education. If the furniture is broken or outdated , it can affect your focus and comfort. Another advantage is better [living] accommodation conditions. For instance, if your dorm is far away, you canneed to spend extra money on transportation, such as taxis or buses. On the other hand, one major disadvantage is the high cost of a private university. For example,you need to pay for meals, school materials, accommodations ,books, extra lessons, and so on.It can (or etc.). They want money for everything. Another disadvantage islower the quality of education received, because teachers prefer a private universityies for money so teachershey teach as long as they get their money. In conclusion, studyingg at a private university can be very expensive. You should think about all the pros and cons before deciding foron your education.
I'll break down each of my corrections into easier to read chunks here:
1) "For example, modern classroom furniture, new equipment, and modern laboratories can [all] improve the quality of education." Although the sentence is already gramatically correct, having "all" here can improve the sentence's flow and impact of the aspects perviously mentioned.
2) "Another advantage is better [living] accommodations. For instance, if your dorm is far away, you need to spend extra money on transportation, such as taxis or buses." In English, we can understand that "accomodations" are places of residency and therefore includes their conditions. I maybe misinterpreting it, but I will say that spending extra money on transportation is not seen as an advantage. I'm wondering if there's any further extrapolation that needs to be done.
3) "They want money for everything." We don't refer to a single private university, but instead refer to all private universities as a single intentity with the use of "they". This sentence means that all/most private universities will charge people for anything and everything, big or small.
4) I agree with the argument that the education you'll receive at a private university may not be worth the return with the high investment needed. Since you mention earlier that there are better education opportunities, I think you need to connect that here by using something to contrast it. For example by saying something along the lines of, "Despite the expectation that you'll receive a high quality of education, that is not always the case. . . "
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Overall, it's pretty easy to comprehend for the most part. I understand and agree with some of the arguments that are being made. They'd be excellent things to discuss in a conversation regarding education. There are some minor formatting and syntax issues that can be easily fixed. Otherwise, the thing to look out for is where you may need to add some more information to help improve the understanding of the arguments being presented. Good job, though!
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Studying at a private university has both advantages and disadvantages.s Starting with the positive factors,advantages: better education opportunities which are important for the quality of a university. For example, modern classroom furniture , new equipment, and modern laboratories canwhich improves the quality of education. If the furniture is broken or outdated , it can affect your focus and comfort. Another advantage is better accommodation conditions. For instance, if your dorm is far away, you can spend extra money on transportation, such as taxis or buses. On the other hand, one major disadvantage is the high cost of a private university. For example, you need to pay for meals, school materials, accommodation, books, extra lessons, and so on.It can want money Money is needed for everything. Another disadvantage is lower quality of education because teachers prefer to teach at a private university fordue to the money, so teachers will only teach for as long as they get their money. In conclusion, studyingg at a private university can be very expensive. You should think about all the pros and cons before deciding foron your future education.
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You are saying that a private university has both lower and higher quality of education in your piece. You need to rethink what you are writing as it is not logical.
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Studying at a private university has both advantages and disadvantages.starting with the positive factors,better education opportunites are important for the quality of a university.For example,modern classroom furniture ,new equipment,modern laboratories can improve the quality of education.If the furniture is broken or outdated ,it can affect your focus and comfort.Another advantage is better accommodation conditions.For instance,if your dorm is far away,you can spend extra money on transportation,such as taxis or buses.On the other hand,one major disadvantage is the high cost of a private university.For example,you need to pay for meals,school materials,accommodation,books,extra lessons,and so on.It can want money for everything.Another disadvantage islower quality of education because teachers prefer a private university for money so teachers teach as long as they get their money.In conclusion,studyingg at a private university can be very expensive.You should think about all the pros and cons before deciding for your education. Studying at a private university has both advantages and disadvantages. Studying at a private university has both its advantages and disadvantages. I'll break down each of my corrections into easier to read chunks here: 1) "For example, modern classroom furniture, new equipment, and modern laboratories can [all] improve the quality of education." Although the sentence is already gramatically correct, having "all" here can improve the sentence's flow and impact of the aspects perviously mentioned. 2) "Another advantage is better [living] accommodations. For instance, if your dorm is far away, you need to spend extra money on transportation, such as taxis or buses." In English, we can understand that "accomodations" are places of residency and therefore includes their conditions. I maybe misinterpreting it, but I will say that spending extra money on transportation is not seen as an advantage. I'm wondering if there's any further extrapolation that needs to be done. 3) "They want money for everything." We don't refer to a single private university, but instead refer to all private universities as a single intentity with the use of "they". This sentence means that all/most private universities will charge people for anything and everything, big or small. 4) I agree with the argument that the education you'll receive at a private university may not be worth the return with the high investment needed. Since you mention earlier that there are better education opportunities, I think you need to connect that here by using something to contrast it. For example by saying something along the lines of, "Despite the expectation that you'll receive a high quality of education, that is not always the case. . . " Studying at a private university has both its advantages and disadvantages. I think you're doing a good job here. I mainly focused on the grammar. One big note I noticed would be to include a space after all punctuation. I think because of this, the sentece looked a bit cluttered. Content wise, I'm not sure if this argument would hold up, but for practicing to write I think this is a good job. I think it was a really good attempt to write a pursuasive piece. Studying at a private university has both advantages and disadvantages. |
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