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June 6, 2020

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A Week Without a Computer

From a prompt written by spitzname - Could you spend a week without a computer?

I think I could. It's because I was several months without a computer when my PC got broken. But I had my smartphone, and I guess it's the same. I did everything on it, but to be honest, I prefer using a computer rather than a smartphone.
If it would be now, next week for example, I believe it wouldn't be a problem for me. For a start, I would do all little things I planned to do, but always put off. Then, I would go for a walk more often. And of course, not being distracted by gadgets means I could spend more time to look into myself, meditatate and reflect to see where my thoughts go. It would be also a pleasure to read a fascinating book, to dive into its dimension for a couple of days as I did when I was a teenager.

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A Week Without a Computer

From a prompt written by spitzname - Could you spend a week without a computer?

I think I could.

It's because I wasent several months without a computer when my PC got broken.

But I had my smartphone, andso I guess ithat's the same.

I did everything on it, but to be honest, I prefer using a computer rather than a smartphone.

If it would behappened now, or next week for example, I believe it wouldn't be a problem for me.

For a start, I would do all little things I planned to do, but had always put off.

Then, I would go for a walk more often.

And of course, not being distracted by gadgets means I could spend more time to looking into myself, meditatateing and reflecting to see where my thoughts go.

It would be also a pleasure to read a fascinating book, -- to dive into its dimensionworld for a couple of days aslike I did when I was a teenager.

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June 7, 2020

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Wow impressive streak you have :)

A Week Without a Computer

From a prompt written by spitzname - Could you spend a week without a computer?

I think I could.

It's because I wasspent several months without a computer when my PC got broken.

"I was several months without" is technically correct (cf. "was without child," etc.) but sounds quaint in informal, non-literary writing.

But I had my smartphone, and I guess it's the same [thing].

I did everything on it, but to be honest, I prefer using a computer rather than using a smartphone.

If it would beere right now, or next week, for example, I believe it wouldn't be a problem for me.

I would also replace "it" for clarity, but I think it's fine.

For a start, I would do all little the things I've planned to do, but always put off.

"I planned": I planned in the past
"I have planned": I plan to now and in the past

Then, I would go for a walk more often.

And of course, not being distracted by gadgets means I could spend more time to look into myself, meditatate and reflect to see where my thoughts go.

Alternatives to "look into myself":
- introspect
- look inwards

It would be also a pleasure to read a fascinating book, to dive into its dimension for a couple of days as I didwould do when I was a teenager.

I think the average native speaker would think "as I did" is fine, but this sounds more appropriate to me. I am having trouble locating an explanation though. "Used to" could also work.

A Week Without a Computer


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From a prompt written by spitzname - Could you spend a week without a computer?


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I think I could.


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It's because I was several months without a computer when my PC got broken.


It's because I wasspent several months without a computer when my PC got broken.

"I was several months without" is technically correct (cf. "was without child," etc.) but sounds quaint in informal, non-literary writing.

It's because I wasent several months without a computer when my PC got broken.

But I had my smartphone, and I guess it's the same.


But I had my smartphone, and I guess it's the same [thing].

But I had my smartphone, andso I guess ithat's the same.

I did everything on it, but to be honest, I prefer using a computer rather than a smartphone.


I did everything on it, but to be honest, I prefer using a computer rather than using a smartphone.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

If it would be now, next week for example, I believe it wouldn't be a problem for me.


If it would beere right now, or next week, for example, I believe it wouldn't be a problem for me.

I would also replace "it" for clarity, but I think it's fine.

If it would behappened now, or next week for example, I believe it wouldn't be a problem for me.

For a start, I would do all little things I planned to do, but always put off.


For a start, I would do all little the things I've planned to do, but always put off.

"I planned": I planned in the past "I have planned": I plan to now and in the past

For a start, I would do all little things I planned to do, but had always put off.

Then, I would go for a walk more often.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

And of course, not being distracted by gadgets means I could spend more time to look into myself, meditatate and reflect to see where my thoughts go.


And of course, not being distracted by gadgets means I could spend more time to look into myself, meditatate and reflect to see where my thoughts go.

Alternatives to "look into myself": - introspect - look inwards

And of course, not being distracted by gadgets means I could spend more time to looking into myself, meditatateing and reflecting to see where my thoughts go.

It would be also a pleasure to read a fascinating book, to dive into its dimension for a couple of days as I did when I was a teenager.


It would be also a pleasure to read a fascinating book, to dive into its dimension for a couple of days as I didwould do when I was a teenager.

I think the average native speaker would think "as I did" is fine, but this sounds more appropriate to me. I am having trouble locating an explanation though. "Used to" could also work.

It would be also a pleasure to read a fascinating book, -- to dive into its dimensionworld for a couple of days aslike I did when I was a teenager.

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