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A video of Ryan Trahan

Ryan Trahan is a famous american YouTubeur. I have discovered him last week because I try watching English videos speaking in order to improve my English. I watched one of his videos and I loved it. So, I made it as an habitude.

I don't watch obviously his latest videos, so today I watched a video he made 8 months ago.

At the beginning of the video, his wife asked him if he would prefer living in the past or living in the future.
Therefore, to discover the answer to this question, as he can afford him, he travelled into 2 very different towns. One is considered as one of the oldest town of the world. It's located in Italy. And the other is considered as one of the most futuristic town of the world which is located in Tokyo, in China.

His goal in the video was to do his daily routine in the two different places and to make a new friend.

He went first to the city in Italy. It was so amazing how the city was old. There were ruins where people live. He was walcomed in a cave.
However, the cave was very lovely. It was big and the bathroom was beautiful. However, the main bedroom looked a bit scared because of his ominous candles. There were also two chairs, one in frond of the other. It was a bit weird.
He made a tour of the city and ate in a restaurant where he ate pasta which looked delicious (can I say yummy?)! He bacame friend with the owner of the cave who was really kind and looked funny.

After spending one whole day in this city, he went into the direction of China, in Tokyo.
I was impressed by how it looked futuristic. There were skyscrapers. Everything was shiny in this city! He ate into a restaurant where all the waiaters were robots. It was really strange. But, as a matter of fact, robots were funny and they even danced.
His hotel was just amazing. He had an incredible view over the city and during the night, with the lights, it was beautiful!
The bathroom, the bedroom, the toilets, the living room, everything was big. And there were the typical toilet in China with bags of functions.
I hope someday I will test them becuse it looks very cool! During his traveling, he et two women who watched all his videos and made friend with them!

To conclude the video, he backed up with the conversation with his wife when she asked him what he would prefer. And he said that he most important isn't the time when you living, but with who are you living this time. Thereby, he said that he's just happy to live with her.

I really appreciated this video and I was happy to understand many things without the subtitles.

I hope you enjoy reading my text, and please tell me how you found my English!

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A video of Ryan Trahan

Your title is correct, but for something more natural you could write "The Videos of Ryan Trahan" or "My Thoughts on Ryan Trahan's Videos", etc.

Ryan Trahan is a famous aAmerican YouTubeur.

I have discovered him last week because I trywas watching English videos -speaking videos in order to improve my English.

You could replace English at the end with language skills to be less repetitive.

I watched one of his videos and I loved it.

You can say "and I loved it", it sounds slightly more natural to just keep the subject at the beginning though.

So, I made it as an habitude.

I obviously don't watch obviously his latest videos, so today I watched a video he made 8 months ago.

Adverb placement goes after subject
Meaning not totally clear here, obviously is maybe better replaced by a different meaning

Therefore, to discover the answer to this question, as he can afford him, he travelled into 2 very different towns.

One is considered as one of the oldest town ofs in the world.

And the other is considered as one of the most futuristic towncities of the world, which is located in Tokyo, in China.

His goal in the video was to do his daily routine in the two different places and to make a new friend.

He went first to the city in Italy.

He was waelcomed in a cavhouse.

Not sure what cave means here

It was big and the bathroom was, with a beautiful bathroom.

However, the main bedroom looked a bit scaredy because of hits ominous candles.

There were also two chairs, one in frondt of the other.

He made a tour ofed the city and ate in a restaurant where he ate pasta which looked delicious (can I say yummy?)!yummy/delicious-looking pasta in a restaurant.

You can say yummy, just be aware it sounds a bit childish/more colloquial if you use it for formal speech.

He baecame friends with the owner of the cavhouse who was really kind and looked funny.

Looked funny is normally a negative description here, a different word might better convey your meaning.

After spending one wholan entire day in this city, he went intoleft to travel in the direction of China, in Tokyo.

China and Tokyo, Japan are two different areas (not sure if you mean Asia)
one whole day works, but an entire day sounds better because it emphasizes how long he spend
went into the direction works, but left to travel is more specific to this situation

I was impressed by how the city looked futuristic.

The noun isn't clearly pointed out in the last sentence so using a specific noun is better here

He ate into a restaurant where all the waiaters were robots.

In - dans un resto
Into - dans l'interieur

But, as a matter of fact, the robots were funny and they even danced.

As a matter of fact is a formal phrase used for essays, it sounds a bit off in the casual tone of speech here

He had an incredible view over the city and d. During the night, with the lights, it was beautiful!

And there wereas the typical toilet in ChinaJapanese toilet with baglots of functions.

I hope someday I will testcan experience them because ithey looks very cool!

While he was traveling / During his travelings, he met two women who had watched all his videos and made friends with them!

