Oct. 3, 2021
A Special Day
I finished my part-time job at noon. I had lunch and slept for a while. When I woke up, I was fairely upset because I didn't sleep well.
I went to pick up my friend at 2. It was quite hot, even though I sat in the car, I still felt pain by the sunshine. I thoght my car was hit by a three wheels bike driving by an old couple, and they were so rude. There was traffic jam, and I thoght the couple would never admit their fault and compensate, so I went on. There was a part of the road under constructing, so it was quite jolting as I was driving a go-kart.
When I arrived at the hotel, I asked the boss to park my car because there were so many people and so many cars, I was so scared. I told him I was hungry and want to eat outside, then I can go swimming with him. He invited me to eat his prawns which he cooked half an hour ago. The prawn was not cheap here, so it was very kind of him. I ate something dilicious at a reastaurant with my friend.
The boss drove my car and took us to the beach. He once told me that he would take me to a special and beautiful beach, but we stopped at a scenic spot where were so many people. I felt a little disappointed at first, when I jumped into the sea, I forget everything. I sat in the water and letted the water to take me anywhere. It felt quite special and awesome as I hadn't experienced it for a few years. If it didn't getting darker and darker, I would have been playing in the sea for a long time.
On our way back to the hotel, I lied on the window just letted the wind caress my face. I looked at the sky, or looked at the buildings, or the the people passed by. I felt like I was living in a movie. It was so good to just be a passenger in a car.
After I took a bath, my friend was singing karaoke. I joined her at once though the tone quality was really bad. We had a good time.
There were two guys playing a boxing champion 97 on a new game machine just bought by the boss. I asked one of them if I could have a try, he nodded. He taught me how the play, and we play several rounds. He left with his friend, another boy sat down and played with me, and taught me some skills. It was hot, but I was really happy.
I was gungry again. I hang out with my friend. There were so many people in the street. We had some snack.
I am really exciting today! Wish you have a good day as well.
A Special Day
I finished my part-time jobworking at noon.
I had lunch and then slept for a while.
When I woke up, I was fairely upsetgrumpy because I didn't sleep well.
If you were upset at the fact that you didn't sleep well, and not just in a bad mood, then "upset" is fine.
I went to pick up my friend at 2.
It was quite hot,; even though I sat in the car, I still felt pain by the sunshinthe sun beating down on me.
I thoghtink my car was hit by a three -wheelsed bike drivingen by an old couple, and theywho were sovery rude.
There was traffic jam, and I thought there was no way the couple would never admit their fault and compensate me, so I went on my way.
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When I arrived at the hotel, I asked themy boss to park my car because there were so many people and so many cars, and I was so scared.
Who is the boss? Your boss from work?
I told him I was hungry and wanted to eat outside, and then I canwould go swimming with him.
He invited me to eat hissome prawns of his which he cooked a half an hour ago.
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I ate something dielicious at a reastaurant with my friend.
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I felt a little disappointed at first, but, when I jumped into the sea, I forgeot everythingall about it.
I sat in the water and letted the water toocean take me anywhereway.
It felt quite special and awesome, as I hadn't experienced it for a few years.
If it dihadn't getting darker andstarted to get darker, I would have been playinged in the sea for a long time.
On our way back to the hotel, I lieaned on the window and just letted the wind caress my face.
Past tense of let is still let, haha
I looked at the sky, or looked at the buildings, or the the people we passed by.
I felt like I was living in a movie.
It was so good to just be a passenger in a car.
After I took a bath, my friend was singing karaoke.
I joined her at once, though the tone qualitymy singing was really bad.
Quality of the microphone or of your singing? Sorry for assuming one way or the other :P
We had a good time.
There were two guys playing a bBoxing cChampion '97 on a new gamarcade machine just bought by the boss.
How new could it be if it's playing games from 1997, haha
I asked one of them if I could have a try, he nodded.
He taught me how the play, and we play several rounds.
He left with his friend, another boy sat down and played with me, and taught me some skills.
It was hot out, but I was really happy.
I was ghungry again.
I haung out with my friend.
There were so many people in the street.
We had some snacks.
I had am really exciting today!
WishI hope you have a good day as well.
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Nice writing! Glad fate's finally smiling on you for a change.
Oct. 6, 2021
When I arrived at the hotel, I asked themy boss to park my car because there were so many people and so many cars, and I was so scared.
