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xxx150

Feb. 4, 2020

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Advantages and Disadvantages of The Cities

First I begin this post with the advantages. So the advantages of the cities are you can buy easily food on every corner unlike in a countryside. You get more informations of the world because in a big city there are lots of school and you can get easily newspapers. You can go everywhere because in a big city the public transport is better than in a village. And you can get job more easily than in a village. The disadavantages are the smogs because it's unhealthy. The cities are usually loud and dirty. In a crowded city the number of the crimes are higher than in a village and crimes usually happen every day.

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Kindred Spirit

Advantages and Disadvantages of ThePros and Cons of Cities

Advantages and disadvantages is good, pros and cons is another common expression that means the same thing.

First, I begin this pos'll start with the advantages.

So the advantages of the cities are yYou can buy easily food onat every corner unlike in athe countryside.

You can get more informations of about the world, because in a big city there are lots of schools, and you can get easily newspapersnewspapers are easier to get.

You can go everywhere because in a big city thwithin the city because public transportation is better than in a village.

Transport of people is transportation

Advantages and Disadvantages of TheLiving in a Citiesy

I've changed your title because your post is about advantages of living in a city, not advantages of the cities themselves.

For example, an advantages of cities might be
concentrating human populations to leave more spaces undeveloped wildlife.

First I'll begin (this post) with the advantages.

So thOne advantages of the cities areliving in a city is that you can buy easily buy food on every corner unlikewhich you can't do in athe countryside.

"unlike in a countryside"
This sounds like a faulty comparison to me. I'm about 90% sure that it is.

You get morecan have better access to informations of about the world because in a big city there are lots of schools and you can get easily newspapers.

Your sentence makes sense but is not parallel.

Also, in my opinion, the word "get" is overly used by many people. "You can get more information" is not incorrect, but my revision is more precise.

You can go everywhere because in a big city the public transportation is better than that in a village.

"better than THAT.." The "that" is necessary here to correct the faulty comparison. You've compared transportation to a village not transportation in a city to transportation in a village.

And you can get a job more easily than you can in a village.

ThOne disadavantages are is the smogs because it's unhealthy.

The cCities are usually loud and dirty.

In a crowded city, the number of the crimes are higher than incrime rate is generally higher than that in (of?) a village, and crimes usually happen every day.

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Two suggestions.
1. Connect your sentences with transitional words/ phrases such as
Not only... but also
Therefore
However
etc

2. The advantages and disadvantages should probably be written in two separate paragraphs.

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zinnia

Feb. 4, 2020

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A correction to my correction. :)
"...human populations to leave more spaces undeveloped FOR wildlife."

Advantages and Disadvantages of The Cities

First Ily, I will begin this post with the advantages.

So tThe advantages of the cities are you can buy easily food onat every corner unlike in athe countryside.

"So' would be used if you were carrying over from another point, and it sounds more informal. Best to drop it here. "The" is not used with general statements in English

You can get more informations of about the world because in a big city there are lots of schools and you can get easily get newspapers.

And you can get a job more easily than in a village.

ThOne disadavantages are is the smogs, because it's unhealthy.

The cCities are usually loud and dirty.

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Nice English. Most of the mistakes I made are easy for early learners to make. Keep it up! ;)

And you can get job more easily than in a village.


And you can get a job more easily than in a village.

And you can get a job more easily than you can in a village.

The disadavantages are the smogs because it's unhealthy.


ThOne disadavantages are is the smogs, because it's unhealthy.

ThOne disadavantages are is the smogs because it's unhealthy.

Advantages and Disadvantages of The Cities


Advantages and Disadvantages of The Cities

Advantages and Disadvantages of TheLiving in a Citiesy

I've changed your title because your post is about advantages of living in a city, not advantages of the cities themselves. For example, an advantages of cities might be concentrating human populations to leave more spaces undeveloped wildlife.

Advantages and Disadvantages of ThePros and Cons of Cities

Advantages and disadvantages is good, pros and cons is another common expression that means the same thing.

First I begin this post with the advantages.


First Ily, I will begin this post with the advantages.

First I'll begin (this post) with the advantages.

First, I begin this pos'll start with the advantages.

So the advantages of the cities are you can buy easily food on every corner unlike in a countryside.


So tThe advantages of the cities are you can buy easily food onat every corner unlike in athe countryside.

"So' would be used if you were carrying over from another point, and it sounds more informal. Best to drop it here. "The" is not used with general statements in English

So thOne advantages of the cities areliving in a city is that you can buy easily buy food on every corner unlikewhich you can't do in athe countryside.

"unlike in a countryside" This sounds like a faulty comparison to me. I'm about 90% sure that it is.

So the advantages of the cities are yYou can buy easily food onat every corner unlike in athe countryside.

You get more informations of the world because in a big city there are lots of school and you can get easily newspapers.


You can get more informations of about the world because in a big city there are lots of schools and you can get easily get newspapers.

You get morecan have better access to informations of about the world because in a big city there are lots of schools and you can get easily newspapers.

Your sentence makes sense but is not parallel. Also, in my opinion, the word "get" is overly used by many people. "You can get more information" is not incorrect, but my revision is more precise.

You can get more informations of about the world, because in a big city there are lots of schools, and you can get easily newspapersnewspapers are easier to get.

You can go everywhere because in a big city the public transport is better than in a village.


You can go everywhere because in a big city the public transportation is better than that in a village.

"better than THAT.." The "that" is necessary here to correct the faulty comparison. You've compared transportation to a village not transportation in a city to transportation in a village.

You can go everywhere because in a big city thwithin the city because public transportation is better than in a village.

Transport of people is transportation

The cities are usually loud and dirty.


The cCities are usually loud and dirty.

The cCities are usually loud and dirty.

In a crowded city the number of the crimes are higher than in a village and crimes usually happen every day.


In a crowded city, the number of the crimes are higher than incrime rate is generally higher than that in (of?) a village, and crimes usually happen every day.

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