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jorgenager

July 20, 2022

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A Tough Decision

At this very moment, I’m quite discouraged and desperate. Let me tell you what’s happening to me. It isn’t something new. In fact, it’s something that happens to me very often, but even so, it makes me mull over whether or not what I’ve done throughout the past six years really deserves the time and effort I’ve invested in it. It has nothing to do with what is going on in the world: the war in Ukraine, the out of control increase in the cost of living as a consequence of the war in Ukraine, the current unstable political situation in my country, the record high temperatures, the 6th generation wildfires that are devastating our country as a result of, among other factors, the heat wave we’re enduring.

What’s happening to me right now is that this morning I began to read a new book. Sorry for keeping you on tenterhooks. Yesterday, I finished reading my last book and, as always happens, starting a new one is never an easy task. I have to get used to the author’s way of writing. Sometimes, it’s a relief. The new book is easier to read than the previous one and that fact makes the reading be more enjoyable, more appealing, and more riveting. That was the case with the last book I read. “The Kind Worth Killing” is a page-turned; the kind of book you start reading and can’t stop until you’ve finished it. In a nut shell, although it took me to read it more than a month, I read every day for over one hour, it was worthwhile reading. “The Kind Worth Killing” is a thriller quite similar to another one I read six years ago: “The Girl on the Train”.
A week earlier I finish a book, I’m already thinking about the next one I’m going to read. I have a list of books I want to read. I even have a list of pre-ordered books on Amazon. I mean, my problem isn’t the lack of books I want to read but which one to choose first. I hate to begin a book and not be able to read it because of my level of English not being high enough. I also hate to spend endless hours looking up words in the dictionary. By doing this, I lose the treat of the plot. This is why is so important to pick out the right book. That reminds me that famous Forrest Gump’s quote: “Life is like a box of chocolates. You never know what you gonna get”.

Like someone suggested that I did, I pretended to write a review about “The Kind Worth Killing”, but as usually happen to me, one thing leads to another and at the end, I’ve written about something completely different. At least, I hope something of what I have written makes sense. By the way, if you have any suggestion, please let me know it.

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At this very moment, I’m quitefeeling discouraged and desperate.

Sounds more natural.

It has nothing to do with what is going on in the world: the war in Ukraine,; the out of control increase in the cost of living as a consequence of the war in Ukraine, the current; the unstable political situation in my country,; the record high temperatures,; the 6th generation wildfires that are devastating our country as a result of, among other factors,; and the heat wave we’re enduring.

Removed current because it is implied and Ukraine because it was already mentioned. Made suggestions for brevity.

Generally, if you make a list with long phrases, separate them with ; instead of , .

Yesterday, I finished reading my last book and, as it always happenis, starting a new one ihas never been an easy task.

Alt: As always

The new book is easier to read than the previous one and that fact makes the reading be more enjoyable, more appealing, and more riveting.

Removed the 'more' for brevity, but either is fine.

“The Kind Worth Killing” is a page-turned;r -- the kind of book you start reading and can’t stop until you’ve finished it.

In a nut shell, although it took me to read it more than a month to read it, I read every day for over one hour, i. It was worthwhile reading.

"The Kind Worth Killing" is a thriller quite similar to another one I read six years ago: “ called "The Girl on the Train."

A week earlier Ibefore finishing a book, I’m already thinking about the next one I’m going to read.

I hate to beginning a book and not be able to read it because of my level of English is not being high enough.

I also hate to spending endless hours looking up words in the dictionary.

By doing this, I lose the threatd of the plot.

This is why it is so important to pick out the right book.

You never know what you gonna get."

Periods go inside quotations.

Like someone suggested that I dido, I pretended to write a review about “The Kind Worth Killing," but as it usually happen to mes, one thing leads to another and at the end, I’ve writoten about something completely different.

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Very minor, stylistic corrections from my end. You write fluidly, and I enjoy reading your work. I made some suggestions in terms of brevity, though that is just a personal writing preference. I related a lot to what you mentioned about the challenges of finding the right book. I experience the same when I read in Spanish.

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jorgenager

July 22, 2022

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"The Kind Worth Killing" is a thriller quite similar to another one I read six years ago: “ called "The Girl on the Train."

