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shiera

May 27, 2020

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A Vicious Circle

I was tired from working yesterday. As soon as I got home, I fell asleep despite 7 pm. After that, I woke up at 1 am. This is a bad situation. If I sit up until morning, I'd be sleepy in the office.
After I took a shower, I drank tea and relaxed but couldn't get to sleep. I try to read a book to get myself sleep but it didn't work. In the meantime, I got sleepy at last but it was 5 am. This is the worst situation.
I have to wake up at 6:30. If I slept then, it'd be hard to wake up at 6:30. But I chose to sleep then and slept. As I expected, I felt grouchy when I woke up. I drank a very strong coffee. When I got in the office, I also made a very strong coffee. Like this I drank 5 cups of strong coffee in the office.
Tonight I can't get to sleep. This is a vicious circle.😭

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A Vicious Circle

As soon as I got home, I fell asleep, despite it being only 7 pm.

After that, I woke up later at 1 am.

This is a bad situation.

In the meantime, I got sleepy at last but grew sleepy but by then it was 5 am.

If I slept thenat that time, it'd be hard to wake up at 6:30.

But I chose to sleep then and slept.

When I got into the office, I alsogain made a very strong coffee.

Like this IAnd so on: I ended up draink 5ing five cups of strong coffee in the office.

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Circle is fine!

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shiera

May 28, 2020

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Thank you for checking and correcting my English!

A Vicious Cirycle

"Circle" mostly refers to a physical shape or a group of people. "Cycle" refers to a series of events that keep repeating.

I was tired from working yesterday.

As soon as I got home, I fell asleep despite it only being 7 pm.

After that, I woke up at 1 am.

This is a bad situation.

If I sitay up until morning, I'd be sleepy in the office.

After I took a shower, I drank tea and relaxed but couldn't geto to sleep.

I tryied to read a book to get myself to sleep but it didn't work.

In the meantimAfter a while, I got sleepy at last but it was 5 am.

"In the meantime" implies that something is happening at the same time. "After a while" shows that the event happened after the first event (in this case, you finally got sleepy after reading a book).

"At last" also isn't necessary because you already have the beginning phrase ("after a while") in the beginning.

This is the worst situation.

I have to wake up at 6:30.

If I slept then, it'd be hard to wake up at 6:30.

But I chose to sleep then and fell asleept.

This sentence sounds a bit repetitive, but if you still want to write this then the correction makes it sounds better.

As I expected, I felt grouchy when I woke up.

I drank a very strong cup of coffee.

When I got into the office, I also made a very strong coffee.

Repeating "a very" sounds a bit strange.

Like this I drank 5 cups of strong coffee in the office.

"Like this" doesn't sound right in the beginning of the sentence. I feel like this sentence works well without a transition.

Tonight I can't geto to sleep.

This is a vicious cirycle.😭

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Good job!

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shiera

May 28, 2020

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Thank you for the corrections and explanations!

After that, I woke up at 1 am.


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After that, I woke up later at 1 am.

This is a bad situation.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

As I expected, I felt grouchy when I woke up.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I drank a very strong coffee.


I drank a very strong cup of coffee.

A Vicious Circle


A Vicious Cirycle

"Circle" mostly refers to a physical shape or a group of people. "Cycle" refers to a series of events that keep repeating.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I was tired from working yesterday.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

As soon as I got home, I fell asleep despite 7 pm.


As soon as I got home, I fell asleep despite it only being 7 pm.

As soon as I got home, I fell asleep, despite it being only 7 pm.

If I sit up until morning, I'd be sleepy in the office.


If I sitay up until morning, I'd be sleepy in the office.

After I took a shower, I drank tea and relaxed but couldn't get to sleep.


After I took a shower, I drank tea and relaxed but couldn't geto to sleep.

I try to read a book to get myself sleep but it didn't work.


I tryied to read a book to get myself to sleep but it didn't work.

In the meantime, I got sleepy at last but it was 5 am.


In the meantimAfter a while, I got sleepy at last but it was 5 am.

"In the meantime" implies that something is happening at the same time. "After a while" shows that the event happened after the first event (in this case, you finally got sleepy after reading a book). "At last" also isn't necessary because you already have the beginning phrase ("after a while") in the beginning.

In the meantime, I got sleepy at last but grew sleepy but by then it was 5 am.

This is the worst situation.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I have to wake up at 6:30.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

If I slept then, it'd be hard to wake up at 6:30.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

If I slept thenat that time, it'd be hard to wake up at 6:30.

But I chose to sleep then and slept.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

But I chose to sleep then and fell asleept.

This sentence sounds a bit repetitive, but if you still want to write this then the correction makes it sounds better.

When I got in the office, I also made a very strong coffee.


When I got into the office, I also made a very strong coffee.

Repeating "a very" sounds a bit strange.

When I got into the office, I alsogain made a very strong coffee.

Like this I drank 5 cups of strong coffee in the office.


Like this I drank 5 cups of strong coffee in the office.

"Like this" doesn't sound right in the beginning of the sentence. I feel like this sentence works well without a transition.

Like this IAnd so on: I ended up draink 5ing five cups of strong coffee in the office.

Tonight I can't get to sleep.


Tonight I can't geto to sleep.

This is a vicious circle.😭


This is a vicious cirycle.😭

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