March 19, 2023
A Small Piece of English
A few years ago, I went to Huizhou (near Shenzhen). My car needed to add gasoline. I drove to a gas station.
Next to the gas station, a person was selling simple street food. I bought rice and a kind of fried pork. The pork was really delicious.
Even now, I can still remember the taste of the pork. Unfortunately, I can't remember the exact location of the gas station now.
If I could remember the location, I’d like to eat the fried pork one more time if one day I go there again.
So I drove to a gas station.
NexI went to the gas station, next, I could see a person was selling simple street food.
March 20, 2023
Thank you so much!
A Smallhort Piece ofin English
Short is used to describe length, small is for the size of things.
IN English --> for preposition we say IN a language
My carI needed to add gasolinefill up my car with gas.
While not grammatically incorrect, it is more common to say "fill up a car with gas".
Next to the gas station, a personhawker was selling simple street food.
Hawker = 小販
I bought rice and a kindtype of fried pork.
type = 一種；sort = 一類
Unfortunately, I can't remember/recall the exact location of the gas station now.
If you want to vary your use of words, you can consider replacing "remember" with "recall".
If I could remember the location, I’d like to eat the fried pork again/once more time if one day I go there againif I return one day.
"Go there again" is not grammatically incorrect but you can consider replacing it with "return".
One day is typically used at the beginning or before a punctuation mark, but rarely in the middle of a sentence.
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An excellent short story! You can consider writing longer pieces :)
March 20, 2023
谢谢您的修改。我学到了一个新单词hawker，type 和 kind 的区别，small 和 short 区別，以及in 的用法。再次向您表示感谢！
If I could remember the location, I’d like to go back just to eat the fried pork one more time if one day I go there again.
Your original sentence has two aspects that seem weird to me:
1) Why do you want to eat it just “one” more time? Why not go there once a year, for example?
2) “if one day I go there again”: we don’t usually use two “if” clauses in one sentence. Also, logically, even though you don’t remember its location, you still might happen to go there again, in the same way that you happened upon it the first time. Therefore, the second “if” clause would work better without the first: “I’d like to eat the fried pork if one day I happen to go there again.”
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The other sentences seem fine to me, although some of them are too short, as others have said.
For example:
“A few years ago, during a trip to Huizhou (near Shenzhen), my car was low on gas so I drove to a gas station.”
Alternative:
“During a road trip a few years ago, I stopped at a gas station in Huizhou, near Shenzhen.”
A Small Piece of English
A few years ago, I went to Huizhou (near Shenzhen).
My car needed to add gasoline.
I drove to a gas station.
Next to the gas station, a person was selling simple street food.
I bought rice and a kind of fried pork.
The pork was really delicious.
Even now, I can still remember the taste of the pork.
Unfortunately, I can't remember the exact location of the gas station now.
If I could remember the location, I’d like to eat the fried pork one more time if one day I go there again.
March 20, 2023
Thank you so much!
My car needed to add gasoline. so
You could also say "I need to add gasoline to my car". I think it sounds better to join this and the sentence together with "so".
Next to the gas station, a person was selling simple street food. and
I joined this and the next sentence together because I think it sounds better
The pork was really delicious. and
Same as before
Eeven now, I can still remember the taste of the pork.
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Good work, just remember that you can join sentences together with connectives but otherwise almost perfect :)
March 19, 2023
Thank you very much!
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I drove to a gas station. This sentence has been marked as perfect! So I drove to a gas station. |
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My car needed to add gasoline. My car needed You could also say "I need to add gasoline to my car". I think it sounds better to join this and the sentence together with "so". My car needed
While not grammatically incorrect, it is more common to say "fill up a car with gas". |
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A Small Piece of English This sentence has been marked as perfect! A S Short is used to describe length, small is for the size of things. IN English --> for preposition we say IN a language |
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A few years ago, I went to Huizhou (near Shenzhen). This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Next to the gas station, a person was selling simple street food. Next to the gas station, a person was selling simple street food I joined this and the next sentence together because I think it sounds better This sentence has been marked as perfect! Next to the gas station, a Hawker = 小販
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I bought rice and a kind of fried pork. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I bought rice and a type = 一種；sort = 一類 |
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The pork was really delicious. The pork was really delicious Same as before This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Even now, I can still remember the taste of the pork.
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Unfortunately, I can't remember the exact location of the gas station now. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Unfortunately, I can't remember/recall the exact location of the gas station now. If you want to vary your use of words, you can consider replacing "remember" with "recall". |
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If I could remember the location, I’d like to eat the fried pork one more time if one day I go there again. This sentence has been marked as perfect! If I could remember the location, I’d like to go back just to eat the fried pork Your original sentence has two aspects that seem weird to me: 1) Why do you want to eat it just “one” more time? Why not go there once a year, for example? 2) “if one day I go there again”: we don’t usually use two “if” clauses in one sentence. Also, logically, even though you don’t remember its location, you still might happen to go there again, in the same way that you happened upon it the first time. Therefore, the second “if” clause would work better without the first: “I’d like to eat the fried pork if one day I happen to go there again.” If I could remember the location, I’d like to eat the fried pork again/once more "Go there again" is not grammatically incorrect but you can consider replacing it with "return". One day is typically used at the beginning or before a punctuation mark, but rarely in the middle of a sentence. |
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