Which option do you think is the best , "a book called" or "a book entitled"? Thanks beforehand.

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jorgenager

July 22, 2022

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Thanks Toobatea for taking the time to read and correct my long post. I really appreciate all your suggestions and comments, They are very useful.

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toobatea

July 23, 2022

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Which option do you think is the best , "a book called" or "a book entitled"? Thanks beforehand.

Either is understood, though if I were writing more formally I would use "a book entitled" instead of "a book called."

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jorgenager

July 26, 2022

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Many thanks Toobatea

A Tough Decision

At this very moment, I’m feeling quite discouraged and desperate.

Just to clarify it’s an emotion (more cohesiveness! Seems unnecessary but it does add to your writing!!)

Let meI’m going to tell you what’s happening to me.

“I’m going to…” implies desperation as you are using a more forced tone of imperative!

It isn’t something new.

In fact, it’s something that happens to me very often, but even so, it makes me mull over whether or not what I’ve done throughout the past six years really deserves the time and effort I’ve invested in it.

It has nothing to do with what is going on in the world: the war in Ukraine, the out of control increase in the cost of living as a consequence of the war in Ukraine, the current unstable political situation in my country, the record high temperatures, the 6th generation wildfires that are devastating our country as a result of, among other factors, the heat wave we’re enduring.

What’s happening to me right now is that this morning I began to read a new book.

Sorry for keeping you on tenterhooks.

Yesterday, I finished reading my last book and, as always happens, starting a new one is never an easy task.

I have to get used to the author’s way of writing.

Sometimes, it’s a relief.

The new book is easier to read than the previous one and that fact makes the reading be more enjoyable, more appealing, and more riveting.

“Be” is not necessary as “more enjoyable” -> an adjective (in this case). On a side note beautiful use of anaphora !

That was the case with the last book I read.

“The Kind Worth Killing” is a page-turnedr; the kind of book you start reading and can’t stop until you’ve finished it.

The reason it is “turner” instead of “turned” is because “turner” implies that it is a characteristic continuing into the future/present !

In a nut shell, although it took me longe to read it (more than a month, I read every dayand for over onean hour each day), it was worthwhile reading.

In English, this type of sentence would be too long by itself, instead, we would put the added, nuanced details in brackets to not disturb the flow of the simple sentence :)

“The Kind Worth Killing” is a thriller quite similar to another one I read six years ago: “The Girl on the Train”.

A week earlier I finish a book,I only finished the book last week, and I’m already thinking about the next one I’m going to read.

I have a list of books I want to read.

I even have a list of pre-ordered books on Amazon.

I mean, my problem isn’t the lack of books I want to read but which one to choose first.

I hate to begin a book and not be able to read it because of my level of English not being high enough.

I also hate to spend endless hours looking up words in the dictionary.

By doing this, I lose the treat of the plot.

This is why is so important to pick out the right book.

That reminds me that famous Forrest Gump’s quote: “Life is like a box of chocolates.

You never know what you gonna get”.

Like someone suggested that I did, I pretended to write a review about “The Kind Worth Killing”, but, as usually happen to me, one thing leads to another and at the end, I’ve written about something completely different.

At least, I hope something of what I have written makes sense.

By the way, if you have any suggestions, please let me know it.

Suggestions is always referred to in plural in this context (referring to suggestions for books/movies/food etc.)

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What you have written makes a lot of sense ! It is hard to limit your options when learning a language because of something you can’t yet control (fluency). One day you will be able to read any English book you want! Bravo!!

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jorgenager

July 21, 2022

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By the way, if you have any suggestions, please let me know it.

Then if suggestions is always referred to in plural, I'd have to say "please let me know them", wouldn't I ?

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jorgenager

July 21, 2022

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I've read a lot of books. Some of them have taken me longer than others but at the end, I have been able to finish them. However, there are books that I don't think I will never be able to read. I'll have to be born again. Sadly, I'm going to give up the book I'm reading now. I have to be looking up words and expressions in the dictionary all the time. It's a waste of time and I already have another one I want to read. By the way, thanks for taking the time to read and correct my long post. I really appreciate it.

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frannie_

July 21, 2022

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Then if suggestions is always referred to in plural, I'd have to say "please let me know them", wouldn't I ?

Oh yes you are right I forgot to correct that as well, well done!

