Aug. 9, 2020
A warm bed only feeds indolence #4
With every positive, there are negative, a saying from my mother comes to mind:" A warm bed only feeds indolence." For an example of my mother's words, look no further than the Democrat-led state of California. Democrats are metaphorically making up this bed for lazy Californians to lie in. They are doing this by pouring funding to build apartments for only charge peppercorn rents as a mite of return, and providing free food, and subsides pile money to per homeless. A report shows that during the pandemic, the state government has been paying for homeless people to live in four-star hotels. These measures are like a slap in the face to hard-working people and taxpayers. For the Democrats, this is a smart way of currying favor with poor people and winning votes. But the cost will be high in the future. Young people will be negatively motivated by the idea that they can reap without sowing, so to speak. For now, the majority of homeless people don't need to worry about their lives. If they urinate in public, they will get what they want. Like my mother said, " The squeaky wheel gets the grease ". Some people have joked that that is how social progress is made, and I agree. But in all seriousness, in the long term, this situation will become a serious social concern.
With every positive, there areis a negative, a. A saying from my mother comes to mind:" "A warm bed only feeds indolence."
Either "there is a negative" or "there are negatives" :).
And you need something stronger than a comma before "a saying", for example a full stop.
For an example of my mother's words, look no further than the Democrat-led state of California.
Democrats are metaphorically making up this bed for lazy Californians to lie in.
They are doing this by pouring funding into building apartments forto only charge peppercorn rents as a mite of return, and, providing free food, ??? and subsides pile money to per homeless. ???
When it's metaphorical "pouring" for money etc., you need to pour it "into" something.
When you're doing a list, it takes the form "_____, _____, (etc.) ,*and* _____.
I've never heard "mite of" as an expression, so I'm not really sure what that bit means, and unfortunately I really couldn't understand the last bit at all.
A report shows that during the pandemic, the state government has been paying for homeless people to live in four-star hotels.
These measures are like a slap in the face to hard-working people and taxpayers.
For the Democrats, this is a smart way of currying favor with poor people and winning votes.
But the cost will be high in the future.
For now, the majority of homeless people don't need to worry about their lives.
If they urinate in public, they will get what they want.
This bit is fine and makes sense grammatically, but the meaning/your point is unclear to me.
Like my mother said, " The squeaky wheel gets the grease ".
Speech marks always go right next to the word/punctuation.
Some people have joked that that is how social progress is made, and I agree.
But in all seriousness, in the long term, this situation will become a serious social concern.
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Great :) There were some really confusing bits but the majority was perfect.
Aug. 9, 2020
thank your feedback
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--- " They are doing this by pouring funding to build apartments for only charge peppercorn rents as a mite of return, and providing free food, and subsides pile money to per homeless."
--- this is my original sentence: " they are doing this by increasing funding to build apartments affordable housing that serves the poor, as well as providing free food, and subsides of subsidies of more than three hundred dollars per week to the homeless.
--- I thought that the original sentence looks long and unclear. So I rewrite it. But you said the form doesn't make sense. Could you get me an idea to rewrite it, please?
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"If they urinate in public, they will get what they want."
--- I want to say, the poor use their way to fight what they desire without any sowing. The poor and some homeless just pee in front of the government official, as one of their ways, to attract government attends and social media camera.
--- Could you help to make this sentence making sense?
thank you
Aug. 11, 2020
1. Your original sentence isn’t grammatically perfect, but I can definitely understand it so I’ll just correct that one :)
“They are doing this by increasing funding to build affordable housing (apartments) that serves the poor, as well as providing free food and subsidies of more than three hundred dollars per week to the homeless.”
N.B. no comma after “food” because the “providing” has to apply to both “free food” and “subsidies“, if that makes sense? So you shouldn’t separate them with a comma :)
2. I’m really sorry, I don’t understand your explanation either :( but I think the way to make that sentence clearer is to include your explanation in the sentence, as it’s not obvious how they will “get what they want” by peeing in the street!
Hope this helps :) well done again
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They are doing this by pouring funding to build apartments for only charge peppercorn rents as a mite of return, and providing free food, and subsides pile money to per homeless. They are doing this by pouring funding into building apartments When it's metaphorical "pouring" for money etc., you need to pour it "into" something. When you're doing a list, it takes the form "_____, _____, (etc.) ,*and* _____. I've never heard "mite of" as an expression, so I'm not really sure what that bit means, and unfortunately I really couldn't understand the last bit at all. |
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A report shows that during the pandemic, the state government has been paying for homeless people to live in four-star hotels. A report shows that during the pandemic |
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These measures are like a slap in the face to hard-working people and taxpayers. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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For the Democrats, this is a smart way of currying favor with poor people and winning votes. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But the cost will be high in the future. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Young people will be negatively motivated by the idea that they can reap without sowing, so to speak. |
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Democrats are metaphorically making up this bed for lazy Californians to lie in. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A warm bed only feeds indolence #4 |
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With every positive, there are negative, a saying from my mother comes to mind:" A warm bed only feeds indolence." With every positive, there Either "there is a negative" or "there are negatives" :). And you need something stronger than a comma before "a saying", for example a full stop. |
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For an example of my mother's words, look no further than the Democrat-led state of California. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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For now, the majority of homeless people don't need to worry about their lives. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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If they urinate in public, they will get what they want. If they urinate in public, they will get what they want. This bit is fine and makes sense grammatically, but the meaning/your point is unclear to me. |
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Like my mother said, " The squeaky wheel gets the grease ". Like my mother said, " Speech marks always go right next to the word/punctuation. |
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Some people have joked that that is how social progress is made, and I agree. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But in all seriousness, in the long term, this situation will become a serious social concern. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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