Academic eEssay.

Nowadays many high schools and universities require students to work on projects in groups, and all members of the group receive the same grade (mark) on the project.

It is critically important that students do their best to complete their school works, and try to achieve the highest marksgrade in every task.

This is because he did not know how to work and has not learned how to be independ on himselfent.

It is critically important that students do their best to complete their school works, and try to achieve the highest marks in for every task.

Either evaluating students either as a group or individually has itsboth positive and negative aspects.

Personally, I disagree with the argument.

"the argument" is unspecified: what argument?

I feel this way for two reasons, both of which I will explore in the following essay.

Note: "the following essay" implies a separate essay; "this essay" (or "the present essay") should be used for the essay we're currently reading.

To begin with, it is not fair that all the students receive or have beenin a group receive the same grade or are evaluatinged the same grade, despite they did amount of work they actually workdo on the required task or not.

My opinion on this matter has been profoundsignificantly influenced by my own experience.

"profoundly" sounds a bit over-the-top to me; it's a fairly minor matter.

Five years ago, when I was in high school we had to complete thea graduation project as one of the essential requirements for graduation.

At that time, the professor asked the class to form groups, with each group withhaving seven students.

I and mMy colleagues and I started to prep for that project, and we did our best effort to finish it as required atby the exact timdeadline.

Maybe I'm a bit old-fashioned, but I choose "My colleagues and I" over "I and my colleagues". (I feel "to prep" is slang abbreviation of "preparation".) Note that "at the exact time" implies both no sooner nor later.

In the unexpected part, tThe professor decided to give all of us the same grade including him.

You just said this in the previous sentence.

This was a sufficient reason to complain to the professor and tell him that it is not fair and that he need toshould take this into consideration.

This can affect the students in their future life.

My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this.

You haven't explained what "this" is. Above, you've given your personal experience, so this sentence amounts to saying "My personal experience is a compelling illustration of my personal experience". (Also, consider choosing another word in place of "compelling" since it sounds immodest.)

Back thenReturning to my previous example, the student that did not finish his required part was always doing this.

This is because he did not know how to work and has not learned how to depend on himselfself-reliance.

Academic essay.

Titles do not need periods.

It is critically important that students do their best to complete their school works, and try to achieve the highest marks ion every task.

Either evaluating students as ain group ors and evaluating them individually has itsboth have positive and negative aspects.

Personally, I disagree with the argumo not believe that giving every member of a group the same grade is the best way to evaluate students.

It is good to state your position in full, as if the person reading your answer does not know the question being asked.

I feel this way for two reasons, both of which I will exploreain in the following essay.

I changed "explore" to "explain" because the purpose of your essay is to ultimately explain and defend your position.

To begin with, it is not fair that all the students receive or have been evaluating the same grade, despite the same grade regardless of whether they did actually work on the required task or not.

Five years ago, when I was in high school, we had to complete thea graduation project as one of the essential requirements for graduation.

At that time, the professor asked the class to form groups each group withof seven students each.

I and mMy colleagues and I started to prepare for that project, and we did our best effort to finish it as required at the exact ti, within the given time frame.

Shortened forms of words like "prep" are not really academic language.

Therefore, hHe was the reason that we could not finish the project on time, and we received much lower marks.

Saying you received "lower" marks implies a comparison with someone else, but there is no comparison being made here.

In the uUnexpected partly, the professor decided to give all of us the same grade including him.

This was a sufficient reason to complain to the professor and tell him that it is not fair, and that he needs to take this into consideration.

This can affect the students in the' future lifes.

Back then to my previous example, tThe student that did not finish his required part in my previous example was always doing this.

After we graduated, all of us went to college and w. We did not face any obstacles during our journey, and we graduated with an excellent GPAs.

In contrast, that student who always depended on others, could not even pass his first year at college.

This is because he did not know how to work and hasd not learned how to depend on himself.

It is critically important that students do their best to complete their school works, and try to achieve the highest marks in every task.

School work is normally in the singular

Either evaluating students as a group or individually has its positive and negative aspects.

To begin with, it is not fair that all the students areceive or have been evaluating evaluated equally against the same task and receive the same grade, despiteeven if they did not actually work on the required task or not.

Suggest you have the act of evaluating and then receiving the grade as it is more logical.

Five years ago, when I was in high school we had to complete the graduation projects as one of the essential requirements for graduation.

It is either a graduation project or graduation projects. The word ‘the’ is unnecessary.

At that time, the professor asked the class to form groups each group withof seven students. each.

I and mMy colleagues and I started to prep for that project, and we did our best effort to finish it as required at the exact time.

Also mention yourself last.

In the unexpected partUnfortunately, the professor decided to give all of us the same grade including him.

This can affect the students in the future life.grades? Career?

Back then toIn my previous example, the student that did not finish his required part was always doing this.

After we graduated, all of us went to college and, we did not face any obstacles during our journey,difficulties ? challenges? and we graduated with an excellent GPA.

This is because he did not know how to contribute to team work and has not learned how to depend on himself.

I am not sure if you need the last part of this sentence ‘ depend on himself’ as it is more about contributing to the team effort.