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kiwy

Dec. 15, 2021

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I took my niece to the neighborhood square tonight. We were playing in the slide. A girl said that my niece looked like a baby boy. I told her that she made a mistake. She then told me that she also had a baby sister. I asked her age, and she told me she was 5.5 years old. After soon, her grandma showed up with her sister, who was about nine months old. Minutes later, I saw a couple talking with the girl and asked her to go home. Her mother was pregnant, maybe five months? I think they wanted a son, which they needed much. Why? Because of the ugly tradition.

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aA Son

I took my niece to the neighborhood square tonight.

We were playing ion the slide.

A girl said that my niece looked like a baby boy.

I told her that she made awas mistaken.

She then told me that she also had a baby sister.

I asked her age, and she told me she was 5.5 years old.

After soona little while, her grandma showed up with her sister, who was about nine months old.

Or "soon after." Also consider that the second "her" is technically ambiguous in its reference to the girl or the grandma.

Minutes later, I saw a couple talking with the girl, and they asked her to go home.

Her mother was pregnant, maybe five months?

I think they wanted a son, which they needed very much.

你可以多解释一下这里的“需要”吗,觉得意思不太清楚。

Why?

Because of the ugly tradition of favoring boys over girls.

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Nice! 希望重男轻女这个现象在未来会缓解

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kiwy

Dec. 16, 2021

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I think they wanted a son, which they needed very much.

That will be a long story.

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sivanc

Dec. 16, 2021

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我已经理解深层关于生育男孩子的社会期望,就是想clarify他们的这个需要是出于符合社会期望的考虑还是他们自己的原因?

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kiwy

Dec. 17, 2021

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Maybe both.

aA Son

Although it's not a noun and wouldn't normally be capitalised in a title, it is capitalised here because it starts a sentence.

I took my niece to the neighborhood square tonight.

We were playing ion the slide.

A girl said that my niece looked like a baby boy.

This is a little tricky. Unless you want to emphasise that the girl said your niece looked specifically like a male baby, you would usually just say "looked like a boy". This first instance might occur when you're talking about someone who is "baby-faced" and looks younger than they are. But otherwise, in most cases, you'd be talking about mixing up the genders. This is very picky though, so don't worry too much about it!

I told her that she had made a mistake.

She then told me that she also had a baby sister.

I asked her age, and she told me she was 5.5 and a half years old.

In spoken English, kids often say they are "5 and a half years old", and it's typically written this way too. This is the only case I can think of when we write out "and a half" instead of using .5 as you have.

After soonSoon after, her grandma showed up with her sister, who was about nine months old.

Minutes later, I saw a couple talking with the girl and asked her to gocome home.

I think you might mean "come home" here, but I could be wrong. "Go home" = the couple is staying in the square but has asked the child to go home without them. "Come home" = the couple is going home and has asked the child to come with them.

Her mother was pregnant, maybe five months?

I think they wanted a son, which they very much needed much.

Why?

Because of thean ugly tradition.

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A nicely written story :)

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kiwy

Dec. 16, 2021

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Thank you.

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aA Son

Although it's not a noun and wouldn't normally be capitalised in a title, it is capitalised here because it starts a sentence.

aA Son

I took my niece to the neighborhood square tonight.


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We were playing in the slide.


We were playing ion the slide.

We were playing ion the slide.

A girl said that my niece looked like a baby boy.


A girl said that my niece looked like a baby boy.

This is a little tricky. Unless you want to emphasise that the girl said your niece looked specifically like a male baby, you would usually just say "looked like a boy". This first instance might occur when you're talking about someone who is "baby-faced" and looks younger than they are. But otherwise, in most cases, you'd be talking about mixing up the genders. This is very picky though, so don't worry too much about it!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I told her that she made a mistake.


I told her that she had made a mistake.

I told her that she made awas mistaken.

She then told me that she also had a baby sister.


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She then told me that she also had a baby sister.

I asked her age, and she told me she was 5.5 years old.


I asked her age, and she told me she was 5.5 and a half years old.

In spoken English, kids often say they are "5 and a half years old", and it's typically written this way too. This is the only case I can think of when we write out "and a half" instead of using .5 as you have.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

After soon, her grandma showed up with her sister, who was about nine months old.


After soonSoon after, her grandma showed up with her sister, who was about nine months old.

After soona little while, her grandma showed up with her sister, who was about nine months old.

Or "soon after." Also consider that the second "her" is technically ambiguous in its reference to the girl or the grandma.

Minutes later, I saw a couple talking with the girl and asked her to go home.


Minutes later, I saw a couple talking with the girl and asked her to gocome home.

I think you might mean "come home" here, but I could be wrong. "Go home" = the couple is staying in the square but has asked the child to go home without them. "Come home" = the couple is going home and has asked the child to come with them.

Minutes later, I saw a couple talking with the girl, and they asked her to go home.

Her mother was pregnant, maybe five months?


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I think they wanted a son, which they needed much.


I think they wanted a son, which they very much needed much.

I think they wanted a son, which they needed very much.

你可以多解释一下这里的“需要”吗,觉得意思不太清楚。

Why?


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Because of the ugly tradition.


Because of thean ugly tradition.

Because of the ugly tradition of favoring boys over girls.

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