The owner of the hotel.
Oct. 6, 2021
I joined her at once, though the tone qualitymy singing was really bad.
Both are bad~
Oct. 6, 2021
The owner of the hotel.
Oh, did you know them beforehand or something?
Oct. 6, 2021
Oh, did you know them beforehand or something?
No, after I booked the room, the owner added my wechat, and told me some details of checking. What's more, he talked with me like I were his old friend.
Oct. 6, 2021
No, after I booked the room, the owner added my wechat, and told me some details of checking. What's more, he talked with me like I were his old friend.
这样表现不是有点奇怪/太友好吗？
Oct. 6, 2021
我也这样认为。我们住店期间，他开我的车，带我们出去玩了几次。我们还蹭了他几顿饭，然后帮他搞清洁作为补偿。
我觉得他就是太寂寞了，需要点陪伴吧。
Oct. 6, 2021
我也这样认为。我们住店期间，他开我的车，带我们出去玩了几次。我们还蹭了他几顿饭，然后帮他搞清洁作为补偿。 我觉得他就是太寂寞了，需要点陪伴吧。
那我应该故事里解释你和酒店长的关系，要不然读者应该感觉有点confused
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I finished my part-time job at noon. I finished |
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I had lunch and slept for a while. I had lunch and then slept for a while. |
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When I woke up, I was fairely upset because I didn't sleep well. When I woke up, I was fair If you were upset at the fact that you didn't sleep well, and not just in a bad mood, then "upset" is fine. |
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I went to pick up my friend at 2. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was quite hot, even though I sat in the car, I still felt pain by the sunshine. It was quite hot |
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I thoght my car was hit by a three wheels bike driving by an old couple, and they were so rude. I th |
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There was traffic jam, and I thoght the couple would never admit their fault and compensate, so I went on. There was traffic jam, and I thought there was no way the couple would |
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There was a part of the road under constructing, so it was quite jolting as I was driving a go-kart. There was a part of the road under construction |
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When I arrived at the hotel, I asked the boss to park my car because there were so many people and so many cars, I was so scared. When I arrived at the hotel, I asked Who is the boss? Your boss from work? |
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I told him I was hungry and want to eat outside, then I can go swimming with him. I told him I was hungry and wanted to eat outside, and then I |
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He invited me to eat his prawns which he cooked half an hour ago. He invited me to eat |
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The prawn was not cheap here, so it was very kind of him.
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I ate something dilicious at a reastaurant with my friend. I ate something d |
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The boss drove my car and took us to the beach. Then, my boss drove my car and took us to the beach. |
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He once told me that he would take me to a special and beautiful beach, but we stopped at a scenic spot where were so many people. He Once here is again like 曾经 |
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I felt a little disappointed at first, when I jumped into the sea, I forget everything. I felt a little disappointed at first, but, when I jumped into the sea, I forg |
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I sat in the water and letted the water to take me anywhere. I sat in the water and let |
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It felt quite special and awesome as I hadn't experienced it for a few years. It felt quite special and awesome, as I hadn't experienced it for a few years. |
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If it didn't getting darker and darker, I would have been playing in the sea for a long time. If it |
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On our way back to the hotel, I lied on the window just letted the wind caress my face. On our way back to the hotel, I l Past tense of let is still let, haha |
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I looked at the sky, or looked at the buildings, or the the people passed by. I looked at the sky, or looked at the buildings, or the the people we passed by. |
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I felt like I was living in a movie. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was so good to just be a passenger in a car. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After I took a bath, my friend was singing karaoke. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I joined her at once though the tone quality was really bad. I joined her at once, though Quality of the microphone or of your singing? Sorry for assuming one way or the other :P |
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We had a good time. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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There were two guys playing a boxing champion 97 on a new game machine just bought by the boss. There were two guys playing How new could it be if it's playing games from 1997, haha |
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I asked one of them if I could have a try, he nodded. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He taught me how the play, and we play several rounds. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He left with his friend, another boy sat down and played with me, and taught me some skills. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was hot, but I was really happy. It was hot out, but I was really happy. |
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I was gungry again. I was |
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I hang out with my friend. I h |
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There were so many people in the street. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We had some snack. We had some snacks. |
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I am really exciting today! I had a |
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Wish you have a good day as well.
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