To concludefinish the video, he backed up withreturned back to the conversation with his wife whenre she asked him what he would prefer.

Conclude is more used for formal essays, finish is more colloquial and appropriate here
Backed up is a motion verb for cars, trucks, etc (I backed up into a tree)

And he said that the most important thing isn't thewhat time whenin which you live ing, but with who are you are living this time with.

Thereby, he said that he's just happy to live with her.

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Vous avez ecrivez bien, presque toutes les phrases sont faciles a comprendre. :)

A video of Ryan Trahan

Ryan Trahan is a famous american YouTubeur.

I have discovered him last week because I try to watching English videos speaking videos in order to improve my English.

I watched one of his videos and I loved it.

So, I made it as an habitude.

I obviously don't watch obviously his latest videos, so today I watched a video he made 8 months ago.

At the beginning of the video, his wife asked him if he would prefer living in the past or living in the future.

Therefore, to discover the answer to this question, and as he can afford himit, he travelled into 2 very different towns.

One is considered as one of the oldest town of the world.

It's located in Italy.

And the other is considered as one of the most futuristic town of the world which is located in Tokyo, in China.

His goal in the video was to do his daily routine in the two different places and to make a new friend.

He went first to the city in Italy.

It was so amazing how old the city was old.

He was waelcomed into a cave.

However, the cave was very lovely.

It was big and the bathroom was beautiful.

However, the main bedroom looked a bit scaredy because of his ominous candles.

There were also two chairs, one in frond of the other.

It was a bit weird.

He made a tour of the city and ate in a restaurant where he ate pasta which looked delicious (can I say yummy?)!

ya yummy or delicious works! yummy is more informal though

He bacame friend with the owner of the cave who was really kind and looked funny.

After spending one whole day in this city, he went into the direction of China, in Tokyo.

I was impressed by how it looked futuristic it looked.

There were skyscrapers.

Everything was shiny in this city!

He ate intoat a restaurant where all the waiaters were robots.

at or in

It was really strange.

But, as a matter of fact, the robots were funny and they even danced.

His hotel was just amazing.

He had an incredible view over the city and during the night, with the lights, it was beautiful!

The bathroom, the bedroom, the toilets, the living room, everything was big.

And there were the typical toilets in China with bagsa bunch of functions.

I hope someday I will test them becuse it looks very cool!

During his traveling, he met two women who watched all his videos and madbecame friends with them!

To conclude the video, he backed up with the conversation with his wife when she asked him what he would prefer.

And he said that he whats most important isn't the time when you living, but with who are you living this time.

technically this sentence works but a little choppy and unnatural try: the most important thing isn't just the time you spent living, but those you spend time living with

Thereby, he said that he's just happy to live with her.

I really appreciated this video and I was happy to understand many things without the subtitles.

I hope you enjoy reading my text, and please tell me how you found my English!

Feedback

great easy to follow and understand small corrections but overall great!

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Thanks a lot!

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Which level do you think I am(B1,B2,C1,C2)?

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oh idk maybe b2?

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I'm not sure so it's why I asked you. But I also think I must be B2 !

A video of Ryan Trahan


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A video of Ryan Trahan

Your title is correct, but for something more natural you could write "The Videos of Ryan Trahan" or "My Thoughts on Ryan Trahan's Videos", etc.

Ryan Trahan is a famous american YouTubeur.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Ryan Trahan is a famous aAmerican YouTubeur.

I have discovered him last week because I try watching English videos speaking in order to improve my English.


I have discovered him last week because I try to watching English videos speaking videos in order to improve my English.

I have discovered him last week because I trywas watching English videos -speaking videos in order to improve my English.

You could replace English at the end with language skills to be less repetitive.

I watched one of his videos and I loved it.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I watched one of his videos and I loved it.

You can say "and I loved it", it sounds slightly more natural to just keep the subject at the beginning though.

So, I made it as an habitude.


So, I made it as an habitude.

So, I made it as an habitude.

He made a tour of the city and ate in a restaurant where he ate pasta which looked delicious (can I say yummy?)!


He made a tour of the city and ate in a restaurant where he ate pasta which looked delicious (can I say yummy?)!

ya yummy or delicious works! yummy is more informal though

He made a tour ofed the city and ate in a restaurant where he ate pasta which looked delicious (can I say yummy?)!yummy/delicious-looking pasta in a restaurant.

You can say yummy, just be aware it sounds a bit childish/more colloquial if you use it for formal speech.

He bacame friend with the owner of the cave who was really kind and looked funny.


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He baecame friends with the owner of the cavhouse who was really kind and looked funny.

Looked funny is normally a negative description here, a different word might better convey your meaning.