At this very moment, I’m feeling quite discouraged and desperate.

Not incorrect, just sounds a bit more natural.

Let me tell you what is happening to me.

Yesterday, I finished reading my lastanother book and, as always happens, starting a new one is never an easy task.

Theis new book is easier to read than the previous one and that factis makes the reading beit more enjoyable, more appealing, and more riveting, for me.

That was the case with the last book I read.

This seems a bit contradictory to the previous sentence, which seems to suggest that it is the new book that is more enjoyable etc.

“The Kind Worth Killing” is a page-turnedr; the kind of book you start reading and can’t stop until you’ve finished it.

In a nut shell, although it took me to read it more than a month, to read it, and I read every day for over onean hour, it was worthwhile reading.

I mean, my problem isn’t the lack of books I want to read, but which one to choose first.

I hate to begstarting a book and not be able to read itcontinue because of my level of English is not being highadvanced enough.

I also hate having to spend endless hours looking up words in the dictionary.

By doing this, I lose the threatd of the plot.

This is why it is so important to pick out the right book.

That reminds me of that famous Forrest Gump’s quote: “Life is like a box of chocolates.

Like someone suggested that I did, I pretended to write a review about “The Kind Worth Killing”, but as usually happen to meas someone suggested, but as usually happens when I write a review, one thing leads to another and atby the end, I find that I have written about something completely different.

By the way, if you have any suggestions on the text / on topics I could write about, please let me know it.

I think you need to clarify here what sort of suggestions you are looking for.

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You have written some really complex sentences and convey your thoughts really well. Excellent job! You seem very fluent to me :)

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jorgenager

July 21, 2022

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Thanks vitasoyboi for taking the time to read and correct my long post and also thanks for your kind comment. I really appreciate it.

A Tough Decision


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At this very moment, I’m quite discouraged and desperate.


At this very moment, I’m feeling quite discouraged and desperate.

Not incorrect, just sounds a bit more natural.

At this very moment, I’m feeling quite discouraged and desperate.

Just to clarify it’s an emotion (more cohesiveness! Seems unnecessary but it does add to your writing!!)

At this very moment, I’m quitefeeling discouraged and desperate.

Sounds more natural.

Let me tell you what’s happening to me.


Let me tell you what is happening to me.

Let meI’m going to tell you what’s happening to me.

“I’m going to…” implies desperation as you are using a more forced tone of imperative!

It isn’t something new.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In fact, it’s something that happens to me very often, but even so, it makes me mull over whether or not what I’ve done throughout the past six years really deserves the time and effort I’ve invested in it.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It has nothing to do with what is going on in the world: the war in Ukraine, the out of control increase in the cost of living as a consequence of the war in Ukraine, the current unstable political situation in my country, the record high temperatures, the 6th generation wildfires that are devastating our country as a result of, among other factors, the heat wave we’re enduring.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It has nothing to do with what is going on in the world: the war in Ukraine,; the out of control increase in the cost of living as a consequence of the war in Ukraine, the current; the unstable political situation in my country,; the record high temperatures,; the 6th generation wildfires that are devastating our country as a result of, among other factors,; and the heat wave we’re enduring.

Removed current because it is implied and Ukraine because it was already mentioned. Made suggestions for brevity. Generally, if you make a list with long phrases, separate them with ; instead of , .

What’s happening to me right now is that this morning I began to read a new book.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Sorry for keeping you on tenterhooks.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Yesterday, I finished reading my last book and, as always happens, starting a new one is never an easy task.


Yesterday, I finished reading my lastanother book and, as always happens, starting a new one is never an easy task.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Yesterday, I finished reading my last book and, as it always happenis, starting a new one ihas never been an easy task.

Alt: As always

I have to get used to the author’s way of writing.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Sometimes, it’s a relief.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The new book is easier to read than the previous one and that fact makes the reading be more enjoyable, more appealing, and more riveting.


Theis new book is easier to read than the previous one and that factis makes the reading beit more enjoyable, more appealing, and more riveting, for me.

The new book is easier to read than the previous one and that fact makes the reading be more enjoyable, more appealing, and more riveting.

“Be” is not necessary as “more enjoyable” -> an adjective (in this case). On a side note beautiful use of anaphora !

