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Men have love, but women don’t. Why? Because men treat people kindly because they love them. They love people first before they treat others well. But for women, no matter how well you treat them, they do not necessarily have an affection for you. Because women value money instead of affection, and that’s totally opposite to men. Am I right?


It’s translated from a short Chinese paragraph stated by a woman on Chinese tiktok.

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Men have love, but women don’t.


Men havdemonstrate love, but women don’t. Men demonstrate love, but women don’t.

Men have love, but women don’t. Men have love, but women don’t.

“Have love” is such a vague phrase that I would hesitate to use it. It could mean “feel love,” “show love,” “love others,” “experience love” or even “have sexual intercourse.” If the Chinese phrase is “男人有爱” men translate it as “men love”: Men love but women don’t.

Why?


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Because men treat people kindly because they love them.


Because men tlove people and treat them kindly. Or. Men Treat people kindly because they love them. Because men love people and treat them kindly. Or. Men Treat people kindly because they love them.

Try to avoid repeating because

Because mMen treat people kindly because they love them. Men treat people kindly because they love them.

Because men treat people kindly because they love them. Because men treat people kindly because they love them.

It’s OK to begin a sentence with “because” when it comes right after the question “why?” And I don’t have any problem using “because” twice in this sentence. If we could use character formatting in our corrections, I would put the second “because” in italics for emphasis.

They love people first before they treat others well.


They truly love people first before they treat othersm well. They truly love people first before they treat them well.

They love people first before they treat othersm well. They love people first before they treat them well.

Using “others” makes it sound like the “people” they love are not the “others” (other people) that they treat well.

But for women, no matter how well you treat them, they do not necessarily have an affection for you.


But for women, no matter how well you treat them, they do not necessarily have an affection for you. But for women, no matter how well you treat them, they do not necessarily have affection for you.

But for women, no matter how well you treat them, they do not necessarily have an affection for you. But for women, no matter how well you treat them, they do not necessarily have affection for you.

But for women, no matter how well you treat them, they do not necessarily have an affection for you. But for women, no matter how well you treat them, they do not necessarily have affection for you.

Because women value money instead of affection, and that’s totally opposite to men.


Because wWomen value money instead of affection, and that’s totallywhich is completely the opposite tof men. Women value money instead of affection, which is completely the opposite of men.

B(This is because) women value money instead of affection, [and that’s | which is] totally opposite to men. (This is because) women value money instead of affection, [and that’s | which is] totally opposite to men.

I would omit “because,” but if you want to keep it, you could either merge this sentence with the previous sentence, or add “this is” before “because.”

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