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Oct. 10, 2022

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A small role

Last month a film crew came to my city and I got a small role in their film.
I still can't get over the fact that my dreams have come true at length. The film crew were/ had been looking for a blue-eyed and dark-haired teenage boy which was my exact reflection. Another criterion was to be fluent in Spanish which luckily correlated with my skills. Before my adventure on set started I had had to memorise my part of the script and spent long hours in front of the mirror trying to embody a futuristic DNA scientist creating child prodigies. Although I'm not a born actor and my embarrassment left me tongue-tied at one moment, it was outweighed by the intensity of the music and multitude of dizzying rainbow lights beaming at me.
I would like to invite you over at the weekend so you could watch this film. It would shurely be to your taste as you are such a science geek. Feel free to critically evaluate my acting ability. I count on you to help me discover what was strong and what still needs work.

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I still can't get over the fact that my dreams have come true at lengthast.

The film crew were/ had been looking for a blue-eyed and dark-haired teenage boy which was my exact reflecmatched my description.

Another criteriona was to be fluent in Spanish which luckily correlated with my skillsI am.

Before my adventure on set started I had had toto have memorised my part of the script and spent long hours in front of the mirror trying to embody my role: a futuristic DNA scientist creating child prodigies.

Although I'm not a born actor and my embarrassment left me tongue-tied at one moment, it was outweighed point, my feelings were overthrown by the intensity of the music and multitude of dizzying rainbow lights beaming at me.

I would like to invite you over atduring the weekend so you couldan watch this film.

It would shurely be to your taste as you are such a science geek.

Feel free to critically evaluate my acting ability.

I count on you to help me discover whatere I was strong and whatere I still needs work.

The film crew were/ had been looking for a blue-eyed and dark-haired dark-haired, blue-eyed teenage boy which was my exact reflection.

This is a bit of a nitpick but I think having hair colour before the eye colour seems a little bit more natural, see "blonde-haired blue-eyed"

Another criterion was to be fluent in Spanish which luckily correlated with my skillsI am.

"correlated with my skills" sounds like something you would say at a job interview.

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dragonzy has already covered most of the article - just wanted to give some of my input as well.

Last month a film crew came to my city and I got, I auditioned for a small rolepart in their film and got the role.

I still can't get over the fact that my dreams have now come true at length.

The film crew were/ had been looking for a blue-eyed and dark-haired teenage boy, which was my exacthappens to resemble my own reflection.

I would like to invite you to come over at theis weekend, so you couldan watch this film.

Feel free to critically evaluategive me some constructive criticism, so I can evaluate and improve at my acting ability.

A small role


Last month a film crew came to my city and I got a small role in their film.


Last month a film crew came to my city and I got, I auditioned for a small rolepart in their film and got the role.

I still can't get over the fact that my dreams have come true at length.


I still can't get over the fact that my dreams have now come true at length.

I still can't get over the fact that my dreams have come true at lengthast.

The film crew were/ had been looking for a blue-eyed and dark-haired teenage boy which was my exact reflection.


The film crew were/ had been looking for a blue-eyed and dark-haired teenage boy, which was my exacthappens to resemble my own reflection.

The film crew were/ had been looking for a blue-eyed and dark-haired dark-haired, blue-eyed teenage boy which was my exact reflection.

This is a bit of a nitpick but I think having hair colour before the eye colour seems a little bit more natural, see "blonde-haired blue-eyed"

The film crew were/ had been looking for a blue-eyed and dark-haired teenage boy which was my exact reflecmatched my description.

Another criterion was to be fluent in Spanish which luckily correlated with my skills.


Another criterion was to be fluent in Spanish which luckily correlated with my skillsI am.

"correlated with my skills" sounds like something you would say at a job interview.

Another criteriona was to be fluent in Spanish which luckily correlated with my skillsI am.

Before my adventure on set started I had had to memorise my part of the script and spent long hours in front of the mirror trying to embody a futuristic DNA scientist creating child prodigies.


Before my adventure on set started I had had toto have memorised my part of the script and spent long hours in front of the mirror trying to embody my role: a futuristic DNA scientist creating child prodigies.

Although I'm not a born actor and my embarrassment left me tongue-tied at one moment, it was outweighed by the intensity of the music and multitude of dizzying rainbow lights beaming at me.


Although I'm not a born actor and my embarrassment left me tongue-tied at one moment, it was outweighed point, my feelings were overthrown by the intensity of the music and multitude of dizzying rainbow lights beaming at me.

I would like to invite you over at the weekend so you could watch this film.


I would like to invite you to come over at theis weekend, so you couldan watch this film.

I would like to invite you over atduring the weekend so you couldan watch this film.

It would shurely be to your taste as you are such a science geek.


It would shurely be to your taste as you are such a science geek.

Feel free to critically evaluate my acting ability.


Feel free to critically evaluategive me some constructive criticism, so I can evaluate and improve at my acting ability.

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I count on you to help me discover what was strong and what still needs work.


I count on you to help me discover whatere I was strong and whatere I still needs work.

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