Feb. 1, 2022
A Shot in the Dark - P40
Part forty.
This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it.)
Harry Jupiter has never set foot in Brighton before. He is, therefore, new to Brighton’s dynamics. His work as a crime reporter for the Daily Clarion keeps him busy enough in London. Besides, his well established and mutually beneficial alliance with DCI Peplow of the Metropolitan Police is another reason why Jupiter works exclusively in London and the villages* round about. It is certainly a cosy arrangement. Jupiter ensures that Peoplow, and his deputies, comes out of all investigations brilliantly, while Peplow makes sure Jupiter gets exclusive, full access to ongoing police inquiries. As a result of which, they have both risen to prominance and fame.
When it comes down to crime reporting, Jupiter regards details as key. Indeed, the usage of details is a trademark of his. Jupiter first made his name covering a peculiar, nasty murder case. The corpse, or its remains, was found in an acid bath. He made a brilliant use of the ghastly details. It did not matter to Peplow these details were made up. He even provided himself these pieces of evidence for the trial.
*Can I omit “the villages”?
Part forty.40
This is how we'd usually write it in the US.
Besides, his well established and mutually beneficial alliance with DCI Peplow of the Metropolitan Police is another reason why Jupiter works exclusively in London and the villages* round aboutits surrounding area.
US alternative
It is certainly a cosy arrangement.
Jupiter ensures that Peoplow, and his deputies, comes out of all investigations brilliantlylooking fabulous, while Peplow makes sure Jupiter gets exclusive, full access to ongoing police inquiries.
As a result of which, they have both risen to prominaence and fame.
When it comes down to crime reporting, Jupiter regards details as key.
This sounds more natural in the US.
Indeed, the usage of details is a trademark of his.
Jupiter first made his name covering a peculiar, and nasty murder case.
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Jupiter first made his name covering a peculiarly nasty murder case.
He made a brilliant use of the ghastly details.
This is technically correct but it sounds strange.
It did not matter to Peplow that these details were made up.
He himself even provided himself these pieces of "evidence" for the trial.
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Yes, you may omit "the villages." Good job!
Feb. 2, 2022
thanks
A Shot in the Dark - P40
Part fForty.
This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it. )
Harry Jupiter has never set foot in Brighton before.
He is, therefore, new to Brighton’s dynamics.
Besides, his well established and mutually beneficial alliance with DCI Peplow of the Metropolitan Police is another reason why Jupiter works exclusively in London and the villages* round aboutsurrounding villages*.
It is certainly a cosy arrangement.
"It is" is often said/written as "it's".
Jupiter ensures that Peoplow, and his deputies, comes out of all their investigations brilliantly, while Peplow makes sure Jupiter gets exclusive, full access to ongoing police inquiries.
As a result of which, they have both risen to prominance and fame.
"They have" is often said/written as "they've".
When it comes down to crime reporting, Jupiter regards details as key.
Indeed, the usage of details is a trademark of his.
Jupiter first made his name covering a nasty and peculiar, nasty murder case.
The corpse, or its remains of it, was found in an acid bath.
He made a brilliantly use of thed ghastly details in his report.
It did not matter to Peplow that these details were made up.
He even provided himselfin person these pieces ofas evidence forduring the trial.
*Can I omit “the villages”?
I'm not really sure (I'm not familiar with London) but I'm going to say no? It might depend.
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Great Job! Just a few corrections!
Feb. 2, 2022
The corpse, or its remains of it, was found in an acid bath.
Given your correction, shouldn't it be "...or the remains of it..."?
Feb. 2, 2022
Thanks
Feb. 2, 2022
Yes! You're correct! Although rereading now, I would phrase it as, "The corpse, or what remained of it, was found in an acid bath".
Feb. 3, 2022
Many thanks!
A Shot in the Dark - P40
Part forty.
This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it. )
Harry Jupiter has never set foot in Brighton before.
He is, therefore, new to Brighton’s dynamics.
His work as a crime reporter for the Daily Clarion keeps him busy enough in London.
Besides, his well established and mutually beneficial alliance with DCI Peplow of the Metropolitan Police is another reason why Jupiter works exclusively in London and the villages* round about.
It is certainly a cosy arrangement.
Jupiter ensures that Peoplow, and his deputies, comes out of all investigations brilliantly, while Peplow makes sure Jupiter gets exclusive, full access to ongoing police inquiries.
As a result of whichthis arrangement, they have both risen to prominaence and fame.
When it comes down to crime reporting, Jupiter regards details as key.
Indeed, the usage of details is a trademark of his.
Jupiter first made his name covering a peculiar, nasty murder case.
The corpse, or its remains, was found in an acid bath.
He made a brilliant use of the ghastly details.
It did not matter to Peplow that these details were made up.
He evenhimself had provided himself these pieces of evidence for the trial.
*Can I omit “the villages”?
If you just remove it and put nothing in its place, the sentence feels weird and like something is missing.
Feb. 2, 2022
Thanks
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