Jan. 30, 2022
A Shot in the Dark - P39
Part thirty-nine.
This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it.)
Miss Sibert is genuinely upset. That manuscript* contained months of hard work. However, constable Twitten comes up with another idea. They do not need Crystal’s memoirs, she can just acquaint Twitten with her discoveries**. Hence, Twitten decides they will meet up in London. Before she hungs up, he takes out a copy of the play to read a specific passage out to her. He explains that when an actor on stage said this sentence, Crystal looked stunned and started scribbling something down in haste. But then Crystal was shot dead. Whatever he was trying to write remained half-written with little meaning. So, Twitten proceeds to read this passage out, “Anymore for anymore?” Miss Sibert’s reaction is remarkable. She gasps, “The breakthrough, mein Gott,”—she is a German native speaker. She explains that these were the very words one of the thieves, who was a female, said to Crystal during the*** bank robbery. In her excitement, Miss Sibert hungs up. Twitten then heads for the station ticket office.
*manuscript: Crystal's memoirs, which were gone.
**discoveries: Miss Sibert helped to retrieved long-hidden memories of Crystal’s through psychology methods. They did retrieve lots of memories, which were all reported in Crystal's memoirs. So, is it right to use “discoveries”?
***this bank robbery was a known subject to both Twitten and Miss Sibert. Hence, I used “the”.
A Shot in the Dark - P39
Part thirty-nine.
This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it. )
Miss Sibert is genuinely upset.
That manuscript* contained months of hard work.
However, constable Twitten comes up with another idea.
They do not need Crystal’s memoirs, she can just acquainttell Twitten with her discoveries**.
Hence, Twitten decides they will meet up in London.
Before she huangs up, he takes out a copy of the play to read a specific passage out to her.
He explains that when an actor on stage saidys this sentence, Crystal lookeds stunned and starteds scribbling something down in haste.
Present tense
But then Crystal wais shot dead.
Changed to the present tense
Whatever he wais trying to write remained half-written with little meaning.
Present tense
So, Twitten proceeds to read this passage out, “Anymore for anymore?” Miss Sibert’s reaction is remarkable.
She gasps, “The breakthrough, mein Gott,”—she is a German native speaker.
She explains that these were the very words one of the thieves, who was a female, said to Crystal during the*** bank robbery.
In her excitement, Miss Sibert huangs up.
Twitten then heads for the station ticket office.
*manuscript: Crystal's memoirs, which were gone.
**discoveries: Miss Sibert helped to retrieved long-hidden memories of Crystal’s through psychology methods.
They did retrieve lots of memories, which were all reported in Crystal's memoirs.
So, is it right to use “discoveries”?
Yes
***this bank robbery was a known subject to both Twitten and Miss Sibert.
Hence, I used “the”.
Jan. 31, 2022
thanks
However, cConstable Twitten comes up with another idea.
normally titles will be capitalized here.
They do not need Crystal’s memoirs,; she can just acquaint Twitten with her discoveries**.
technically speaking you can't separate two independent clauses with a comma like this
Before she huangs up, he takes out a copy of the play to read a specific passage out to her.
if you are using present tense, hangs up
He explains that when an actor on stage had said this sentence, Crystal looked stunned and started scribbling something down in haste.
this sentence is a little unclear if it's happening in the past, some event in Crystal's memoir, so here past perfect will clarify that
So, Twitten proceeds to read thise passage out,. “Anymore for anymore?” Miss Sibert’s reaction is remarkable.
She explains that these were the very words that one of the thieves, who was a female, said to Crystal during the*** bank robbery.
In her excitement, Miss Sibert huangs up.
Jan. 31, 2022
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That manuscript* contained months of hard work. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They do not need Crystal’s memoirs, she can just acquaint Twitten with her discoveries**. They do not need Crystal’s memoirs technically speaking you can't separate two independent clauses with a comma like this They do not need Crystal’s memoirs, she can just |
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She gasps, “The breakthrough, mein Gott,”—she is a German native speaker. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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She explains that these were the very words one of the thieves, who was a female, said to Crystal during the*** bank robbery. She explains that these were the very words that one of the thieves, who was a female, said to Crystal during the*** bank robbery. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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**discoveries: Miss Sibert helped to retrieved long-hidden memories of Crystal’s through psychology methods. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They did retrieve lots of memories, which were all reported in Crystal's memoirs. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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So, is it right to use “discoveries”? So, is it right to use “discoveries”? Yes |
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***this bank robbery was a known subject to both Twitten and Miss Sibert. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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