Feb. 18, 2022
A Shot in the Dark - 46
Part no. 46.
This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it.)
Inspector Steine considers how to properly word his reply, so as not to give away both his annoyance and further details of the ongoing investigation. “Our enquiries are still at an early stage. We can’t release further statements. Moreover, I need to get on with my script talk,” said Steine with a brisk tone so that Jupiter could not cut in. At this point, it dawns on Jupiter that he must change his approach if he wants to win over Steine. Bringing up the Middle Street Massacre could be the way to go about it. The Middle Street Massacre was a landmark event in Brighton, but was also the greatest achievement of Inspector Steine—though Steine did nothing at all, but so be it. When Jupiter starts to discuss it, he cunningly does not fail to look interested in the whole affair. He even makes himself out to be a keen admirer of this pivotal event ever since it occured. Sure enough, Steine does fall for it. The more Jupiter talks nostalgically about it, the more Steine gets flattered. To Steine’s credit, Jupiter is a master at deceiving people.
A Shot in the Dark - 46
This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it. )
Inspector Steine considers how to properly word his reply, so as not to give away both his annoyance and furtherto learn more details of the ongoing investigation.
“Our einquiries are still at an early stage.
We can’t release further statements.
Moreover, I need to get on with my script talkpeech,” said Steine with a brisk tonecurtly so that Jupiter could not cut in.
At this point, it dawns on Jupiter that he must change his approach if he wants to win over Steine.
Bringing up the Middle Street Massacre could be the way to go about it.
The Middle Street Massacre was a landmark event in Brighton, but it was also theInspector Steine's greatest achievement of Inspector Steine—though Steine did nothing at all, but so be it.
I feel like the ending of the sentence, "though Steine did nothing at all, but so be it" doesn't make much sense in this context. Do you mean, Steine didn't actually solve the case himself, he just happened to get lucky?
When Jupiter starts to discuss it, he cunningly does not fail to lpretends not to be took interested in the whole affair.
He even makes himself out to be a keen admirer of this pivotal event ever since it occured.
I feel like this doesn't follow logically from the previous sentence; he's affecting an air of indifference initially, but then he becomes a keen admirer?
Also, you should clarify that he's a keen admirer of Steine, not of the event itself (a massacre).
Sure enough, Steine does falls for it.
The more Jupiter talks nostalgically about it, the more Steine gets flattered.
To Steine’s credit, Jupiter is a master at deceiving people.
Feb. 18, 2022
The Middle Street Massacre was a landmark event in Brighton, but it was also theInspector Steine's greatest achievement of Inspector Steine—though Steine did nothing at all, but so be it.
Yes, I meant that.
A Shot in the Dark - 46
Part no.
46.
This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it. )
Inspector Steine considers how to properly word his reply, so as not to give away both his annoyance and further details of the ongoing investigation.
“Our enquiries are still at an early stage.
We can’t release further statements.
Moreover, I need to get on with my script talk,” said Steine with a brisk tone so that Jupiter could not cut in.
At this point, it dawns on Jupiter that he must change his approach if he wants to win over Steine.
Bringing up the Middle Street Massacre could be the way to go about it.
The Middle Street Massacre was a landmark event in Brighton, but was also the greatest achievement of Inspector Steine—though Steine did nothing at all, but so be it.
When Jupiter starts to discuss it, he cunningly does not fail to look interested in the whole affair.
He even makes himself out to be a keen admirer of this pivotal event ever since it occured.
Sure enough, Steine does fall for it.
Surely enough*
The more Jupiter talks nostalgically about it, the more Steine gets flattered.
To Steine’s credit, Jupiter is a master at deceiving people.
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Only one error out of the whole paragraph. Well done and keep it up! You write quite well and you seem articulate too.
Feb. 18, 2022
Many thanks
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