After spending one whole day in this city, he went into the direction of China, in Tokyo.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

After spending one wholan entire day in this city, he went intoleft to travel in the direction of China, in Tokyo.

China and Tokyo, Japan are two different areas (not sure if you mean Asia) one whole day works, but an entire day sounds better because it emphasizes how long he spend went into the direction works, but left to travel is more specific to this situation

I was impressed by how it looked futuristic.


I was impressed by how it looked futuristic it looked.

I was impressed by how the city looked futuristic.

The noun isn't clearly pointed out in the last sentence so using a specific noun is better here

There were skyscrapers.


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Everything was shiny in this city!


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He ate into a restaurant where all the waiaters were robots.


He ate intoat a restaurant where all the waiaters were robots.

at or in

He ate into a restaurant where all the waiaters were robots.

In - dans un resto Into - dans l'interieur

It was really strange.


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But, as a matter of fact, robots were funny and they even danced.


But, as a matter of fact, the robots were funny and they even danced.

But, as a matter of fact, the robots were funny and they even danced.

As a matter of fact is a formal phrase used for essays, it sounds a bit off in the casual tone of speech here

His hotel was just amazing.


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He had an incredible view over the city and during the night, with the lights, it was beautiful!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

He had an incredible view over the city and d. During the night, with the lights, it was beautiful!

The bathroom, the bedroom, the toilets, the living room, everything was big.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

And there were the typical toilet in China with bags of functions.


And there were the typical toilets in China with bagsa bunch of functions.

And there wereas the typical toilet in ChinaJapanese toilet with baglots of functions.

I hope someday I will test them becuse it looks very cool!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I hope someday I will testcan experience them because ithey looks very cool!

During his traveling, he et two women who watched all his videos and made friend with them!


During his traveling, he met two women who watched all his videos and madbecame friends with them!

While he was traveling / During his travelings, he met two women who had watched all his videos and made friends with them!

To conclude the video, he backed up with the conversation with his wife when she asked him what he would prefer.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

To concludefinish the video, he backed up withreturned back to the conversation with his wife whenre she asked him what he would prefer.

Conclude is more used for formal essays, finish is more colloquial and appropriate here Backed up is a motion verb for cars, trucks, etc (I backed up into a tree)

And he said that he most important isn't the time when you living, but with who are you living this time.


And he said that he whats most important isn't the time when you living, but with who are you living this time.

technically this sentence works but a little choppy and unnatural try: the most important thing isn't just the time you spent living, but those you spend time living with

And he said that the most important thing isn't thewhat time whenin which you live ing, but with who are you are living this time with.

Thereby, he said that he's just happy to live with her.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Thereby, he said that he's just happy to live with her.

I really appreciated this video and I was happy to understand many things without the subtitles.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I hope you enjoy reading my text, and please tell me how you found my English!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I don't watch obviously his latest videos, so today I watched a video he made 8 months ago.


I obviously don't watch obviously his latest videos, so today I watched a video he made 8 months ago.

I obviously don't watch obviously his latest videos, so today I watched a video he made 8 months ago.

Adverb placement goes after subject Meaning not totally clear here, obviously is maybe better replaced by a different meaning

At the beginning of the video, his wife asked him if he would prefer living in the past or living in the future.


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Therefore, to discover the answer to this question, as he can afford him, he travelled into 2 very different towns.


Therefore, to discover the answer to this question, and as he can afford himit, he travelled into 2 very different towns.

Therefore, to discover the answer to this question, as he can afford him, he travelled into 2 very different towns.

One is considered as one of the oldest town of the world.


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One is considered as one of the oldest town ofs in the world.

It's located in Italy.


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And the other is considered as one of the most futuristic town of the world which is located in Tokyo, in China.


And the other is considered as one of the most futuristic town of the world which is located in Tokyo, in China.

And the other is considered as one of the most futuristic towncities of the world, which is located in Tokyo, in China.

His goal in the video was to do his daily routine in the two different places and to make a new friend.


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His goal in the video was to do his daily routine in the two different places and to make a new friend.

He went first to the city in Italy.


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He went first to the city in Italy.

It was so amazing how the city was old.


It was so amazing how old the city was old.

There were ruins where people live.


He was walcomed in a cave.


He was waelcomed into a cave.

He was waelcomed in a cavhouse.

Not sure what cave means here

However, the cave was very lovely.


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It was big and the bathroom was beautiful.


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It was big and the bathroom was, with a beautiful bathroom.

However, the main bedroom looked a bit scared because of his ominous candles.


However, the main bedroom looked a bit scaredy because of his ominous candles.

However, the main bedroom looked a bit scaredy because of hits ominous candles.

There were also two chairs, one in frond of the other.


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There were also two chairs, one in frondt of the other.

It was a bit weird.


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