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SteppeBrother

June 13, 2020

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A Weather Today

The day was windy. I went to a market with my friend. Along the way, we started arguing about one thing. It's funny how people could argue about some rubbish. So, when we went to the market, I couldn't enter shops, because I didn't have a mask with me. I washed it in a washing machine and pegged it out on a balcony. The wind went stronger as we went back home, and billowed our clothes. It's nice to feel a cool wind, except there wasn't dust in the streets. The wind spread it around, blowing it in people's faces. I regretted that I hadn't got a mask again.

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AThe Weather Today

The dayIt was windy today.

Offering another way to say the same thing.

I went to athe market with my friend.

"a market" works, but "the market" would be used more often in a story like this.

Along the way, we started arguing about one something.

It's funny how people could argue about some rubbish.

A common English phrase would be: "It's funny how people argue about nothing."

So, wWhen we went toarrived at the market, I couldn't enter shops, because I didn't have a mask with me.

"arrived" is more precice than "went" because you're telling a story.

I had washed it in athe washing machine and pegged it out on athe balcony.

It would be more accurate to say "I had washed it" because you are talking about how you relate to an event in the past, during a story that takes place in the past.

The wind wengot stronger as we wentre going back home, and had billowed our clothes.

It's nice to feel athe cool wind, except there wasn'twhen there's dust in the streets.

The wind had spread it around, blowing it in people's faces.

I regretted that I hadn't gobrought a mask again.

The dayIt was windy today.

It's funny how people couldan argue about some rubbishnothing.

I washed it in a washing machine and peggedut it out on ato dry on the balcony.

A WThe weather Ttoday

I went to athe market with my friend.

Along the way, w We started arguing about one something along the way.

It's funny how people couldan argue about some rubbish.

So, when we went to the market, I couldn't enter the shops, because I didn't have a mask with me.

I washed it in a washing machine and pegged it out on a balcony.

Although there's nothing grammatically wrong with your sentence, the phrasing sounds a bit odd. I would suggest: "I had washed it with the washing machine and left it to dry on a peg in the balcony".

The wind wentblew stronger as we went back home, and billowed our clothes.

It's nice to feel athe cool wind, except when there wasn't's dust in the streets.

I regretted that I hadn't got a mask again., once again, having left the mask at home.

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SteppeBrother

June 14, 2020

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Thank you!

AThe Weather Today

The dayoday, it was windy.

Or: "Today was windy."

I went to a market with my friend.

Along the way, we started arguing about one something.

It's funny how people couldan argue about some rubbishinconsequential things.

So, when we went to the market, I couldn't enter shops, because I didn't have a mask with me.

"So" can be used to introduce a new topic, but here it doesn't really work because it sounds like it's supposed to instead introduce some logical transition from what was said before.

I had washed it in a washing machine and pegged it out on athe balcony.

This describes something that happened prior to the point in time at which your narration is set, so you need to use the past perfect.

The wind wentbecame stronger as we went back home, and billowed our clothes.

It's nice to feel a cool wind, except there wasn't dust in the streets.

The wind spread it around, blowing it in people's faces.

I regretted that I hadn't got a mask agaion.

You haven't indicated that this happened before, so "again" by itself, isn't really suitable.

A Weather Today


AThe Weather Today

A WThe weather Ttoday

AThe Weather Today

The day was windy.


The dayoday, it was windy.

Or: "Today was windy."

The dayIt was windy today.

The dayIt was windy today.

Offering another way to say the same thing.

I went to a market with my friend.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I went to athe market with my friend.

I went to athe market with my friend.

"a market" works, but "the market" would be used more often in a story like this.

Along the way, we started arguing about one thing.


Along the way, we started arguing about one something.

Along the way, w We started arguing about one something along the way.

Along the way, we started arguing about one something.

It's funny how people could argue about some rubbish.


It's funny how people couldan argue about some rubbishinconsequential things.

It's funny how people couldan argue about some rubbish.

It's funny how people couldan argue about some rubbishnothing.

It's funny how people could argue about some rubbish.

A common English phrase would be: "It's funny how people argue about nothing."

So, when we went to the market, I couldn't enter shops, because I didn't have a mask with me.


So, when we went to the market, I couldn't enter shops, because I didn't have a mask with me.

"So" can be used to introduce a new topic, but here it doesn't really work because it sounds like it's supposed to instead introduce some logical transition from what was said before.

So, when we went to the market, I couldn't enter the shops, because I didn't have a mask with me.

So, wWhen we went toarrived at the market, I couldn't enter shops, because I didn't have a mask with me.

"arrived" is more precice than "went" because you're telling a story.

I washed it in a washing machine and pegged it out on a balcony.


I had washed it in a washing machine and pegged it out on athe balcony.

This describes something that happened prior to the point in time at which your narration is set, so you need to use the past perfect.

I washed it in a washing machine and pegged it out on a balcony.

Although there's nothing grammatically wrong with your sentence, the phrasing sounds a bit odd. I would suggest: "I had washed it with the washing machine and left it to dry on a peg in the balcony".

I washed it in a washing machine and peggedut it out on ato dry on the balcony.

I had washed it in athe washing machine and pegged it out on athe balcony.

It would be more accurate to say "I had washed it" because you are talking about how you relate to an event in the past, during a story that takes place in the past.

The wind went stronger as we went back home, and billowed our clothes.


The wind wentbecame stronger as we went back home, and billowed our clothes.

The wind wentblew stronger as we went back home, and billowed our clothes.

The wind wengot stronger as we wentre going back home, and had billowed our clothes.

It's nice to feel a cool wind, except there wasn't dust in the streets.


It's nice to feel a cool wind, except there wasn't dust in the streets.

It's nice to feel athe cool wind, except when there wasn't's dust in the streets.

It's nice to feel athe cool wind, except there wasn'twhen there's dust in the streets.

The wind spread it around, blowing it in people's faces.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The wind had spread it around, blowing it in people's faces.

I regretted that I hadn't got a mask again.


I regretted that I hadn't got a mask agaion.

You haven't indicated that this happened before, so "again" by itself, isn't really suitable.

I regretted that I hadn't got a mask again., once again, having left the mask at home.

I regretted that I hadn't gobrought a mask again.

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