The new book is easier to read than the previous one and that fact makes the reading be more enjoyable, more appealing, and more riveting.

Removed the 'more' for brevity, but either is fine.

That was the case with the last book I read.


That was the case with the last book I read.

This seems a bit contradictory to the previous sentence, which seems to suggest that it is the new book that is more enjoyable etc.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

“The Kind Worth Killing” is a page-turned; the kind of book you start reading and can’t stop until you’ve finished it.


“The Kind Worth Killing” is a page-turnedr; the kind of book you start reading and can’t stop until you’ve finished it.

“The Kind Worth Killing” is a page-turnedr; the kind of book you start reading and can’t stop until you’ve finished it.

The reason it is “turner” instead of “turned” is because “turner” implies that it is a characteristic continuing into the future/present !

“The Kind Worth Killing” is a page-turned;r -- the kind of book you start reading and can’t stop until you’ve finished it.

In a nut shell, although it took me to read it more than a month, I read every day for over one hour, it was worthwhile reading.


In a nut shell, although it took me to read it more than a month, to read it, and I read every day for over onean hour, it was worthwhile reading.

In a nut shell, although it took me longe to read it (more than a month, I read every dayand for over onean hour each day), it was worthwhile reading.

In English, this type of sentence would be too long by itself, instead, we would put the added, nuanced details in brackets to not disturb the flow of the simple sentence :)

In a nut shell, although it took me to read it more than a month to read it, I read every day for over one hour, i. It was worthwhile reading.

“The Kind Worth Killing” is a thriller quite similar to another one I read six years ago: “The Girl on the Train”.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

"The Kind Worth Killing" is a thriller quite similar to another one I read six years ago: “ called "The Girl on the Train."

A week earlier I finish a book, I’m already thinking about the next one I’m going to read.


A week earlier I finish a book,I only finished the book last week, and I’m already thinking about the next one I’m going to read.

A week earlier Ibefore finishing a book, I’m already thinking about the next one I’m going to read.

I have a list of books I want to read.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I even have a list of pre-ordered books on Amazon.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I mean, my problem isn’t the lack of books I want to read but which one to choose first.


I mean, my problem isn’t the lack of books I want to read, but which one to choose first.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I hate to begin a book and not be able to read it because of my level of English not being high enough.


I hate to begstarting a book and not be able to read itcontinue because of my level of English is not being highadvanced enough.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I hate to beginning a book and not be able to read it because of my level of English is not being high enough.

I also hate to spend endless hours looking up words in the dictionary.


I also hate having to spend endless hours looking up words in the dictionary.

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I also hate to spending endless hours looking up words in the dictionary.

By doing this, I lose the treat of the plot.


By doing this, I lose the threatd of the plot.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

By doing this, I lose the threatd of the plot.

This is why is so important to pick out the right book.


This is why it is so important to pick out the right book.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This is why it is so important to pick out the right book.

That reminds me that famous Forrest Gump’s quote: “Life is like a box of chocolates.


That reminds me of that famous Forrest Gump’s quote: “Life is like a box of chocolates.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

You never know what you gonna get”.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

You never know what you gonna get."

Periods go inside quotations.

Like someone suggested that I did, I pretended to write a review about “The Kind Worth Killing”, but as usually happen to me, one thing leads to another and at the end, I’ve written about something completely different.


Like someone suggested that I did, I pretended to write a review about “The Kind Worth Killing”, but as usually happen to meas someone suggested, but as usually happens when I write a review, one thing leads to another and atby the end, I find that I have written about something completely different.

Like someone suggested that I did, I pretended to write a review about “The Kind Worth Killing”, but, as usually happen to me, one thing leads to another and at the end, I’ve written about something completely different.

Like someone suggested that I dido, I pretended to write a review about “The Kind Worth Killing," but as it usually happen to mes, one thing leads to another and at the end, I’ve writoten about something completely different.

At least, I hope something of what I have written makes sense.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

By the way, if you have any suggestion, please let me know it.


By the way, if you have any suggestions on the text / on topics I could write about, please let me know it.

I think you need to clarify here what sort of suggestions you are looking for.

By the way, if you have any suggestions, please let me know it.

Suggestions is always referred to in plural in this context (referring to suggestions for books/movies/food etc.)

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